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 Posted: Thu Sep 02, 2010 3:49 pm
A crows call prices the night air of the cold graveyard
A girl sits on a grave,a puddle of blood forming on the ground
Death surrounds her
So full of peace yet sorrow
No end to her sadness
No end to her missory
No end to her heart break
Only one way out
but dare she take it
once down that road
theres no turning back
her loved one under her
cold and lifeless
tears trickle down her cheeks
hands trembling
she lays on top of where her loved one lays beneath the dirt
she takes out her knife
and looks at the bleeding cuts on her arm
she whispers to herself "we must be together dead or alive"
the girl jabs the knife threw her heart
she lays there dead still
her skin turning pale and cold
her life darning away
blood puddle forms in which she lays
death surrounds her all around
soon she will be with her loved one underground
she finds her loved one in where death come to stay
greeted by a loving kiss
and a hug that lasts forever
the to lovers will never leave anther
not now
not ever
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Posted: Thu Sep 02, 2010 10:07 pm
I don't mean to sound like a b***h.... but you need to learn how to spell. And take a ******** happy pill. You're 14, you've no reason to be all depressed. Oh, and here's a lovely picture I found on the net. smile 
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Posted: Thu Sep 02, 2010 10:40 pm
xXSarah_CyanideXx I don't mean to sound like a b***h.... but you need to learn how to spell. And take a ******** happy pill. You're 14, you've no reason to be all depressed. Oh, and here's a lovely picture I found on the net. smile I was diagnosed with depression at 9. So, please do not say there is no reason. I'm off all meds now, and thankfully I have few moments of depression. Seriously, do not think you know someone and can say whether or not they have reason to be depressed.
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Posted: Fri Sep 03, 2010 12:24 am
Gundam Arashi xXSarah_CyanideXx I don't mean to sound like a b***h.... but you need to learn how to spell. And take a ******** happy pill. You're 14, you've no reason to be all depressed. Oh, and here's a lovely picture I found on the net. smile I was diagnosed with depression at 9. So, please do not say there is no reason. I'm off all meds now, and thankfully I have few moments of depression. Seriously, do not think you know someone and can say whether or not they have reason to be depressed. Yeah, I've been diagnosed with depression as well. In fact, serious bi-polar. Still, during my "down" periods, I don't write shitty poems about cutting and death.
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Posted: Fri Sep 03, 2010 3:36 am
writing poems like that doesn't make you depressed.
it makes you an overdramatic teenager trying to use every "omg depressing deth emo" cliche in the book".
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Posted: Fri Sep 03, 2010 9:38 pm
@ Sarah
Some people find that writing that way helps, I know it does for me. I've written plenty of stuff, though I only have a few posted in my journal on here, with one in the arena.
@ Coffee
Drama is just a part of life, I tend to over-dramatize some things, but then I look back on it and realize that I didn't have to. It's all a matter of perspective anyway.
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Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 10:33 am
I think it is very rude to judge someones poetry, even if it is about a stupid topic.
It is art, and you should just all respect that she is trying.
It seems like a modern day Romeo and Juliet to me.
Zombies need love too. :c
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Posted: Sun Sep 05, 2010 3:29 pm
serjtankian_is_god
I think it is very rude to judge someones poetry, even if it is about a stupid topic.
It is art, and you should just all respect that she is trying.
It seems like a modern day Romeo and Juliet to me.
Zombies need love too. :c thank u, thats very kind of u to say
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Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2010 12:13 pm
blood_lust26 serjtankian_is_god
I think it is very rude to judge someones poetry, even if it is about a stupid topic.
It is art, and you should just all respect that she is trying.
It seems like a modern day Romeo and Juliet to me.
Zombies need love too. :c thank u, thats very kind of u to say
I write poetry also, and it isn't ******** right that people can judge it. (I would post some if I could find it, but it isn't emo so no one here would like it. xD)
This is why I never comment on the poetry threads, I just can't stand it. It is an art and shouldn't be judged or graded.
Zombies need love too. :c
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Posted: Wed Sep 08, 2010 12:36 pm
serjtankian_is_god blood_lust26 serjtankian_is_god
I think it is very rude to judge someones poetry, even if it is about a stupid topic.
It is art, and you should just all respect that she is trying.
It seems like a modern day Romeo and Juliet to me.
Zombies need love too. :c thank u, thats very kind of u to say
I write poetry also, and it isn't ******** right that people can judge it. (I would post some if I could find it, but it isn't emo so no one here would like it. xD)
This is why I never comment on the poetry threads, I just can't stand it. It is an art and shouldn't be judged or graded.
Zombies need love too. :c i completly agree, tho i guess i should have poasted that i was a bad speller along with my poem. sweatdrop
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Posted: Wed Sep 08, 2010 1:24 pm
my favorite part was
"her life darning away "
if you edited your spelling it would have been more enjoyable
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