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 Posted: Tue Feb 01, 2011 8:06 pm
Rough poem I wrote one night at sea...still needs a lot of work
but here is the base of it
EDIT: I am keen to hear what any of you interpret any section to mean
Mr. Sammy Jones
A horse rider pro
Pie makers son
Took his life slow
Eats a lot of pickles
Whittles piece of wood
Making time for life
As he knows he should
Pops a piece of corn
Butters it up thick
Meeting Sally Moore
A girl who’s moving quick
Love leads marriage
Lifes way set
Predicabiliality
A standard you could bet
Race around the bend
Take the sale now
Green spandex sweater
Making no foul
Risk a day always
Breathers not today
Gotta get a going
This aint no scenic bay
She leads the great sky leap
Seven wasn’t planned
Two wheels a spinning
Minus ninety grand
Pump stations strained
A valve pops its cap
The red’n’blue white box
Keeps you in the gap
Sally needs a slow down
Sammy is a long time
Sally hot dog salad
Sammy pars on nine
Perhaps a breather? No way
Rest a need? Nay
Watering a break? nope
Maybe just to pray
Roses are pruned
A look across the field
Now lives the white cloud
The man who could not yield
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Posted: Tue Feb 01, 2011 8:26 pm
i started off totally understanding but around the 3/4 mark my brain couldnt handle it anymore and gave up lol
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Posted: Tue Feb 01, 2011 8:40 pm
Carrot57 i started off totally understanding but around the 3/4 mark my brain couldnt handle it anymore and gave up lol Yeah, its intended to be staccato, but still follow a logical progression, but certain parts of the progression are more figerative with less straight forward meanings. ^_^
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Posted: Wed Feb 02, 2011 6:29 pm
I...think I understand it. The story of a man who let his life get away from him? All thanks to that damn Sally Moore. Damn that Sally. Must be her last name. Nobody likes Moores.
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GoldDiggingWhore Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Feb 02, 2011 7:24 pm
@Gold, thats pretty much the long and short of it.
Each word group is meant to represent something...Care to disect any of them individually?
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Posted: Thu Feb 03, 2011 7:33 pm
Like many other things that come from your mind, I think I may need some help/hints doing that sweatdrop
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GoldDiggingWhore Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Feb 03, 2011 8:49 pm
XD, its all logical in my mind...Yet I know my mind dosent always follow paths which would be considered logical by others standards
of course I could help though
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Posted: Fri Feb 04, 2011 6:17 pm
Yus, the help would be muchly appreciated~
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GoldDiggingWhore Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Feb 04, 2011 7:58 pm
For example this is an easy one
Pump stations strained
A valve pops its cap
The red’n’blue white box
Keeps you in the gap
Pump station = ?
Pops it cap =?
Red'n'blue white box =?
Keeps you in the gap =?
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Posted: Sat Feb 05, 2011 3:53 am
Are all of those ? supposed to be the same thing?
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Posted: Sat Feb 05, 2011 8:57 pm
GoldDiggingWhore Are all of those ? supposed to be the same thing? Okay then Pump station = W Pops it cap =X Red'n'blue white box =Y Keeps you in the gap = Z But I feel you should be able to tell which each thing is, or what it means?
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Posted: Sun Feb 06, 2011 9:09 pm
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Posted: Mon Feb 07, 2011 8:49 pm
W should help. W = the human pump station, otherwise known as W = The heart
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Posted: Tue Feb 08, 2011 3:15 pm
Heart attack ambulance? -wanders off mumbling-
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Posted: Tue Feb 08, 2011 7:12 pm
If not heart attack, at least heart trouble of some kind. To be honest, I don't think I would ever be able to interpret that as being heart related on my own sweatdrop
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