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 Posted: Mon Jul 12, 2010 10:26 pm
thought i'd put something up. let me know if you wanna see anymore..that seems to be the fair thing to ask right? lol any comments are a huge help.
[ open on a rundown bar. pan though crowd, people sitting drinking, loud music playing. Nat walks in. talks to a bartender who points to the back, he is then lead back to see a woman doing dishes in a sink. she doesn't hear him walk in.]
n(nat)- miss Wynona Kelly. [woman turns and throws a cup with force, he catches it and smiles] now is that anyway to treat an old friend?
w (Wynona)- it is when the old friend tried to get me killed!
n- now that isn't really what happened. [throws cup back at her, she catches it] i see you still have your keen reflexes...good to see.
w- [turns and continues to do the dishes] just walk away Nat. i don't have anything to say to you.
n- come on. we haven't seen each other in years. [walks up behind her and grabs her waist] i missed you.
w-[pushes him away] good to hear, thanks for coming. goodbye.
n- [playfully] your hurting my feeling.
w- [shortly] i don’t have time for this.
n- alright, i get it. your so important now. without you how would the drunks in the other room have clean glasses to drink from?
w- [turns to face him] get to the point, what do you want from me?
n- i just wanted to say hi.
w- really now? [pause, makes a face] hi.
n- hello.
w- great. we said hi, now go. [goes back to work]
n- [tired] wynona.
w- [turns to face him] look, i honestly don't have anything to say to you. i didn't even think you were alive so, just...just go. i really want to get done work, go home and sleep, not have some kind of huge emotional reunion with a guy i really i no wish to see again. [Pause then she sighs] what did you want from me?
n- [ laughs] you thought i was dead and all i got was hi?
w- see! this is why i cant talk to you! go before i call the cops. your loitering.
n- your going to call the cops? is that the best bet for a wanted woman, miss witness-less Wynona.
w-[frankly] that’s not my name.
n- [breath] you know. fine then. i spend a long a** time looking for you and you couldn't give 2 shits about it. [laughs] what happened to you? ya know? your just a waste. cleaning dishes in some s**t bar for what i guess is minimum wage, going home to I’m going assume a roach infested shithole and then what? wait around for your fat boyfriend to ******** you in the a**.
w- knock it off...
n- sorry...i was wrong. just like i was wrong coming here. i had this dumbass idea that maybe just maybe the woman i haven't seen in years, the woman who thought i was dead, might be interested in spending 3 ******** minutes with me. enjoy your life. [starts to leave]
w- Nat. it's not. [he pauses but doesn't turn] I’m at work I’m tired. it's not really the best place for this to go down.
n- would you wanna see me again?
w- [ pained expression] yes?
n- [turns.] when do you get off?
w- meet me in the back in like half hour. there's a diner down the road. i guess it wont kill me to spend some time with you. just promise me this isn’t some lame attempt to get in my pants. i really don’t need that right now.
n- i promise. but if one thing leads to another?
w- it wont.
n- great. I’ll see ya soon. [walks away]
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Posted: Mon Jul 12, 2010 11:29 pm
NICE! sireusly nice little hard to read but still enjoyed it dont want to stop reading it to minny questions lol what were thes two? "n- now that isn't really what happened. [throws cup back at her, she catches it] i see you still have your keen reflexes...good to see. " sigest's they were spec ops or some other type of ppl that require fast reflexes and a good head to servive I wanna know! lol keep goin keep goin!
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Posted: Tue Jul 13, 2010 4:33 pm
lol something like that. at least someone likes it..been dealing with a lot of grammar and form nazi's well...since some one is interested i guess i might as well put the next part up <3.
i guess i'll put up a part a day. maybe that will get my butt movin and i'll work on it more....i only have like 8 scenes written lol.
