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Posted: Mon Aug 23, 2010 3:49 am
Something I just wrote up and felt the need to spread. The writing isn't completely straight forward. Can anyone guess up what's misleading and the truth?
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Today was an average day. Nothing unusual happened. Everything went as it would of gone.
This morning I found myself meeting the love of my life. I held her. I savored it, the touch. She was beautiful. Average face and not a slim model body, but still a great body. Her face was plain but cute. She always wore her hair nicely. Then again, it'd be hard to imagine a way that'd look bad on her. A sentiment she didn't share.
Sweet apple. So tender she felt, I worried not to hold too tight and risk crushing her. She said something. For the life of me I wish I could remember what. We laughed. It was at my expense.
Nothing eventful happened. I met with a good friend of mine. I enjoyed her company, couldn't shake the smile off my face. I was happy. Truly happy. I didn't want it to ever end. I felt if I just stayed as I was, I could be happy forever.
We both had parted our ways. Off to work I went. It was a long trip, for a drive so short at least.
The day was average. Nothing unusual happened. Everything went and gone.
The manager made a odd remark, as always. He watches way too much T.V. I gave him a hand with his work while I finished up with mine. He was thankful, I was relieved it was done so I could finish my job that was piling up. He didn't offer to help and just goofed off the rest of the time. Typical.
Break time. I ate and talked on my cell, a grilled turkey sandwich. It tasted amazing, I my favorite. I sipped my juice as a ate, pausing on phone as m mouth filled and listened. She mocked me by making loud fake eating noises. It was adorable. I yelled at her. It was fun.
Our conversation didn't last too much longer. A girl I fancied came by. She had a worried look on her face. I smiled at her and asked her to sit with me, but she was still on the clock. She asked me a question of no importance, and I answered her. She left. The entire day I passed her, hoping for a few words to pass between us. None did.
It was an average day. Nothing unusual happened. Everything was gone.
I finally finished the long grind at work, eager and anxious to leave. I went home. I'd always be greeted by my puppy. Well, he wasn't a puppy anymore, but I still liked to call him my puppy. Happy and energetic as he was since I was a kid. I miss him.
I went and relaxed in my room. I was alone at home. I turned on my computer and checked my e-mail. One new letter, I excitedly checked. Just a weekly subscription notice. Annoyance. I had hoped it was from someone quite in particular. I been waiting for so long for a response. It wasn't going to come was it. I knew better but still I hoped.
A average day. Nothing unusual happened. Everything, gone.
I checked my phone, the battery was dying. That was fine. Not like anyone would call. I put it on my table and proceeded with busying myself. Nothing to look forward to do today, but soon the day would end, and a few moments of happiness waited over the horizon.
It was a hot night. I turned on the air condition. I was tired, but to my annoyance, not tired enough to get in bed. It was almost over.
I watched a show I liked on my computer. Too short. I busied myself till bed. I couldn't wait for the rest.
Average day, nothing unusual happened.
I held my love in my arms, truly happy. We spoke and enjoyed each others company. Someone that truly wanted to be with me. That made everything worth it. I wanted it to last forever.
I went to work. I said hi to the girl form the other day. She barely noticed me. I felt rejected and became docile around her. I came around later and made a few jokes and passed a few words together. It lasted seconds. I waited since yesterday for that moment, and it was gone. She left work without saying bye to me. She had others, I wasn't anything real. Still I wished.
I went home that day. I miss my puppy. I was alone that night.
Today nothing unusual happened.
I held my puppy and ruffled up his fur, little runt. I was smiling ear to ear as my love idled around somewhere nearby. I wanted to hold this moment forever, but I knew it had to end. I didn't want to dread it, so I just made and enjoyed the most of it.
Everything just slipped away as I tried holding on, past my fingers as it was only air that I held between them.
Nothing unusual happened.
Every dream has to end. I got up and went to work. A few jokes and laughs but no one here truly noticed me. Typical. I asked that girl if she'd like to watch something with me after work. I lured her with temptations of the fact that it'd be a blast. She wasn't interested. Can't blame her.
I went home that day, alone as usual. I miss my puppy. At least the time for me to sleep came.
Nothing happened.
For those brief moments, I was happy.
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Posted: Tue Aug 24, 2010 1:01 pm
There's one or two sentences that aren't correct, grammatically speaking. Edit and you'll find those easily. On to the important stuff... It was good. Nothing momentous, nothing downright earth-shattering. But it was well-done. You manage to display a man who lives a lonely life and, instead of drowning in his misery, consoles himself with memories and daydreams, pretending for a few moments so he can build up the courage to face another day. It's well written, hits the message home, and is interesting to read. Not bad. Not that bad at all.
P.S. My guesses: misleading, his girlfriend and puppy; truth, the girl at work and the dying cellphone that he doesn't bother charging?
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