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Posted: Wed Oct 27, 2010 3:03 am

I moved Kettil to a different thread because I changed his concept and thus the crits here do not apply anymore. I am sorry if this is a inconvenience on the staff.

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Posted: Wed Oct 27, 2010 3:05 am

FOR MORE STUFF. (AND PONY)

Posted: Wed Oct 27, 2010 3:06 am

ONE MORE CAUSE I SAID.

Other than that people are free to give critiques. Yes.

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Posted: Wed Oct 27, 2010 5:10 am

Lets see if I can be of service to you X3

First off, I'm loving Kettil's personality so far, it's really fun to read. Though I'm curious about one thing. You mentioned that on his off days, Kettil is much easier to get along with, especially when he's medicated. What exactly would cause him to have a 'off day' so much that he would need medication for? Would it be something to do with his red hat? (I read that redcaps will die if the blood on their hats completely dries out. Is this what you're referring to?)

I'm also wondering what kind of FEAR you where thinking about for your character, or if you have/haven't any ideas yet.

Sorry it's kinda short, but I hope it helps!

Posted: Wed Oct 27, 2010 8:47 am

8D Hey Palesy! I really like Kettil, he's a genuine d**k but him + alcohol makes me giggle.

I don't have too much to say, really, except that I'd really like to know MORE about him! What does he do for fun? How does he spend his nights? Is his room tidy or is he a clutterbug? Crap like that, seemingly useless but nice to know = w = d

I see you don't have anything down for his FEAR, though, and as I was reading on the Wiki Redcap article, I got a bad a** idea that you can totally use if you like it D8 Blood Manipulation!

Surely he can't take the fresh blood out of his hat, that would kill him, but he could carry around an emergency bottle of blood and use it for battle! He could turn it into a whip, a blade, any shape or form and attack with it 8D -flails- Weaknesses being it's a liquid and he probably wouldn't want to use it too much since it's for hat emergencies? I don't know > w < -wiggles-

Would you mind giving Corbin a once over? ;O I'd much appreciate it.

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Posted: Thu Oct 28, 2010 3:42 am

poke mattix

Lets see if I can be of service to you X3

First off, I'm loving Kettil's personality so far, it's really fun to read. Though I'm curious about one thing. You mentioned that on his off days, Kettil is much easier to get along with, especially when he's medicated. What exactly would cause him to have a 'off day' so much that he would need medication for? Would it be something to do with his red hat? (I read that redcaps will die if the blood on their hats completely dries out. Is this what you're referring to?)

I'm also wondering what kind of FEAR you where thinking about for your character, or if you have/haven't any ideas yet.

Sorry it's kinda short, but I hope it helps!

Off days might include general things like if for some reason he reaches out to a special person and they reject him outright (like some teenagers) or perhaps a bad scoring on a test after working so hard to study for it. Ailments I could see him falling victim to something like the common cold or what not and having to fall back on medicines (whatever is given by staff) and that it is likely that it'd affect him in some way. Though the thought/idea that his off days might also relate to the state of his hat/cap and how fresh the 'dye job' on it is so I shall ponder it! : ) Thank you for the crit. <3

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8D Hey Palesy! I really like Kettil, he's a genuine d**k but him + alcohol makes me giggle.

I don't have too much to say, really, except that I'd really like to know MORE about him! What does he do for fun? How does he spend his nights? Is his room tidy or is he a clutterbug? Crap like that, seemingly useless but nice to know = w = d

I see you don't have anything down for his FEAR, though, and as I was reading on the Wiki Redcap article, I got a bad a** idea that you can totally use if you like it D8 Blood Manipulation!

Surely he can't take the fresh blood out of his hat, that would kill him, but he could carry around an emergency bottle of blood and use it for battle! He could turn it into a whip, a blade, any shape or form and attack with it 8D -flails- Weaknesses being it's a liquid and he probably wouldn't want to use it too much since it's for hat emergencies? I don't know > w < -wiggles-

Would you mind giving Corbin a once over? ;O I'd much appreciate it.

Shall have to ponder those little aspects of his personality really really soon. They are awesome things to bring up even if in the grand scheme of things they are just super-duper extras! I simply spilled out what was rolling in my brain as I thought of it before I lost it so it is no where near finished or refined yet. So thank you!

As for the FEAR you're right in assuming I didn't quite having anything yet though (believe it or not) I was considering Blood Manipulation as something he could use. I think I might go that route and see where it takes me. It seems like something he'd enjoy doing haha. The weakness and stuff you brought up sound pretty close to what I was molding up in my brain for the FEAR, amongst other things. Thank you for the suggestion it gives me an awesome jumping off point.

- I will return Crits ASAP. Right now my brain is going 'Abuh? 8D'

Posted: Wed Nov 03, 2010 12:08 pm

Based on suggestions and stuff asked to me thus far via critiques I have expanded a bit on Kettil's personality and added his FEAR.

If there is anything further please let me know~. : )

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Posted: Thu Nov 04, 2010 7:09 pm

i hear you ordered some crazy with a side of crazy and for dessert, crazy a la mode with bits o'crazy and crazy sauce heart

Posted: Thu Nov 04, 2010 9:47 pm

Why yes I did. I loves it Smerd you did so awesome. >u< <333 -SMOOS ON SMERD.-

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Posted: Mon Nov 22, 2010 8:48 am

-Nawms on quest.-

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-Nudges.-

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Posted: Tue Dec 07, 2010 12:07 pm

NungNungNung. Added some familial background. Ummm what else? biggrin

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-Prod.-

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Posted: Thu Feb 17, 2011 3:01 pm

The character I really like.

I'm a little confused on a redcap being a demon though.
In most stories and lore they're orges, Drawfs, Goblins. General creepy crawly types, and I didn't think they were classified as demons. o 3o I could be wrong though.

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