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Posted: Tue Jul 13, 2010 4:37 pm
[inside bar, Nat and Mayne are sitting at a table toward the back. Nat is drinking a beer, Mayne is playing with a pack of cards.]
n- What time is it?
m (mayne)- [not looking up] 5 minutes since last time you asked.
n- [angry] so what the ******** time does that make it?
m- [annoyed] 7:05.
n- an hour. she said she would be done in a half hour what is she doing.
m- my guess is avoiding you.
n- I never saw her leave....how long can it take to wash dishes we're the only ones in here.
m- is there a back door?
n- [stand up and starts running out side] s**t!
m- dumbass.
[a woman walks over, dressed plainly.]
woman- If your going to stay in here i have to card you.
m- I'm just playing cards.
woman- Sir...
m- [picks up cards to put them back ] I'm leaving...oh there a woman named Wynona who works here, did she leave yet?
woman- Wynona? I'm sorry I don’t know anyone named Wynona.
m- [sighs as he walks away] super. thanks anyway.
....guess this is kinda short. whatevers...let me know any input you guys think of <3 i could use it ALOT
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Posted: Tue Jul 13, 2010 10:20 pm
lol idk about that I like it lol only yes it was to short
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Posted: Wed Jul 14, 2010 6:22 am
[Mayne walks around the bar, yelling can be heard. He reaches the back to see Wynona and Nat fighting.]
w- No! I said the back!
n- That’s where I was!
w- When someone says the back why would they mean the back of the bar?
n- Are you going to talk to me or not?
w- I don’t see why I should. You’re just as stupid now as you were back then.
m- So you’re Wynona?
w- [Laughs] This is the guy you’re working with? He’s 12.
m- I’m 16.
w- [While Nat is talking] 16.
n- Please just come talk to me. What harm will it do?
w- [Lights a cigarette] Fine. Is your kid coming too?
n- Mayne knows everything I know. This [He makes air quotations] "kid" is just as tough as I am. You of all people should know you can’t judge a book by the cover.
w- [She makes overwhelmed hand gestures] Okay whatever. Follow me. [They all start walking] I Don’t see why after all this time you feel such a need to talk to me. Last time I saw you were six years ago. I was pretty sure you had died.
n- You should know me better then that.
W- Maybe. [Turns around and walks backwards to look at mayne] You seem like a normal looking kid, whatcha doin with this a*****e?
m- Eh, it's a long story.
w- It's a long walk.
n- [Stops walking] I’ll tell you all about that some other time.
w- Okay. [She turns back around.]
[They walk until a small diner is seen, they walk in, a bell chimes. the diner is basically empty. a man behind the small counter looks up.]
Man behind counter- Sara! You out of work already?
w- Yup. I had an early night for once. Can I and my friends get a pot of coffee?
m- Oh, I only drink tea.
w- [Looks at him strangely then shrugs] and a pot of hot water.
Man behind counter- my wife just finished a blueberry pie, on the house?
w- [Smiles weakly] thanks. [Walks over to a booth in the corner motions for Nat and mayne to sit, then looks up at man behind counter] this is fine right?
Man behind counter- wherever you'd like Sara. I'm the only one here so service might be a bit slow.
W-[smiles as she sits] how’s that any different from everyone other night? [Guy laughs as he goes off to get their order.]
n- Sara huh?
w- It was my mom's name. What name have you been using?
N- Nat.
w- [Laughs] god you are stupid. How is it you’re not rotting away in a jail cell somewhere?
n- A mix of dumb luck and my good looks [grins annoyingly.]
m- I’m sort of a tech geek. [Pulls out a small cell phone looking device] every cop has a small tracking device on them used in cause they can lose or killed, it was just a matter of obtaining a reader.
w- By obtain you do mean steal not...
Man behind counter- [shows up with a pot of coffee and 2 cups.] stealing Miss Sara! I thought we broke you of that little habit.
w- Oh [giggles nervously] we were just talking about...
Man behind counter- Miss Sara. These young men wouldn’t be from your past now would they?
n- Yes, but not in the way your thinking. I knew her in high school; this [pointing to Mayne] is my little brother. So i guess you’re the one who's been taking care of her huh?
