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 Posted: Sat Aug 28, 2010 9:14 pm
So, i felt like i should make a REAL Fan fiction of Touhou (No fake characters) and i got an idea from an image of Letty and Cirno in the "Heart-warming" Pool on Danbooru. First my concept:
I want to make a sort of Relationship story with Letty and Cirno.
Letty would be like a mother for Cirno while she is still the same.
And the basic idea is the winter days where Letty plays and watches Cirno, where once spring kicks in, She leaves Cirno for certain reasons (no need to explain that. we all know why).
The three ways i would write it would be...
A) A journal-type story where Letty Narrates it.
B) One half contains the two together. when Spring comes around, the next half continues but Letty leaves. By the end she comes back (Cycle Story)
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C) Have alternating Narrations from Cirno side then Letty.
Also, i want this to be somewhat of a serious tone with some comedy. Nothing bad happens but it's a story you would read to see how they live there Winter days.
If you want to help, give me your ideas here.
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Posted: Sun Aug 29, 2010 9:51 am
Do you want to play with me? --------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------
It'd be nice if the fairy would write some stuff too. I mean, if Chiruno can be intellectual at times of spring while her 'mom' is gone at the moment within the story plot, then she can explain what she does during the springtime (i.e. First person details of how their day was). And make it like a Cirno/Letty's journal. In which both cases share their stories too.
Because all my toys are ruined... And you're the only person I see here fit...
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Posted: Sun Aug 29, 2010 11:43 am
So a fusion of A and B? I like that.
I was thinking of that but i felt like i should just post up the three instead. Thanks for bringing that option up.
Now i may make Cirno's entries look slightly "Child-ish"
Ex: i saw a smal flower this moring and piked it for lety.
or i can go my way and...
Ex: i saw a small flower this morning and picked it for letty.
Differences are top has errors in spelling
bottom would have minor errors and no caps.
of course i would go with #2 but what do others think?
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Posted: Sun Aug 29, 2010 1:31 pm
Do you want to play with me? --------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------xxxx--------
Well, yeah, but make the I, eye, instead of the correct pseudonym. Either way, Nice idea.
Because all my toys are ruined... And you're the only person I see here fit...
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Posted: Sun Aug 29, 2010 1:58 pm
Translating "atai" as "eye"...
That cliche annoys me to no end, as "eye" instead of "I" wouldn't make sense because "eye" and "I" do not sound even the slightest bit alike in Japanese. I prefer extremely plain wording over extremely English-language or American flavored wording.
(No doubt I'll get attacked for despising "creative" translation or rendering, but oh well. Not even my close friends are exempt from my objections to someone making her talk that way.)
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Posted: Sun Aug 29, 2010 6:29 pm
So far...
In each chapter, there will be a Letty and a Cirno entry.
I am going with a no caps and minor errors type of Cirno Writing and i can make a prequel like a normal story (how it all started.)
I will share ONLY the prequel here as the rest will be on my Fanfiction account under my username of the same name. "Parth Makeo"
Expect to see Prequel when i can think of how to start it.
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Posted: Mon Aug 30, 2010 8:56 pm
It is now up!
After this post is the prologue to the story. It's short but it's an intro.
To see more as they come, head over to http://www.fanfiction.net/~parthmakeo
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Posted: Mon Aug 30, 2010 8:57 pm
Prologue It was the beginning of winter, Cirno was sitting in the usual meeting spot for her friend, Letty. Cirno made a funny looking ice sculpture that resembled a tree when Letty came flying down holding two books under her arm. “Sorry I am late, I found two blank books outside of this store and thought we could have some fun this winter season.” Letty explained handing one book to Cirno. Cirno opened the book and was confused. “Where are the pictures? Where are the words? There is nothing...” frowning at the empty book. Letty shook her head and explained “We will make the story. You and I shall write down what happened each day until winter is over. Think of it as extra fun after our normal time.” her smile was warm for a Yuki-onna. Cirno floated up and down happy as ever, “We get to make a story! We get to make a story!”. Already, Letty wrote an entry early. Day One, I presented Cirno with her first journal. She was so happy, that she started to doodle the first page. Of course, her drawing was unidentifiable but I could tell it was me and her. She makes my stick figure with a triangle hat and a 'letty' tag on it. day 1, letty gave me a empty book to write in and told me to write like I was talking to someone about it. im going to show letty that i can naerate my stori and i can prove that i am the strongest and i am not stopid.
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Posted: Mon Aug 30, 2010 9:21 pm
This is kinda deep for the soul.
If Letty should melt, it'd make me cry if cirno cries crying
Please make letty stay by at least having them make eirin and nitori to make like, a winter room, where it's like an iceland paradise but except it's just like a cage. At least cirno can see her every day more.
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Posted: Mon Aug 30, 2010 10:14 pm
Scarlet Sister of Remi This is kinda deep for the soul. If Letty should melt, it'd make me cry if cirno cries crying Please make letty stay by at least having them make eirin and nitori to make like, a winter room, where it's like an iceland paradise but except it's just like a cage. At least cirno can see her every day more. Hold on! Just cause some people say Letty melts at the end doesn't mean I'm doing that. Not giving ending away. Also, it should be a bit deep. Remember, Cirno is like that of a child and Letty treats her like a daughter. Besides, sometimes a sad ending is good once in a while. Let's you cry without suppressing tears too much.
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Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 4:57 pm
This is getting pretty interesting.
Parth, I'd advise you to avoid deliberate grammar and spelling errors on Cirno's entries. It's making her look way too dumb, to the point where it falls into cliche.
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Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 7:32 pm
Woutan Manasal This is getting pretty interesting. Parth, I'd advise you to avoid deliberate grammar and spelling errors on Cirno's entries. It's making her look way too dumb, to the point where it falls into cliche. Well it is not Extreme though. It's mostly no Capitals and random times, she will misspell some words. Be glad I do not make her write "Eye".
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Posted: Mon Sep 13, 2010 12:00 pm
So when is the next journal entry?
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Posted: Fri Sep 17, 2010 3:19 pm
Shingami Hiroshi So when is the next journal entry? If you read my Fanfiction page recently, i explained why my stories take time. I want to make sure each chapter is accurate and is ready to be read by others. It took me about a year and a half to make the second story.
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