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 Posted: Thu Sep 02, 2010 1:06 pm
  AMITYVILLE ACADEMY ENROLLMENT FORMName: Rizuka
Nicknames: Rizu, Zuka
Gender: Female
Age: 16 [ ish ]
Faction: Reapers [ witch ]
Personality: SWEET | CARING | SEDUCTRESS | FOCUSED
+ + Walking around and navigating the student masses with ease, Rizu is your typical social butterfly. Greeting people with a kind word, and shining smile, is one of her calling cards as those around her can't help but smile in return and feel amicably to the witch.
+ + While her words are sweet, and her actions caring, a part of her takes pleasure in wearing low-cut clothes and stroking the arm of male peers who may feel that she's interested in them. No one the wiser, her attention is not focused on forming meaningful relationships, or even flings of passion. She's one hell of a heart-breaker and enjoys every minute of it, her only real interest laying in her needlework and magic.
+ + Speaking of which, you better treat your clothes, and personal fashion, in high esteem. Nothing speaks more volume to this girl then the clothes on your back and the condition they're in. At first, she'll resist "discussing" with you your lack of better judgement when getting up this morning and trudging through your dorm in search for the day's vestments, but soon her control will slip and she'll inform you of all the poor judgement decisions you made. On the flip side, having impeccable fashion tastes will cause her to love you forever and treat you with the utmost respect. Having a personality like this has led many people to believe that Rizu is a shallow being, only looking skin-deep, but if you ask her she'll tell you straight to your face that what you wear on your person is a exact representation of your personality - not caring what you're wearing shows how much you yourself don't care, and she doesn't wish to have any part of people who don't care. However, if your clothes are lackluster due to your station in life, and Rizu deems you worthy enough, she may just stitch you a garment the whole school will be jealous of.
Why are they enrolled in Amityville Academy?
+ + Rizu enrolled for the most basic of things: to get better. She wants to learn more about her art, her FEAR, and life in general. She also enrolled to be amongst her peers, and thus be in a better position to learn more about people's individual style.
Natural Ability:
[ STITCHES , THREAD , AND CLOTH ]
+ + Don't underestimate the power of a Stitch Witch; it may be rooted in that of stitches, thread, and cloth, but give it a thought. How much of that is around you? On you? A part of you - in the case of some Undead. You might want to watch your words and actions, as one wrong thing could set your clothes to coming apart at the seams, your arm falling off, or some other disastrous event.
+ + Possessing a strong drive to study all things stitch, with hardly a second thought to anything else, she is by no means a master and still has some difficulties with her work. On the top of learning the ins and outs of the magical sigils, threads, and stitches, Rizu works hard to garner as much information about the aesthetic aspects as well, staying on top of all the new trends and styles. She takes a more traditional approach to her work, as she threads and sews by hand rather then magic, instead using it as a supplementary tool to make her work sturdier, stronger, and more durable.
FEAR:
[ NEEDLE POINT ]
+ + Oh? You seem to have triggered Rizu's sharp edge. And no kidding, that edge is really sharp. Utilizing FEAR, in combination with her magic, Rizu increases the size of her needle to that of a small sword, brandishing it about as such. Poking you with this pointed metallic object isn't underneath her as well - so watch out! So what's the downfall to this FEAR? Other then it's size (the maximum, at enrollment, is that of 1-2 feet), she cannot feed it enough energy to keep it's form for longer then a couple minutes (5/10 min max).
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Posted: Mon Oct 04, 2010 11:32 pm
  [click for art by Ero-Pinku on dA]
Art is purely concept and Ero's interpretation.
She may be drawn differently if the artist wishes to, this can be an alt. outfit. Hair Style: Styled in a fashion reminiscent of number 199
Skin Colour: A nice, dark skin color like Nicole Scherzinger. 8D;;
Colour Scheme: Bebot. Use it how you will. In regards to hair colour, please keep it black with streaks of one color from the palette. For eye color; Mellow Wine. [[ If you need to add another color or two for balance and diversity, that's fine. :D ]]
Clothing Style/Colours:
+ + I'm really flexible with her overall character design, though I'm really interested in layering and dimensions in the clothing/accessories department, so feel free to add more to her to accomplish that. B)
+ + What I have in mind so far is a half-jacket that ends right at the bottom of the breast area, effectively covering them, but leaving her abdomen bare (something like this). It would be clasped at the center there, but would be unclasped/open up more as it went up, revealing cleavage but leaving her shoulders covered. A bra could be used in giving another layer to her clothes as it rests right under the jacket, peeking subtlety out. The sleeves would extend to her wrists, with a sort of metal bracelet clasped over the end, leaving a kind of ruffle on the leftover material at her hands. The sleeves themselves can be baggy or tight, depending on what the artist thinks would look best.