Man behind counter- sure has! When my wife found her the poor thing was scared out of her mind. Some thug was after her. [He learns in smiling] i may not look it but i have a little past myself. [Laughs] as long as you’re keeping our Sara out of trouble. [Walks away]
w- [Looks ashamed] thanks. He’s a good guy, really. He’s just a bit nosy.
n- And fat.
m- [Gives device to Wynona] on this we can see every cop within a mile or 2 depending on how good reception is.
w- Handy. [Gives back device] does it do anything else?
m- [plays with the buttons on the device] i can get reading on the latest news, who they are after, what each department is currently up to, pretty much anything. [Man behind counter is seen bring the hot water and a tray with a pie, and 3 plates]
w- Oh there’s no way we can eat this whole thing.
Man behind counter- please, take it home with yaw. It’s a waste letting sit here.
w- Thanks.
Man behind counter- well i guess i better leave you kids alone. You know how to get my attention should ya’ll need anything. [Man behind counter leaves Wynona takes a breath of relief.]
w- So. What was so important you had to hunt me down anyway?
n- Is it true you've been living with bull?
w- I did, for a little bit anyway...but not anymore. [Looks down guilty]
n- Oh.
w- Nat, i really did think you had died, if i knew... [Nat looks confused] I’m not living with bull anymore. I moved in with Dante a year ago.
m- Dante?
n- [Looks hurt] oh. When i heard you were living with an ex-member of Pandora's children i just assumed.
w- Maybe we should pick this up later?
n- No! [Laughs nervously] it's not that big of a deal...really. [He shakes his head a little] anyway. Would you be able to contact bull?
w- I guess. Why?
n- I think we should try once more.
w- [Stands up and laughs] seriously! This is what you hunted me down for?
Man behind counter-[calling over from behind counter] - everything okay Sara?
w-[calling back] its fine. I was just heading home.
N-[gets a hold of her hand.] if you can’t or wont that’s fine but don’t go, not yet.
w- [rips hand away from him, grabs a napkin and pulls a pen from her pocket, writes down a number then throws it at Nat.] here! If you want him feel free but your not dragging me back into this s**t. You 2 can go out and play cowboy until your both nothing but bones but leave me the ******** out of it! [Storms off]
m- Isn’t this where you chase her?
N- No. [Looks at napkin]
m- But i thought?
n- Plans change. [Gets up, throws some money on the table] come on.
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Posted: Wed Jul 14, 2010 12:07 pm
and once again Im left hanging lol
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Posted: Thu Jul 15, 2010 10:24 pm
Opens on mayne sitting playing with the police tracker. Nat is laying with his back to him. Mayne sits up and turns on the TV flicking though channels.]
m- Do you think that old guy is mad we left the pie? (Silence) i mean it looked really good and he said it free. (Silence) do you think we could go back and get it?
n- (Sits up and yells) forget about the ******** pie!
M-Sorry. What’s your problem anyway? We had a free meal.
n- Nothing.
m- Fine. (Picks up police tracker) I looked up that Bull guy; he's got a pretty long record. Since Pandora’s children were broken up he's been picked up 20 times. The longest amount of time he ever stayed in prison was 4 days. They aren't sure how he's getting out. They do know he has been in contact with almost all ex members. They believe he is currently working closely with an unnamed assassin team.
n- has to be the Saeki sisters, he always liked them.
m- So. This guy is on our side right? I mean you use to work for him.
n- I’m not really sure. I know he wants the reestablish the old American order more then anyone. But he was never that crazy about me to begin with and. (looks over at the TV) turns that up. (Mayne turns up the TV)
TV news announcer- it has been conformed that Nat lord was seen in a down town blues club. Once again we must stress this man is presumed armed and dangerous, police ask anyone who sees him contact the police and stay away. He has been seen with a youth of Middle Eastern descent...
m- (Yells at TV) I’m Indian jack a**!
n- (To mayne) stop.
