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 Posted: Sun Jun 20, 2010 5:48 am
This play is untitled atm. I have 2 other scenes as well, scene 2 and 4, im working on the 3rd scene.
SCENE 1
(The interior of a subway train car; it’s the E train. The passengers include TAZ, JAVIER, MEIA, HARLEY, LEI and HOPE, all of which are scattered about the car. LEI and HOPE sit together chatting in hushed tones, adjacent from TAZ; his head in his hands. JAVIER sits a seat away from TAZ, staring at him with suspicion. HARLEY and MEIA sit another seat away from JAVIER, and a seat apart from each other. WYATT enters with some trouble getting caught in the closing doors, gathering attention from his shabby clothes, scruffy features and loud grunts of effort. He pulls a large guitar from the clutches of the train doors.)
WYATT
Tin can death trap…
(Wyatt addresses the passengers in the car.)
Excuse me and sorry for the intrusion. My name is Wyatt; allow me to finish off this night with a tune or two.
(No one really responds and WYATT begins playing “Imagine”. He gets to the line “Nothing to kill or die for” and stops as the train rocks violently, then comes to an abrupt stop, knocking the passengers around. TAZ remained with his head down still and began to fume a little.)
I guess they didn’t like that song.
(An announcement is made about a malfunction. It is unknown as to when the train will be moving again.)
TAZ
(Pounds fist on the chair. Everyone is startled.)
Bullshit!
(Gets up in a fury and bangs on the train cab door.)
JAVIER
(Nervous)
Hey…
(Stands up.)
There’s no point to that. Hey!
(TAZ gives JAVIER a dirty look and tries to open the train door between cars. It’s locked.)
There’s only one conductor and he’s at the other end of the train.
TAZ
Just… shut the ******** up!
JAVIER
You’re the one having a break down man. Calm down.
TAZ
Shut your mouth! I don’t ******** need this!
WYATT
No need to freak out, my angry friend.
TAZ
Why are you people talking to me? You don’t even know me…
(HARLEY leans forward watching TAZ, WYATT and JAVIER. MEIA stares straight ahead with one hand in her purse. TAZ walks to the other door to struggle with it.)
LEI
We just had to ride the crazy train.
HOPE
(Hushed tone)
Don’t start anything.
LEI
No seriously, what is it about the subway system that brings out the psycho in everybody?
HOPE
Can’t you listen to me for once?
WYATT
Personally I think it’s the same old air circulating in these things that does it.
(HOPE and LEI give WYATT a weird look as he smiles at them.)
TAZ
This train needs to move now.
(Paces a little and hits the wall near MEIA, making her jump.)
HARLEY
You alright miss?
(Meia nods quickly; stone faced. She keeps staring straight ahead.)
WYATT
You know music has a very calming effect. It’s sooths the-
TAZ
-No! Old man just be quiet.
JAVIER
(Stepping between TAZ and WYATT.)
You need to relax.
TAZ
You need to back away from me and sit down.
HARLEY
(To JAVIER)
Dude, listen; you’re making it worse.
WYATT
(Stepping forwardly toward TAZ.)
Calling me old is fine, but don’t silence the music! Let the music play!
(JAVIER tries to hold WYATT back with one hand, still staring at TAZ.)
LEI
They’re all cracked, especially him.
HOPE
Stop it.
WYATT
Don’t be so cold to the songs.
(WYATT pulls away from JAVIER and grabs his guitar and begins to play and sing “Hey Jude”. He gets to the line “take a sad song and make it better.”)
TAZ
(TAZ grabs hold of WYATT’s shirt and pushes him back. He falls on his rear clutching the guitar. JAVIER rushes to WYATT.)
You have to complicate things? Didn’t you hear me? Don’t push me!
JAVIER
(JAVIER looks up at TAZ quickly and then jumps up.)
Son of a b***h!
(JAVIER knocks TAZ in the jaw, sending him to the floor.)
HARLEY
(HARLEY protectively shields MEIA. LEI holds HOPE.)
Dude! Seriously, what the ********? That’s not helping.
JAVIER
(Standing over TAZ)
I remember you!
(TAZ slowly reaches into the back of his pants. He pulls out a gun and sticks it in JAVIER’s face. The passengers reel back at the sight. Taz gets up and JAVIER steps back staring at the barrel fearful and angry. WYATT sits behind TAZ, the smile finally gone from his face.)