+ + At Rizu's neck a choker would be clasped, but the artist would be free to design this at their own discretion as long as it's not too large or overbearing. An interesting idea I had would be for the jacket collar to be a little straight and for it to extend up her neck on the opposite sides of the choker. Sort of like a turtleneck, except it doesn't wrap all the way around, and serves more as a frame for the choker.
+ + As an added addition to the jacket, or as a separate garment of it's own, would be a hood that would come and rest on her head but wouldn't really drape onto her brow. I'd like it to not be overtly large or droopy, but rather more tight to her face, sort of like this. The hood won't necessarily taper into the choker that Rizu wears, but will be more independent and free-form. If that makes sense. > A < Though I'm also open to other ideas in this area; a nifty witches hat could look really cool as well. :D
+ + I'd like the bottom half of her body to have a short, ruffled skirt that goes to about mid-thigh, with her wearing some thigh-high heeled boots in accompany to that; I'd like a space of skin between the boots and the skirt so it doesn't look like a seamless transition, if that's possible and it looks good.
+ + Overall the design/look of the clothing can be up to the artist - throw on some swirls or symbols, or streamline the whole thing. As long as it has the sort of complexity, layered/dimension feel to it I'd be happy. Also feel free to slap some more accessories, or other articles of clothing, on her to embellish the design, as long as they don't overpower the original concept. 8]
Extra: -/-
References: Body type. Though with a little bit firmer abs.
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Posted: Mon Oct 04, 2010 11:34 pm
If Rizu is a social butterfly and likes to make people smile, how does she react to the wallflowers and anti-social kids? What about the seemingly heartless students (there’s a fair number of those being Quested for)?
+ + Rizu doesn't take her social aptitude and smiling-inducing abilities too seriously. It's more of something that comes naturally to her. She may feel a little disconcerted when she's met by a brick-wall of silence, and may spend a little time trying to draw them out of their shell, but she wouldn't become obsessed or depressed over them not doing what she wanted. Now, if we were talking about her flirtatious attitude, and someone wasn't reacting or having anything of it, she'd be a whole lot more offended then someone who doesn't smile and talk with her. She thinks she's one hot cookie and feels a giant ego blow when shot down.
Is Rizu a gossip?
+ + Not really. At least, I don't feel any gossipy feelings/attitude about her when I think of her character in my mind. She'd probably talk about people with her close friends, but she wouldn't go around spreading peoples biznack.
Does Rizu like to party?
+ + She loves to party! More opportunity to be social, to flirt, and see more eclectic personal styles in people's party outfits.
Does Rizu care if anyone thinks she’s a slut? What if they treat her like a slut?
+ + I don't think she'd necessarily care, other then the cursory feelings of hurt when name-calling happens, but she would definitely be pissed if they started treating her like a slut or purposely singling her out all the time. Then she'd want to fight and show you a thing or two.
So Rizu isn’t interested in any meaningful relationships, or just romantic ones? If someone seems to want a relationship with her, how would she react?
+ + I think they go hand in hand, don't you? Meaningful and romantic relationships, that is. She's not overtly interested in them, and doesn't seek them out. If she so happened to find herself in a position to have one, she'd probably try to get out of it and shut the person down as fast as possible. Though I do want to set her up with a relationship at some point, as a sort of character development, but I'm not planning that out too much right now.
Since she focuses so much on her magic and needlework, what are her grades like? Is she studious?
+ + She's studious in all things thread/needle/style/fashion/etc. Anything outside of it, she doesn't give a rattail about. History? Not unless it's about the evolution of fashion. Math? Only interested when working with proportions and cloth sizes? Etc.
How does her being a social butterfly affect magic and needlework? How does it affect her grades?
+ + I don't see it as affecting her magic and needlework too much. But with that, she will not put being social over her magic and thread work. It comes first and that's all there is to it, in her opinion. As to how it affects her grades...well, sort of how I described her being studios above - she works hard in her classes that pertain to what she's interested in, in the others she barely scrapes by, or only succeeds from a combination of instinct and paying somewhat attention to what the teacher is talking about.
You have the Natural Ability of Stitch Witches being related to stitches, thread, and cloth. How, exactly? Can they animate it? Can they change one fabric into another at a touch? Can they make it nearly indestructible?
+ + There's a lot of history/myth/information on the net, and in books, that relates or pertains to stitch magic. Personally, I based Rizu's Stitch Witch status off of Tamora Pierce's Circle of Magic quartet, and following series.