TV news announcer- at this time we can not say what his goal is in our area but police have been authorized to shoot on sight. Anyone with information regarding Nat Lord or any ex- members of the former terrorist group know as "Pandora's children" please contact the following number.
n- Hey, we got upgraded to terrorist.
m- If there on us that fast shouldn't we leave?
n- Don’t get scared on me. In a hick town like this no cop is going have the balls to kill us. As long as the army isn’t onto us yet were fine. (Turns off the TV) did she give me the right number?
m- Its the last number the cops have.
n- Might not be useful anymore then. I know Bull. He doesn't let information get out. What’s the last address?
m- Some apartment building on church. The cops have yet to check on it.
n- There scared.
m- You know i could have gotten all this info on my own. Why did we even bother going to see that girl? All she did was giving us an outdated number. (Nat goes into the bathroom. mayne raises his voice so Nat will hear him) if you just wanted to see her that’s fine just don’t get why it's some big deal.
n- (Pokes his head out of the door) we learned she is in contact with Dante. (Goes back in)
m- Super. Who the ******** is that? (Silence. after a pause Mayne yells) who is he! (Short pause) is there any reason why you won’t tell me anything? Who is he who is he who is he (repeats)
n- (Comes out) fine! If it will shut you up. (Mayne nods) he was sort an unofficial member. I brought him in to help us a lot.
m- Oh. (Pause) ooooooooooh! And now he's with that girl...
n- it's nothing like that.
m- You sure looked pissed when she said she was living with him.
n- She can do whatever she wants. (He goes back into the bathroom.)
m- (Starts flicking though channels again) so what are we doing? Are we leaving?
(In bathroom)
n- [Shouts] no. i want to stick around for a while and give her a chance to cool down. She might have information we can use.
M-(shouting from the other room) if you just want to see her i don’t care.
n- (Sits down on the toilet) [to self] it's not like that... (Gets up and looks he in the mirror. Nat looks down at his hands then back up at his face. After taking a deep breath and he walks out into the other room, grabs his jacket) we’re shopping.
m- [Confused] what?
n- We can’t be going out to eat all the time now. The go’s starting to catch on to us. We need to keep lower profiles.
m- (Looks at the police tracker) we're pretty safe as of now. This whole town only has like 20 cops; so far it seems the army is still looking for us down south. We should have a few days before they know what state we're in.
n- Good. (He walks to the door.)
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Posted: Sat Jul 17, 2010 12:23 pm
*looks for another page only to find air* THERE NOT ANOTHER PAGE TO THESE BOOK?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!.........aw come on its just starting to get good!......*cry's*
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 11:11 am
oh i kinda forgot lol not much more left but some
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 11:15 am
(Opens in a supermarket. {food haven?} Nat and Mayne are walking down the isles. Their cart is full of cases of water, soda, and cans. Mayne is pushing the cart, he look very embarrassed.)
n- (Starts throwing cans of soup into the cart.) soup is great because if you have to you can just eat it from the can. It’s pretty safe to just put the whole can on a fire and cook it that way. Really you don’t even have to heat it. It might taste like s**t but i mean you won’t die. Plus its light it won’t weigh you down. Ramen is good like that too but you need something to cook it in, or at least something to heat water. (Looks around) i wonder if they sell like pots and s**t. You like ramen right?
m- Don’t care.
n- I love the whole health bar movement but you can’t just live on them. ******** your body up. I mean i was only eating them for a while and I got so skinny i looked about 12, plus i had to take a dump every 5 minutes. Christ the smell...
m- Can we go soon?
n- Yeah i guess, why? (Looks at mayne who looks very uncomfortable, he laughs) what’s your with you?
m- I just want to go...
n- You don’t like shopping with another guy do you? (Mayne groans and walks ahead of Nat.) You ill homophobe. (Grabs Mayne for a huge hug, he fights him off and starts to rush away. Nat follows him in a semi dance) [said in an effeminate voice] baby! Why you run-in! (Grabs Mayne from behind and tries to kiss him. Mayne pushes him off, Nat looks to see an elderly woman has stopped to watch them) it's okay, we're brothers! (The woman snorts and rushes off, Nat laughs and gets the cart to start pushing it, Mayne gets in his face)
m- I thought we need to keep a low profile!