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Posted: Sun Jun 20, 2010 5:50 am
SCENE 2
(Struggling sounds come from behind a door. Then there is a large BANG against the door and it swings open. The apartment is small and relatively neat. TAZ steps into the apartment quickly. He begins to rummage around, tossing everything aside; pocketing anything of value. TAZ nervously paces around still looking for more things to take. He jumps at the sound of his own cell phone RINGING. He looks at who is calling and his face grows sad.)
TAZ
(Talking into his cell phone, while still looking around the apartment.)
Lil…
LILITH (Off Stage) -simultaneously with next line-
Hello mister Cadmus. Have I got a deal for you.
TAZ -simultaneously with the line above-
Lilith…
LILITH
For a mere 9.99-
TAZ
(Stops searching the apartment.)
-I’ll hang up.
LILITH
No wait! It’s just a joke.
TAZ
I’m on the job.
LILITH
Right, that’s what I’m calling you about. You said you would be done working an hour ago.
TAZ
…I’m working over-time.
LILITH
Are you really? ...Taz?
TAZ
I can’t talk right now.
LILITH
I want to believe you.
TAZ
What?
LILITH
You’re in trouble again aren’t you?
TAZ
Why do you have to say that? Why can’t it just be that I’m working hard; for us.
LILITH
I always get tangled in your lies. You spin them to well.
TAZ
That’s not a real complement.
LILITH
Don’t mess around.
TAZ
I’m not trying to. I really am working.
LILITH
It’s nothing shady.
TAZ
No, I’m just a legit little delivery boy… and I have to get back.
LILITH
Come home whenever then.
TAZ
Love you?
LILITH
(Sigh)
Love you.
(Hangs up)
TAZ
(Talking to the dial tone)
…Sorry
(Gets back to trashing the apartment, digging around with more fury. Something crashes to the floor.)
I haven't finished scene 3 but i have completed scene 4.
SCENE 4
(TAZ stands outside a door trying to jar it open. MEIA is walking down the hallway with DARA. TAZ hears them coming to the door and quickly starts to exit)
MEIA
(Looking behind her)
The hallway is crawling with cops again.
DARA
You better check your locks.
MEIA
I think it was another break in.
DARA
This is why I tell you to carry ******** mace. … Least the cops know the address well enough.
(TAZ comes down the hall bumping MEIA and exits)
MEIA
S’cuse you!
DARA
(Turning toward the Direction TAZ left, while reaching into her purse.)
Tazers are good too. I’m just sayin’.
MEIA
As much as I’d like to, can’t just zap everyone who pisses you off.
(Enters apartment.)
DARA
Why not? I never lose any sleep over it.
MEIA
This is why I’m not too sure about lending you my boots.
DARA
Why’s that?
MEIA
You might bloody up my heels.
(Hands the boots over to DARA.)
DARA
I’d wash them. That’s just nasty giving back dirty shoes.
MEIA
Well that’s nice of you.
(Turns on the computer with a sigh.)
I can’t afford to get a new pair. So it’s time to make money.
DARA
Same for me.
MEIA
Then get out my house.
DARA
You mean this closet? Don’t have to tell me twice.
MEIA
Call you later.
(DARA exits and stands in the hall for a moment reading a txt message. Mean while MEIA slips behind a dressing screen. A moment later and DARA is knocking at the door. MEIA comes out half dressed and opens the door.)
MEIA
Didn’t I just kick you out?
DARA
Hush heffa, since you said you need money, I got good news.
MEIA
Dara…
DARA
Wanna come down to Garden tonight?
MEIA
I knew you were going to ask me that. That was a one-time thing.
DARA
But you were so good on the pole. One of the girls just texted me a ******** sob story, so we need to fill the spot.
MEIA
No thank you.
DARA
Its better cash than, “c**-on-camera.com”.
MEIA
It’s “hottcamys.com”… and because of it my wallet can crack skulls.
DARA
Not right now. Till your check gets in, it can’t crack s**t.
MEIA
Hate my income?
(Heads back behind the dressing screen to finish.)
DARA
I thought you did.
MEIA
It’s a pretty lie for a good buck.
DARA
Meia, really? That’s a decent living to you ?
MEIA
That’s living. A job is better than no job.
