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 Posted: Tue Jan 17, 2006 11:17 pm
~AWAKENING~
Awaken to this world of mine
Take care my friend, and read the sign
"Watch your step" it says to me
"For once you're in, you'll not be free"
Shadowed gates loom far above
A place devoid of life and love
I never saw such sundering sorrow
Worry not, it's gone tomorrow
Swallowed by the great abyss
Created in such a world as this
A field of weeds, with naught but thorns
Reaching up like demon's horns
Children laugh, and children die
The older ones begin to cry
Fools climb an endless wall
They reach the top, and then they fall
Take your life, your soul from skin
To save yourself from what lies within
Yet torture never ends for me
I hope for life, long to be free
A cliffside reached, an exit found
It's depth would make one's voice resound
The screams of many heard below
A fitting end, myself, I throw
Falling through the misty air
Looking up, the sky turns fair
Too late I am, to stop my descent
To climb back up where I was sent
Yet I could not take one day more
Of what that world had in store
To awaken one of many days
On which the sun spread darkened rays
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Posted: Tue Jan 17, 2006 11:41 pm
...sorreh guys... that's just muh tripolar self talking.. ninja
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Posted: Wed Jan 18, 2006 12:36 am
Arakimos
...sorreh guys... that's just muh tripolar self talking.. ninja ... tripolar? eek
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Posted: Wed Jan 18, 2006 3:54 am
evil I don't like that one....
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Posted: Wed Jan 18, 2006 4:02 am
It is very well written ... but also very depressing. .__.;
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Posted: Wed Jan 18, 2006 4:06 am
*sniff* your big words make me cry ;___;
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Posted: Wed Jan 18, 2006 7:47 pm
Kim the Amazon evil I don't like that one.... Well, I never was good at poetry Kim... you know that ninja B'sides... i had to write something... it's my outlet... Now I feel much better 3nodding
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Posted: Wed Jan 18, 2006 8:30 pm
eek That was cool. like it all ryhmes. I wish i could rhyme like that, you s ure are talanted if you wrote that.
It was a little depressing but WHOA it all ryhmes perfectly.
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Posted: Thu Jan 19, 2006 12:27 am
Xanabar eek That was cool. like it all ryhmes. I wish i could rhyme like that, you s ure are talanted if you wrote that. It was a little depressing but WHOA it all ryhmes perfectly. They're naught but words, my friend... ninja
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Posted: Thu Jan 19, 2006 12:29 am
Arakimos Kim the Amazon evil I don't like that one.... Well, I never was good at poetry Kim... you know that ninja
The poetry is good.
I just don't like the content.
For... obvious reasons... I guess they are just words...
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Posted: Thu Jan 19, 2006 12:31 am
Kim the Amazon Arakimos Kim the Amazon evil I don't like that one.... Well, I never was good at poetry Kim... you know that ninja
The poetry is good.
I just don't like the content.
For... obvious reasons... I guess they are just words...You and I both know that I'd never even consider it... xp
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Posted: Thu Jan 19, 2006 9:08 pm
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Posted: Fri Jan 20, 2006 12:17 am
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Posted: Fri Jan 20, 2006 12:35 am
Bejeebus.
You are really talented. x]
But..
Aren't you the real fool in the end?
I mean.. at least the fool in your poem climbs/attempts to overcome whatever it is.
They don't just give up and admit defeat because they reach a difficult obstacle.
The true fool is the one who willingly falls without even trying, completely disregarding the value of what their letting go.
EDIT: And they're a even bigger fool if they think the thing their letting go has no value to begin with.
Blah.. whatever. XD;;
You're obviously deeper than ze Gig and are most def. set in your ways.
I just wish some of your views would alter.
But the world isn't perfect.
If it was, life wouldn't be.. life.
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[ G I G G I T Y ] Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Jan 20, 2006 1:26 am
Why is it one must assume that such writings reflect my own veiws? You read me from my words as if they were my soul spelled out for you... talk2hand
Is it not enough that it tells a story? Must one always assume that there is deeper meaning in what I write? gonk
Nothing is known of my ways or my veiws... ninja
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