N- Shah… Christ kid. Calm down alright? (Laughs to him) you’re so serous.
(They continue to shop a little then walk over to the cashiers. Right away the cashier seems to notice them. Nat puts the items up without really looking up.)
n- (Off handily) hey man. (Walks over to the cashier and starts going though his wallet.) You guys take cards right?
Cashier/Aki- (grabs Nat's wrist knocking the wallet from his hand, speaks flatly) Nat.
N- (Nat looks up first with confusion then realization.) Aki.
(Mayne looks at the 2 and starts to gather items in his hands but doesn’t move. Aki slowly pulls Nat's hand toward him.)
n- Your goina fight me in a food haven?
(Mayne runs off with the handful of food. Aki pushes Nat full force into the cart and gives chase. Nat tries to stand in the cart but falls on his back. as the cart moves to crash into a glass case he twist himself so he faces the case, he uses the handle on the case to pull himself up and kick backwards, hitting Aki in the chest. Nat back flips out of the cart and starts to run to the back of the store, Aki keeps chase. Nat comes to a soda display; he picks up a box of soda and hits Aki across the face, knocking him to the floor. Nat gets on top of him)
N- (Screaming) why are we fighting?
(Aki head-butts Nat knocking him down. Aki picks up the soda box and tries to drop it on Nat's ankle. Nat moves in time and tries to get up, in doing so he turns his back to Aki, who drops the soda case on the back of Nat's neck; he then tries to choke Nat out.)
a- Bull is offering 100 grand for you dead and 500 grand for you alive.
(Nat elbows Aki in the head knocking Aki off of him, the 2 run till they get to a bakery. Aki jumps on to a cake display and then jumps on top of Nat. he pushes Nat's face into the ground several times. Mayne comes running up and just looks at the 2.)
N- (Turns his head to face Mayne) Keep stealing food!
(Mayne runs away. Nat gets Aki off of him and runs toward the bread oven. Nat grabs a wooden paddle, he swings at Aki but misses, Aki throws a knife into Nat's leg, and Nat falls. Nat throws the Bread paddle at Aki and manages to get over to the open end of the bread oven. He pulls out a brick. Aki comes from behind him and pushes his head into the brick oven. Nat turns and smashes the loose brick into Aki's temple. Aki goes down. Nat checks Aki's neck for a pulse then walks over and gets 4 knives. He stabs the first 2 into Aki's legs. Aki groans and tries to sit up. Nat sits on his torso and stabs the other 2 knives though Aki's palms.)
n- Now! Why did i just fight you?
a- (weakly) Bull wants you dead.
n- Yeah i got that much. Why?
a-(spits blood into Nat's face) Trader!
n- (Confused) what?
a- Bull will kill you.
m- (Voice only) Nat we have to leave!
N- (Turns to face Mayne) Minute! (Turns back to Aki) how much does bull knows about me?
M- Nat we have to go. Now!
a- (smiling) do you like Wynona’s new hair cut?
n- (Nat looks shocked, and then punches Aki in the face.) she's left out of this!
A- That’s really up to her isn’t? (Nat picks up the brick and starts to smash it into Aki's face. mayne grabs him and after a few seconds manages to pull him off of Aki. the two run off into the car and drive off.)
(Opens with Nat driving and Mayne messes with the police scanner.)
m- It looks like they don’t know what car was in but i doubt it will take them very long to figure that much out.
n- How much food did you get?
m- I don’t know...like 3, 4 handfuls.
n- Damn it! We need more food then that.
m- Well i had to come looking for you.
n- (Turns to face mayne) Why! Food is more important!