(Peaks out to grab an instant meal on a table, from behind the screen. DARA is faced away.)
DARA
Look at me, this job’s no comparison. It’s not even that different from it. I’d just rather you have cash in your pocket now, so you’re not eating instant meals for dinner.
MEIA
How do you-
DARA
- I can hear the ********’ plastic wrap .
MEIA
Ugh.
(Tosses the instant meal from behind the dressing screen.)
Garden…really? But it’s just so…Un-Anonymous.
DARA
Un-Anonymous?
MEIA
I don’t wanna see anyone’s face. And the lap dances…
DARA
There is a strict no touching policy, and if they do touch you, let me know.
MEIA
(Coming out from behind the screen.)
But I just got into uniform.
DARA
Perfect; you don’t have to change when you get there.
MEIA
You’re not gonna drop this?
DARA
Nope.
MEIA
…I better make good money tonight.
DARA
(Excitedly)
You will. We need the extra pair of tits.
(Grabbing MEIA’s chest.)
MEIA
Con-artist.
DARA
Professionally. You too slut.
MEIA
Just for tonight.
DARA
That’s a good a ‘tude as any.
MEIA
Could you head out in front of me, I’ll meet you down stairs in a min.
DARA
I guess but I’m gonna head to my house first, so just meet me at Garden then.
(MEIA nods and waves her off. DARA exits. MEIA turns off her computer and grabs her coat and bag. She hesitates for a moment making her way fidgeting, slowly to the door. She steps on the instant meal she threw before. With a sigh she looks down, then kicks it to the side and exits quickly.)
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Posted: Sun Jun 20, 2010 5:54 am
It's a bit confusing due to the number of characters but I don't mind much. I was expecting this to be a horror story since I have a story too about subway which goes along the horror genre. So, I think it's fine...
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Posted: Sun Jun 20, 2010 4:55 pm
This play is actually a tragedy, comedy, drama and I plan to direct it this coming fall with my college's actor's guild. The story calls for a good amount of characters and the club has alot of members so it works best.
Thank you for your comment, I'm still waiting to see whats wrong with it. I find there is something seriously wrong with the play, but then again I've read it over and over a billion times, so I've gotten bored with it, so it could just be me.
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Posted: Sun Jul 18, 2010 11:20 am
SCENE 5
(A small corner store somewhere within New York City. JAVIER is sitting at a counter looking at a computer screen. )
ALEX (Offstage)
Can you bring in the new stock?
JAVIER
On it.
(JAVIER calls over his shoulder but keeps staring at the computer screen. ALEX; the store owner enters from behind JAVIER and peers over his shoulder.)
ALEX
“Hottcamys.com”?
(JAVIER falls out his chair startled and dumbstruck. ALEX leans toward the computer.)
Live n***s, sexy girls, chat them up and bust a-
JAVIER
-I am so sorry!
ALEX
(Smiling)
…I understand you have needs.
JAVIER
It won’t happen again.
ALEX
Please not at work.
JAVIER
I’ll just…yeah.
(Goes to cart stock. Javier takes the boxes off stage and keeps coming back for more.)
ALEX
(Stays at the front counter and fiddles with the computer laughing. ALEX suddenly gets upset.)
Javier!
JAVIER
What’s wrong boss?
ALEX
This thing turned off on me.
JAVIER
It’s going to crash, a lot. You need to get a new one.
ALEX
Why so you can look at porn in high definition?
JAVIER
Seriously miss Alex. This one is really old; really, really old. So are the register and the security in this place. I mean we don’t even have cameras.
ALEX
(ALEX pulls out a bat from under the counter.)
I haven’t had need of anything else so far. Want to test me?
JAVIER
No, I’ll just get back to work.
ALEX
Go check in back for the taxes. I’m just going to do it by hand.
(JAVIER exits. ALEX sits down and smacks the side of the computer. The front door bell CHIMES and TAZ walks in with a hood up. TAZ stands around in the store in awkward silence for a good period of time.)
Can I help you? Excuse me? Sir?
TAZ
Pack of batteries.
ALEX
Which one?
TAZ
(Takes a moment to look at the selection.)
The ones at the top.
ALEX
(Pointing over her shoulder)
That’ll be 3.50.
