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 Posted: Wed Nov 17, 2010 11:03 am
I just made this character less than a week ago, and I was wondering if you guys could help me with ways to improve it... yeah... I left the information in my profile journal.
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Posted: Wed Nov 17, 2010 2:05 pm
You can post this in Wolffan's topic. He's busy but he does check and post there regularly. Also uh, the link sent me to my journal instead.
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Posted: Wed Nov 17, 2010 3:13 pm
Anyhow to critique:
It seems slightly unorthodox for a young character to multi-class especially in fairly unrelated fields. I mean if it's a gestalt campaign then do your thing, but usually it takes some time and getting used to one set of class abilities before one can dive into another and start mixing. On that note, Investigator? as in like a private detective, a CSI, or a Forensic Scientist? Is this like a very newly acquired class, because at the least your character's history doesn't suggest them moving into such a field.
Are the powers listed a part of your character's technical equipment? They seem a bit too specific and unfeasible for innate abilities. Some of them should probably be shifted into the skills list instead.
About the weaknesses, I have to ask. What setting is this that involves both futuristic Sci-fi Technology and magic? I mean I know some more recent FF games are like that but still, some setting information would help.
What DID happen to her parents? confused
In sum, there's a few confusing things. It does help to include how your character came to take certain character classes in their bio. Maybe point out some of her favorites in life, what the world around her felt like, significant events and how she reacted to them. Since you included her parents in the profile, even include how she felt about them and what they were like off the job.
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