M- Okay, I’m sorry (points to road) just watch the road. (They sit in silence for a moment. mayne continues looking at the police scanner.) They still don’t know where we're staying. First priority should be getting all our stuff and a new car.
n- We’re getting Wynona.
m- (Flatly) ******** off.
n- If bull wants me, he'll go though her.
m- Wants you? I thought that was the guy we were looking for?
n- Yeah well finding out he has a price on my head changes s**t.
m- Nat I’m all for saving the girl and all that heroic bullshit but i need my stuff. My laptop, phone, everything is in that hotel.
n- (Screams) this is why i hate tech s**t! We don’t need it!
m- Maybe not but we do need a new car. There was a dealer next door to the hotel i can make it look like the car we stole was sold. That should buy us at least a day. Give me 20 minutes and i can get it. (Pause) the longer we wait in this the worse off we are.
n- (Slams wheel) fine! 10 minutes. And that’s everything, getting your s**t, the car everything!
(Opens in hotel room. Nat is pacing. The TV is turned on to the news.)
On site news reporter- It had been conformed that the person killed was Aki (lastname). At the moment it is unsure, however who started this fight. Aki (lastname) was a former member of the terrorist group Pandora’s children.
Desk news reporter- Scary stuff. Have the police commented on the rumor it is Nat lord who attacked him?
On site news reporter- The police have yet to comment on the matter. Witnesses to the event have stated that the man did match the description.
Desk news reporter- Have they commented on the rumor that Pandora’s children plan to reunite?
On site news reporter- earlier it was believed, Nat lord’s goal was to reunite the group but in light recent crimes this is no longer the theory.
(Mayne walks into the room and hands Nat a pair of keys.)
M- See? I told you it wouldn’t take me very long.
n- (Looks at the clock.) a half an hour. (He goes out the door. Mayne smiles at himself. He started to pick up his stuff when he hears Nat scream. Nat storms back into the room) tell me you got us a ******** Winnebago?
m- Yeah.
n- You...your retarded right? A Winnebago?
m- (Confused) yeah. It has a bathroom and a fridge. We never have to leave it. It even has a TV.
n- How can I outrun the cops in a ******** Winnebago!
m- (Innocently) we can get it supped up.
n- Supped up…you’re… (Sits down on the bed and covers his face with his hands.) I. I work with a moron. I chose to hang out with a teenager who knows nothing and this is what happens. (He laughs and looks straight ahead of him) hello sir. I would like to install nos in my (screams) Winnebago!
m- Well really it’s not a Winnebago...it’s called an icon…it’s a different brand.
n- (Looks at mayne blankly, then stands up, throws his hands in the air and screams) ******** it! (He walks out of the room. Mayne shrugs and walks out.)
(Opens on Mayne getting his stuff into the RV. Nat is sitting in the driver’s seat. )
n- I can’t believe I’m about to drive this boat.
m- Oh I forgot. (He pulls out a GPS from his pocket.) Here. (Plugs it into the car) I’ll just program in…
n- I know where Wynona is. She’ll be at the bar.
m- We need plates first.
n- ******** s**t! When does this bullshit end, huh?
m- I know a place where we can do everything. I already called. Watermelon put aside…
n- Watermelon?
m- Yeah. She put aside like 7 plates for us. This make is pretty common. As long as we get different plates and some different bumper stickers no one will ever be able to trace us for very long. That is as long as we keep the car in good shape.
n- (Looks at mayne blankly.) how do you know...anyone?
M- I grew up with her. I know you don’t like dealing with a lot of outside people but we can trust her. Remember all those letters I use to get? They were from her.
n- (Calmer) oh yeah…you never really said anything about them. Alright fine. We’ll go to...watermelon…get everything we need for this so called car and then get Wynona. (Pauses) you’re going to let me do that at some point right?
m- (Finished putting in the directions.) I don’t see why we have to go get her. I would think she would be in way more danger if she went with us.
n- (Looks at mayne intensely) shut the ******** up. (Turns on the car and drives off)
that ends the first ep. i dont know if i'm goina keep going on it.
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 12:57 pm
ROFLOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "A WINNEBAGO! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" roflol can just see Nat going after Mayne in the supermarket roflol I think you should keep going. I mean you used the term "old America" what happened for this term to come around? Whats up with Pandora's children? why were they a terrorist group?
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