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 Posted: Fri Jan 07, 2011 7:49 pm
Yep.
You heard right.
I wrote fanfiction.
I usually don't, 'cause I'm paranoid.
So...
Will you tell me what you think of it? :c
Sink
Anime: YuGiOh
Paring: Ryou/Jou
Rated: T
Summary: Puffshipping. Ryou, a merfolk outcast, has been watching a certain blonde boy. He's fallen in love, and wants this love all for himself. Jou/Yugi on the side. Rated for Death and Yaoi.
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Posted: Sat Jan 08, 2011 10:08 pm
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. . . . . . . . . . . . . . .kinda disturbing really. confused
It was very well written with great grammar and sentence structure (though the subject matter was a bit. . . . disturbing). On a comfort level, could you cut your paragraphs in half? I know a proper paragraph should have 5-6 sentences but the way FF formats it's pages causes big blocks of text that are kind of hard on the eyes even with the line spacing maxed out.
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Posted: Sun Jan 09, 2011 11:38 pm
Yeah, sorry about the paragraphs being all chunky.
Whatever I write next will definitely not be so bulky.
Hopefully it won't be so depressing, either.
I didn't really mean it to be.
But it's like,
I dunno what happened.
But that's generally how real mermaids are. More like Sirens, but I don't like calling the ones with fish tails sirens 'cause sirens originally were half bird, not fish.
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