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Mrs Yachi-san
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 Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:06 am
Here are some of my poems and photography.
Please do not critique me, I got that enough from my teacher in high school.
All of my poems were just a way for me to express my emotions.
They weren't to make anyone happy or anything else, they were for me so I wouldn't bottle my emotions up.
Critique if you want, but just don't say my poetry is crap, or not written correctly or that I need to rhyme more.
I write how I write and that isn't going to change.
Or I used to write like that, don't write anymore.
Just please don't say anything negative about my last poem.
That one means too much to me and I have already had someone say it was basically complete crap.
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:08 am
Feelings of Despair
Written On: March 4th, 2007 @ 9:00pm
Written By: Jessica K.
My heart is breaking...
My heart is dieing...
I don't understand why I'm not crying...
I feel alone...
I feel so scared...
I don't know why I am still here...
My eyes are dry...
My eyes are clear...
But all I want to do is tremble here...
I'm feeling so hurt...
And I'm feeling so scared...
When all I want to do is trust in him...
He is out there alone...
Out there all cold...
When all he wants is to be home...
He is out there for us...
He is out there for them...
He is out there because he is determind to protect his friends...
He wants to come home...
Get away from the smell...
The smell of death and burning things...
He is alone...
I am alone...
When all we want is to be together...
I don't know if I can trust him...
Even though I try...
I just don't want to be the one to cry...
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Mrs Yachi-san
Mrs Yachi-san
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Mrs Yachi-san
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:09 am
Anger & Rage
Written on: 5/23/05
Written By: Jessica K.
Anger & rage consumes us all.
There is no way to control it.
We wish for ways to hide it,
Ways to disguise is.
We wish for people to take it out on...
Some seek revenge on the innocent or unwise.
People have no control over what they tend to do or say.
Some wish for the people to die,
Some wish the person ill,
Or some wish the person to hurt.
There is no way for is to know what the person wishes upon us all.
All we can do is hope & pray that we will be alright.
But we must remember this, never give up or give in.
Just keep your head held high and don't let anyone talk you out of something.
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:15 am
Unwilling
Written on: 5/27/05
Written By: Jessica K.
There are times in a persons life when they are unwilling to do things.
There are times when the person who is unwilling can't stop someone from taking advantage of them.
When things like this happen or almost happen the person tends to fade into themselves.
The person also tends to have a hard time trusting others and their own feelings.
You try your hardest to make them see,
To help them through what had happened or almost happened.
But there are times when your help can't make things better for them.
You continue to try and help them and make them as comfortable as possible.
All you can do is try and hope for the best and try and help your friend become better.
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Mrs Yachi-san
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Mrs Yachi-san
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:16 am
Hopes & Dreams
Written on: 7/2/05
Written By: Jessica K.
Every person sometime in their life will have hopes and dreams.!.!.!
Sometimes a persons hopes and dreams can be achieved,
We all strive to make our hopes and dreams become reality.!.!.!
There are times, though,
When our hopes and dreams are out of our reach and connot be accomplished.!.!.!
There are also times when out hopes and dreams are able to be reached but not without losses.!.!.!
Those are the times when our hopes and dreams matter the most,
For without losses things don't matter as much.!.!.!
To some, hopes and dreams don't really matter but to others,
They mean everything,
Even if it means taking a chance of them not coming true in the end.!.!.!
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:18 am
Feelings
Written on: 7/29/05
Written By: Jessica K.
Why must I hurt so much,
To worry about the one you love?
Is there a way to know,
To know what they truely feel,
Feel about you?
Or must we go on wondering,
"Do they truely love and care about me?"
Must we sit there and ask ourselves,
"Are they cheating or lying?
Are they being true to me?"
These are questions that have gone through all of our minds,
If not in the past,
But presently as well.
There are times when we hope and pray about the ones we love trying to tell ourselves,
"They would never do anything to hurt mr or decieve me."
But those hopes can turn around and prove us wrong.
We may wish on stars that things can last and be alright.
But as of right now,
What is running through my mind as I write this little poem,
Is that I hope that the man I am in love with will not,
End up hurting me.
For both he and I have gone though many relationships knowing:;
Pain, deciete, anger, rage, lies, cheating, and so many wasted days.
There are many things I wish to ask him,
But when I start to try and ask him I freeze up and never finish what I wish to say.
So here is to all that are like me,
Some words to you from a shy girl:
Follow your heart and soul,
Don't always believe what others say.
For you can never know the truth,
Unless you find your heart and your voice to be able to speak up and ask the person you are with.
So don't try and hide,
Or keep to yourself.
Get up and walk in the light and talk to others.
