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The girl is there
She seems to stare
At everything
But really nothing at all
Just the shadow on the wall
The one that seems to dance
Keeps her constantly fixated
Never bored, never elated
And she seems so happy there
Just staring
Not uncaring
Not ignoring
Just staring
Keeping herself out of reach
Of all who have harmed her
Of all the boys who've charmed her
And then let her down

The girl is there
But now she doesn't stare
Hasn't in years
She got married
Has a baby on the way
And now she stands
In front of that wall
Where the shadows used to crawl
And wonders where the time went
Where it was all spent
And she laughs
And recalls
That special shadowed wall
Where she would stare for hours on end
Lonliness her only friend
And she breaks down to tears
And pines for those misspent years
And wonders why
She let all that time slip away

I liked it, even though the syntax seemed a bit garbled in places, especially with double negatives like "Not uncaring".