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poem by me smile . critique? praise? comments? :3
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She's falling, but she's falling on purpose
The point is gone
Her life is worthless
Without a second doubt
She turns away
No one will ever know
What she chose to not say

Alone at last, left with what she's running from
She cries into the mirror
As she thinks "What have I become?"
She can't stand the sight of herself; she's ashamed
Her happiness is gone
Her sadness can't be tamed

The lies, the heartbreak
It made it's way around
She's looking for some closure
Or a place with solid ground
Body on the floor
Or back against the wall
For one to be so young
She seems to have seen it all

Tragedy fills the air
For what they could not save
They slowly act like they all care
Then go on with their day
But she will always be here
Simple blood on the ground
Looking for someone to help her
Because she has yet to be found

shouldn't it be 'what she chose not to say'?
and 'they've made their way around'
also you might want to clean up the lines 'for one to be so young
she seems to have seen it all'
and 'they slowly act like they all care'

Otherwise I really like it!

well, when it comes to someone writing, they can word it how ever they want to. sometimes, they write in the moment, and thats what comes out, and they dont change it. some times to them, it sounds right, shouldnt that matter? that the writer likes what they wrote?

M'dear, don't sweat the editing. Nothing is perfect.

Good job!