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 Posted: Sun Jan 29, 2006 4:29 am
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Posted: Sun Jan 29, 2006 7:15 pm
Umm... Yeah, this is a poem. Poems don't have to rhyme. There are poems that follow only meter (called blank verse), and there are also poems that follow neither meter nor rhyme, but rely solely on the fluidity of the human language (free verse).
As for the poem... it's okay.
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Posted: Mon Jan 30, 2006 5:17 am
Thank you for the comment!
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Posted: Mon Jan 30, 2006 5:29 am
No prob. It's a good start. Just refine your word choice a little. Like the line "The blood inside unmoving" could be converted to "The crimson network, petrified." This is just an example, though. Do whatever you like. It is, after all, your poem.
Dude, your Hug Shop is awesome. I wish I'd have thought of something like that.
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Posted: Tue Jan 31, 2006 1:49 pm
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