Oh, man, gothlove, you're letting me down here. It started out so good with the first stanza, but then all the rest were the same?!? I understood the entire poem after just the first stanza, but then I had to read the other ones... what a letdown. That, plus the errors (you forgot to make your possessives...possessive) makes me feel like you should just turn this into a haiku. It would be totally killer that way:

5: death's claw topples o'r
7: tenuous nascent child

5: mother hides her face

Now, I know I didn't include a season word like I should have in REAL haiku, but you know what? I'm American so it doesn't matter :p I guess I ought to since I kept a sort of traditional phrasing, but... eh, whatever.

I guess if I wanted it to be really correct, it would be:

5: winter's claw topples
7: tenuous nascent child

5: mother hides her face


where winter would represent death.




I dunno. I just think that doing something so short like a haiku would really convey your message so much better than repeating yourself. It's not that the message isn't good, it's just... yeah. Repetitive.

Okay, joke's over, I'm going to stop being repetitive about how this is repetitive.

Really.

Okay, I'm done. XD