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anticupid16

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PostPosted: Sun Mar 13, 2011 10:37 pm


“You are all cowards! A plague falls across our town, and this is what you do? Chase a young girl into your town square, hurt her, and threaten to kill her? Is it because I am an orphan that you so mistreat me? Because I have white skin, where you have olive; because I have dark hair, and green eyes? If it is not how I look, then how I act? What have I done to deserve reproach?
From the time I was a babe, I have appreciated your town and your generosity. All you have done for me is to take me in when I was a crying infant with no mother and no father. A great favor that was! Have you forgotten that? I have never! From the day I could, I cared for myself, and did what I could for all of you! How many of you have come to me and asked for me to care for your children? How many of you have asked for my assistance in some way? How many of you have I refused? None!
I have not called this plague down from the skies, or up from the earth or the sea! I am no witch, and I have no such powers! You are all daft if you think that I could do such as this! Think long and hard. Think! What have I done to deserve this treatment? The town is sick because our Lord does not wish to find a clean well, as it would take too much time! He does not want to give us fresh bread, or healthy cattle, because it takes too much money! If you want someone to blame, cast your eyes on he! For I, Alessa, an orphan and one of you, have done nothing wrong! I have done nothing wrong!”



-- It's not very long, but it's just supposed to be a quick, angry speech. Any suggestions?
PostPosted: Sun Mar 13, 2011 11:41 pm


Wow, this is very well written and it does read like an angry speech should. (I hope I worded that correctly.)

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anticupid16

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PostPosted: Sun Mar 13, 2011 11:42 pm


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Wow, this is very well written and it does read like an angry speech should. (I hope I worded that correctly.)
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Well, I'm glad you think so. I'm thinking of writing a story to lead up to that, but I'm not sure if it's up to par yet.

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