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Pools of Slate and Blue

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iamWanderlust626

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PostPosted: Wed Sep 01, 2010 9:26 am


Pools of Slate and Blue

Pools of slate and blue draw me in,
bring me to another world.
Strong bands wrap around me,
giving me security in this haven which cannot be understood.
I'm lead to a land that flows;
it's my own little place of milk and honey.
This is where I learned my heart;
this is where I learned surrender.

I'm flying, now,
black wings beating with the cadence of a heart.
I'm not going to fall;
those bands are still wrapped around me.
I trust them.
My feet are placed upon the ground,
and once again my spirit cries.
This is where I saw beauty;
this is where I began a new life.

A little heart sleeps on my breast,
another in her bed.
And looking up I still see them,
those pools of slate and blue that drew me in;
the eyes that pronounce devotion to only me.
If I stood, those bands would wrap around me;
the arms that defend me,
and I trust to never let me fall.

I started out a bitter soul;
I didn't believe in miracles.
Bit my bit you forced your way,
showing me a new light with every moment.
Someone believed in me;
they had faith in my heart and soul.
I don't ever know how to repay this debt,
your giving me this life with you;
this miraculous haven...
Your world, where I am cradled by love.



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I'm posting this for a friend of mine. She's not online very often, but she likes to have her work critiqued.
I told her about this guild, and she said that she would check it out.
But, for now, I'm doing her this favour.
Let me know what you think, and I'll relay the messages back to her.
Thanks ^^
PostPosted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 12:32 pm


Thats great, I love it! Your friend has a wonderful writing skill. Tell her I think its amazing, totally worth reading!

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iamWanderlust626

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PostPosted: Tue Sep 07, 2010 10:34 am


haha, Thanks.
I'll be sure to pass it on 3nodding
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