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"One More Day"

Wake up
Just another day
Or so it seemed

Tried to forget
The fighting that happened
The night before
Wishing it wasn't there any more

Get dressed
Mom's been up
Sister's already done
Dad still sleeping

Done getting ready
Need a ride to school
Sister crying
Her car is taken away from her

Try to call a friend
She's sick
Mom's stubborn
Dad just getting up

Mom says ride the bus
There is no room
We don't want to
Try to call another friend

Sister still crying
Fighting with my mom
I try not to snap
Dad starts taking a shower

Try to get answers
Mom is silent
Sister still crying
I wonder why

Still no answer
We pry more
Mom leaves the room
I follow and try to find out why

Dad is staying out of it
Sister soon comes
Mom started her car
Sister's begging to have it back

Try to tell mom
None of this makes sense
It's all unfair
Try not to lash out

Sister is screaming
Mom is watching
Doeasn't seem to care
They start fighting mroe

Shaving and pushing
Sister won't let her outside
Trying to keep her car
Dad still not getting invovled

I can't take it
I'm breaking down
I sit in the hall and cry

It's moved outside
I can still hear them
Trying to calm down
No one is talking to me

They come back
I cn't take it
Screaming at each other
I get my bag and sit on the porch

Sister is crying
Still they are fighting
Trying to ignore
Is my dad oblivious any more?

Mom comes outside
Leaves for work
Sister is screaming
Keeps saying she hates mom

I go back inside
I want to draw
I want to write
I want things to be alright

Ride gets here
I walk out before
They reach the door
"Heather'll be out soon..."

In the van
I lose it
Phil wants to know if I'm okay

"I don't know
I can't take my mom"
'It' shuts the door
Sister comes out

We pull out of the drive
Sister says she hates mom
Says dad is tired of fighting
May let mom win

Still don't know what to do
Van is mostly silent
Bad thoughts and ideas
Fly by as I sit

Sister is smoking
Boyfriend seems worried
'It' is driving
I'm losing it

Get to school
It's rather early
We sit in van
No one's talking

Sister needs to be okay
Problems need to be fixed
Dad is tied of fighting
Mom needs to change

I try to not lose it
I need to make it
Let me life through one more day
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That poem was written the day of big fight between mainly my mom and my sister. The fight was before school. Phil and "Boyfriend" are the same people and only one of two names in the poem. Sister and "Heather" are the same people as well. 'It' is some one who I do not like and have had a bad experience with. If you have any other questions, PM me.

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"Vampiress"

Dressed in black and bathe din blood
She was a perfect example
Darkly beautiful, yet violent and wild
Filled with hate, yet to able to love
Touched by death she was
And still she was a live

Alluring and charming at first glance
Until wiched intentions were revealed
Cold and alone made her like that
Her curse she bore with pride
But a heavy pain remained
Damned to walk in the lonly abyss
Searching for reason
On the dark road of immortality

She mixed passion with anger
Lust combined with hate
And showed the world no mercy
Smighting those standing in her way
To feast on the blood othousands
With no respect for anime life
But only for the hunger and taste of blood

Until for once a human caught her eye
Determined to turn him
And wiling to love
After she showed her kindness
And then the world saw
The ramance mixed with bloodlust
The vampiric loves draining the world
Their tainted world finally perfected
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This poem is just about a vampiress who is very powerful and yet searches in secret for something to fill a hole inside her. Her eye is caught by a human, and she vows to turn him no matter what. In the end, they reach a sort of dark happiness together.

This is all I have for now. I will post more when I find the poems some where in my room.

Thanks for the critism. And I don't mind what any one has to say about my writing. A lot of the time it can be helpful.