+ + In short, without a lengthy description, Rizu has the ability to sense and sort of feel the ~*~emotions~*~ of / speak with her work. She can feel what it can do, what it wants to do, and tell it exactly what she wants; eventually obtaining her goal. She can command the thread in yonder students jacket to depart it's stitchings and with some concentration, and a minute or two of time, the thread will do just that - leaving the student with a few scrapes of cloth and suddenly feeling a lot colder.
+ + In regards to the way she uses magic when stitching herself, she can strengthen garments, make them water/dirt-proof, imbue a small health charm so the wearer feels stronger and more fit. Things like that. Some charms take minimal effort, like the water/dirt-proofing, but things like imparting health take more magic and she cannot ensure a lifetime of sustainability. Not to mention magic fades as time goes by, no matter what, it's just that smaller charms last much, much, longer.
Emblem Ideas
+ + Depending on which color scheme is chosen for Rizu, is how I would color the emblem. But I was thinking a solid colored background with a spool tilted at angle with a needle crossing through it, forming a X. 8D
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Posted: Tue Oct 05, 2010 1:28 am
‘ello there! I suck at normal crit, so let’s play 20 Questions instead, shall we? ^^;
If Rizu is a social butterfly and likes to make people smile, how does she react to the wallflowers and anti-social kids? What about the seemingly heartless students (there’s a fair number of those being Quested for)?
Is Rizu a gossip?
Does Rizu like to party?
Does Rizu care if anyone thinks she’s a slut? What if they treat her like a slut?
So Rizu isn’t interested in any meaningful relationships, or just romantic ones? If someone seems to want a relationship with her, how would she react?
Since she focuses so much on her magic and needlework, what are her grades like? Is she studious? How does her being a social butterfly affect magic and needlework? How does it affect her grades?
You have the Natural Ability of Stitch Witches being related to stitches, thread, and cloth. How, exactly? Can they animate it? Can they change one fabric into another at a touch? Can they make it nearly indestructible?
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Posted: Tue Oct 05, 2010 9:47 am
Hola, Holy Blasphemy! Thanks for coming in and leaving me some feedback. I really appreciate it! <3 And don't worry about the whole 20 Questions-esque crit, I like answering those. Makes me feel as if I'm fleshing the character out more. 8]Quote: If Rizu is a social butterfly and likes to make people smile, how does she react to the wallflowers and anti-social kids? What about the seemingly heartless students (there’s a fair number of those being Quested for)? Quote: Does Rizu care if anyone thinks she’s a slut? What if they treat her like a slut? Quote: So Rizu isn’t interested in any meaningful relationships, or just romantic ones? If someone seems to want a relationship with her, how would she react? Quote: Since she focuses so much on her magic and needlework, what are her grades like? Is she studious? Quote: How does her being a social butterfly affect magic and needlework? How does it affect her grades? Quote: You have the Natural Ability of Stitch Witches being related to stitches, thread, and cloth. How, exactly? Can they animate it? Can they change one fabric into another at a touch? Can they make it nearly indestructible?
In short, without a lengthy description, Rizu has the ability to sense and sort of feel the ~*~emotions~*~ of / speak with her work. She can feel what it can do, what it wants to do, and tell it exactly what she wants; eventually obtaining her goal. She can command the thread in yonder students jacket to depart it's stitchings and with some concentration, and a minute or two of time, the thread will do just that - leaving the student with a few scrapes of cloth and suddenly feeling a lot colder.
In regards to the way she uses magic when stitching herself, she can strengthen garments, make them water/dirt-proof, imbue a small health charm so the wearer feels stronger and more fit. Things like that. Some charms take minimal effort, like the water/dirt-proofing, but things like imparting health take more magic and she cannot ensure a lifetime of sustainability. Not to mention magic fades as time goes by, no matter what, it's just that smaller charms last much, much, longer.
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Thank you, again, for the critique! Feel free to ask any more questions if you think of them. I really do appreciate it. And I'll try and look over your Voodoo quest and offer any opinions I might have. 8]
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Posted: Wed Oct 06, 2010 8:41 pm
Just a quick little bumperoni to get Rizu back on the front page. heart
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Posted: Fri Oct 08, 2010 5:33 pm
- pushes back up in the forum - Heading home for the weekend. Maybe I'll get some crits while I'm gone. 8'D <3
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Posted: Mon Oct 11, 2010 9:10 am
heart stay on the front page, chica. *u*
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Posted: Thu Oct 14, 2010 11:19 am
Another bump to the top. Still need/want crits. <3
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Posted: Thu Oct 14, 2010 6:18 pm
Edited Appearance information as well as created two color palettes I think would look amazing on Rizu. Help me decide which color palette to use as well?
LORE;;█████BEBOT;;█████Still open for critique! <33
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Posted: Sat Oct 16, 2010 12:25 pm
I like the 'bebot' color scheme~.