Have faith in yourself and in the one you love.
Well that is all I have to say and I hope that I have some how helped someone.
So just get out there and walk in the light with the one you care about and treasure.
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Mrs Yachi-san
Mrs Yachi-san
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Mrs Yachi-san
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:20 am
"Last Day, Last Time"
Written By: Jessica K.
In Memory of: Bobby K.
Born: April 26, 1964
Died: July 12, 1992
The last day I saw you,
You were ready to go fishing.
You had a fishing pole, and bate.
You asked mom if you could go, and she said yes.
You left in Papa's truck, and went to a lake outside of Phoenix.
And after you were finished fishing, you started to head back home.
But...you didn't return.
You were found hours later,
Crushed inside the truck.
Not moving,
Not breathing.
Not living, but not quite dead.
Even though your body was dead, your spirit was still living.
Your spirit will always live.
You will always live in me.
You will always be in my life.
You will always be with me.
You will always be loved by everyone...and by me.
We may be far apart.
We may be close together.
Nothing can keep me away from you.
I will love you always and forever.
You may never be here with me again,
But you will always be in my heart.
You will never be here with me again,
But I will always be there with you.
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:21 am
For tthe last poem I DO NOT want anything bad said about it in any way shape or form...NOTHING!!!
A poem I wrote about my father when I was a few years younger.
I hope you can enjoy this, and also understand what it means to me.
And that right there ^^^ is why I want NOTHING bad said about this poem...
I am not joking, if I see anything bad said about this poem I will not ask questions or ask you to delete your post I will delete it myself.
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Mrs Yachi-san
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Mrs Yachi-san
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:37 am
Sunsets and Clouds
Here is a photobucket folder that holds only a few of my many sunset and cloud pictures that I have taken.
Sadly all but those were deleted off of my computer when it crashed and I didn't have them saved any where else.
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:41 am
Oregon Trip
Here are two photobucket folders from when my husband, my brother in law and myself went to Oregon.
Most of the photos were taken by myself.
There are a few that were taken by my husband and his brother.
The photos taken at the waterfalls were taken by my husband or his brother.
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Mrs Yachi-san
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Mrs Yachi-san
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:45 am
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Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 2:36 pm
Hey. I was hired by the captain to bump up some of the threads in the subforums. He doesn't want them to be too empty. There are other thread bumpers, too! smile
Just sayin heyyy!
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Posted: Mon Feb 28, 2011 11:51 am
You should really let people critique you. i know you probably don't like it and your teachers do it a good bid, but you learn from it. And it would probabaly mean more coming from other writers your age. I'm actually going to college to become a writer. I would love to chat and exchange poetry and just critique each other anytime you would like. So just quote me. ^^
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 8:19 am
Keyoshi Storm You should really let people critique you. i know you probably don't like it and your teachers do it a good bid, but you learn from it. And it would probabaly mean more coming from other writers your age. I'm actually going to college to become a writer. I would love to chat and exchange poetry and just critique each other anytime you would like. So just quote me. ^^ I don't want that because I'm tired of hearing my writing is sht, its not real poetry because it doesn't rhyme or isn't written properly or anything else like that. Heck with my last poem, the one about my father, my teacher tore it to shreds verbally saying it basically was crap. Now I have had a few people say my poetry is good enough to be submitted to be in books, but those people were/are friends so how can I fully believe them? They could be saying that just to make me feel like I wrote ok. *shrugs*
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Mrs Yachi-san
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 11:48 am
Yachiru Delacroix Keyoshi Storm You should really let people critique you. i know you probably don't like it and your teachers do it a good bid, but you learn from it. And it would probabaly mean more coming from other writers your age. I'm actually going to college to become a writer. I would love to chat and exchange poetry and just critique each other anytime you would like. So just quote me. ^^ I don't want that because I'm tired of hearing my writing is sht, its not real poetry because it doesn't rhyme or isn't written properly or anything else like that. Heck with my last poem, the one about my father, my teacher tore it to shreds verbally saying it basically was crap. Now I have had a few people say my poetry is good enough to be submitted to be in books, but those people were/are friends so how can I fully believe them? They could be saying that just to make me feel like I wrote ok. *shrugs* There's no reason to get defensive. It would be a good idea to get a few people to critique you. Like me, i'm nice when I do it. I help and give tips and suggestions. It really will help, I promise. And besides, you should't listen to your teacher. She's stupid for doing something like that. Crap like that keeps kids from continuing with their writing. I like your stuff, I see some great stories behind all of them. Just keep writing, and if you do change your mind about letting people critique you, like I said, I'm here as a teacher, a writer, and a friend.
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