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 Posted: Sat Jan 14, 2006 2:48 pm
You can comment here, or in the place that I"m writing, but please comment if you read it!
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Posted: Sat Jan 14, 2006 7:12 pm
It's a nice beginning, but more description on the appearance of the characters would be nice. That's really all I can say to improve on, you captured my [or "the reader's"] attention and I want to read more. I think you are doing a very nice job.
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Posted: Tue Jan 17, 2006 11:58 pm
I'll work on that. I'm glad you like it so far, this is draft number... 3 or 4. The others had either too much discription, or too much dialogue(I'm better at discription that dialogue...) I'll keep working on it, and hopefully have more before long. On one of the older drafts I have about 20 some odd pages, but on this one, not so much.
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Posted: Thu Feb 09, 2006 11:25 pm
I'm working on the next bit for my story, but school and whatnaught is catching up with me. I'm going to try and work on that in addition to all the homework and cleaning I have to do over the weekend.
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Posted: Sun Apr 16, 2006 9:37 am
OK! I've FINALLY put more up. I'll add more as I get comments on what's up so far...
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Posted: Tue Apr 18, 2006 12:07 pm
Silriel Good point. Like I said, it needs work. I"ll have to do something with that then. Changing it doesn't really hinder anything. In one of my earlier drafts she was perfectly awake and aware, and she still got caught. So I'll just change it back. It was just the way it came out as I wrote it. I'll change that when I edit that portion. but until then I"ll put up the next one, because it doesn't have anything really to do with that except a few things, which she does any way regardless of the draft. There's no problem with her getting caught... but it would have to be because of the winged-elf's own merits and not because she's slacking. At the moment... I really have no idea what you're winged-elves are like so it's all up to you... i'll just dismantle it when you get there.
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Posted: Wed Apr 19, 2006 6:10 am
Yeah... Those are fun. I've been working on them since I made one of my first RPG characters my freshman (first) year of High School, which was four years ago (now soon to be 5, how time flies...)
They've gone through several transformations, and probably go through several others before the end, but they are close to the final product now.
twisted hehehe
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