Anyway! This girl's cute, I like her! But just one thing...her personality makes her seem a little too 'perfect'. Personally I've always preferred everyone to have at least some kind of flaw, because realistically no one is perfect and everyone has a flaw (Or fifty in my case). And I've always found those who don't have aaaany flaws tend to just become Mary Sues (I'm not saying she's a Mary Sue or that you're making her one or anything just, y'know...what I've seen happen because I myself have done it. XD)
So does anything bother her? Does she have any pet peeves? Does she have a secret of some kind even if it's something silly like "She collects stinky socks and loves to smell them all day long"? These would be things to add into her personality and not just 'questions & answers' I think.
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Posted: Sat Oct 16, 2010 1:03 pm
Thanks for leaving me a crit, Eight. 8D I really appreciate it. <3 And thanks for your vote in the color scheme! I think Bebot might be the best choice as well.
That's a perfectly good point. *u* I myself have made that exact same point to other people in other B/Cs. Guess it's a little hard to see it in your own character. D|
Somethings I should work in: she's very judgmental when it comes to other peoples clothes and fashion-sense. It'll bother her as long as she's around them. At first she'll attempt to resist telling them of their obvious folly, but the longer she spends in their presence her need to help them dress properly will suppress her better sense and she'll tell them everything that's wrong about their outfit. Though this will work both ways as well as she'll admire those with a good fashion sense. B)
I'll have to ponder further on if she has any other personality quirks and/or secrets. > A > I have some rough ideas now, but I don't know how they'll fit into her design.
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Posted: Sat Oct 23, 2010 12:22 pm
ACTIVITY BUMP;;
Just a quick quest forum bump to get Rizu back on the front page. Remade the thread slightly by creating graphics, messing with indents, and adding basic coding.
Haven't changed anything to her personality yet, though I plan to add some things in since having the talk with Eight. <3
Still open for crits though!!
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Posted: Tue Oct 26, 2010 11:12 am
CRIT TIME, OH YEAH 8U
Personality:
Like it's been said, she definitely needs some flaws. If you already have some in mind, great, PUT 'EM IN DERE 8U If not, maybe an underlying reason of why she likes being a heart-breaker could be a flaw? Like, perhaps, she likes messing around with men because a man messed around with her and strung her along and now it's sort of a passive-aggressive vendetta? She's not out to get men but she feels the need to mess with their heads a bit to make herself feel better?
Over all, I think this section should be fleshed out a bit more but she seems like an interesting character on the surface.
Natural Ability:
I think the mention of her being a prodigy is a bit superfluous unless it helps to shape something else. Say, since they believe that, does she think she's better than most people? Something like that. If it doesn't help to shape anything else about her, I'd say drop this detail because it's pretty useless and just makes it seem like you're trying to make her 'special'.
I like that she goes with a natural approach most of the time and using thread and needles as her medium is pretty interesting, definitely not something I've seen for a Reaper here yet so that's pretty cool. Poor Undeads should definitely watch out xD they'll fall right apart.
FEAR:
Hahahaha that's a cute but effective FEAR. It works, I think (though my understanding of FEAR may still be a bit off, I'm still not sure what some people mean by making it sound like a 'Pokemon Card attack') but I like the image it brings to mind and it's not overpowered.
Physical:
BEBOT COLOR ALL THE WAY
Others:
I think a lot of what was said in the Questions and Answers should probably be moved to her personality section. It's all well and good to be able to answer a question like that but if it's not IN the Personality section, it seems like it was an afterthought, so I'd say go through and find the most important answers to some of those questions and plop them in her personality section.
I like her emblem, too, it's simple and effective = w = d
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Posted: Sat Nov 27, 2010 1:35 pm
ACTIVITY BUMPPPPPPPPPPP
OKAY. PHEW. I've been gone a long time. D: At least in TiH terms, since the quest forum is always booming. xD;; Had a lot of RL things [college, group involvement, etc] come up and I just couldn't make it on here. But I'm back with a couple of updates!! 8D
*** Updated Personality and changed somethings in her Natural Ability that Snoof pointed out. I want to edit it a little more to take out that little bit stronger, but I think it's not as glaringly annoying as it was before.
*** COMMISSIONED ART FROM ERO-PINKU ON DA. Click the anime looking banner in her appearance section to see Ero's interpretation of Rizu. I must say, I love it. 8D Tell me what you think!
Still open for crits and I hope to hear your opinions. Probably need to add more stuff to the personality section [add stuff in from the Q&A like Snoof said, but I just don't know where to slot it in atm o.e], but I think it's good right now. And I'm kind of drawing a blank on what to add. > A < Anyways! BUMP. 8]
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