(TAZ reaches into his pocket and pulls out a 5 dollar bill. ALEX reluctantly takes it and opens the register. Then she reaches behind her to get the batteries off the wall. TAZ hops over the counter and knocks her down to get at the register while her back is turned. ALEX grabs her bat. She gets up to hit him with it, but TAZ grabs hold on the other end. He pushes ALEX to the wall and presses the bat to her throat.)
TAZ
Don’t get in the way and I’ll let you go.
ALEX
(Choking and straining)
No! Jav-
(TAZ nervously presses harder cutting ALEX’s words. He looks over his shoulder.)
TAZ
All I need is the money!
(JAVIER comes running in. TAZ hears him and swings ALEX into a choke hold and the bat falls to the floor.)
JAVIER
What are you doing?
(JAVIER runs at TAZ but stops short as TAZ holds ALEX in front of him.)
TAZ
Step out of the way!
ALEX
(Straining)
No! He took the money!
TAZ
Move …or I’ll snap her neck!
(JAVIER hesitantly steps to the side. TAZ’s hold on ALEX keeps her from speaking at all, and her struggling weakens.)
Turn around!
JAVIER
Let her go now.
TAZ
Turn around damn it!
(JAVIER turns around and TAZ drags ALEX along with him toward the door, she has become limp in his grasp. When he releases ALEX she falls unconscious to the ground. TAZ is a little freaked. JAVIER jumps around when she hits the floor and goes to her; she stirs a bit.)
You have to complicate things? Don’t push me! It wasn’t supposed to even…
(TAZ backs out of the store slowly and JAVIER jumps up. TAZ spins around to flee and JAVIER zooms after him off stage.)
SCENE 6
(Outside the corner store. LEI and HOPE walk on to the stage looking into a small coin purse. HOPE takes coins out one by one, while LEI looks over her shoulder.)
LEI
How much do we have?
HOPE
(Counting coins)
70, 80, 85, 90, 91…92. 92 cents. What can we get with that?
LEI
You want a sandwich?
HOPE
That’s a dollar.
LEI
They’re not gonna’ stress 8 cents.
HOPE
I don’t know…
LEI
If it’s that bad, I’ll find some more.
(Starts searching around on the ground, picking up bits and pieces.)
There is bound to be a few change people threw away or forgot.
(Kneels down onto the floor.)
HOPE
(Hushed tone)
Lei! Stop! Get off the ground!
(Takes out a napkin and wipes LEI’s hands.)
LEI
Calm down, I’m just trying to get you something to eat.
HOPE
We both need to get something.
LEI
I’ll be fine.
HOPE
No, let’s just split a bagel with cream cheese. That’s 75 cents, and the park has a water fountain.
LEI
I’d rather you just-
HOPE
-Please! …Don’t argue about this.
LEI
Whatever Hope.
HOPE
Babe, don’t be like that. I’m sorry.
(TAZ come running on stage and crashes through LEI and HOPE. The two girls fall down and the coins scatter onto the floor. JAVIER comes running after TAZ in hot pursuit, stopping for a moment looking concerned but hesitantly continues the chase.)
LEI
What the ******** jumps up and attempts to run after TAZ but HOPE grabs her. HOPE has a hard time standing. )
HOPE
Are you crazy, don’t go running off!
LEI
That guy mowed us down!
HOPE
I know, but what are you gonna do to him?
LEI
I’m gonna pound his face in!
(LEI attempts to leave again and HOPE stumbles holding onto her still. She cries out in pain.)
Babe?
HOPE
Just help me. The money went everywhere. I…
(HOPE looks around and sighing drops to the ground to pick up the money. LEI drops slowly to help her. HOPE gets frantic, then she starts to count what they have found and begins to cry.)
Where did it all go? There’s only 45 cents here!
LEI
Babe it’s ok.
HOPE
No! I’m so tired. It hurts.
LEI
I’ll help you walk then.
HOPE
My legs don’t hurt. I just want to sleep…
LEI
(LEI pulls out a metro card.)
I’ll put you on the train. You go ahead of me and I’ll wait the 15 minutes.
HOPE
No! Stay with me!
(HOPE tries to stand but her knees give out and she stays planted to the floor.
I feel like I’m gonna’ pass out…
(HOPE starts crying again. LEI helps her off the floor and dusts her off. She takes HOPE into her arms and she quiets down. They walk off stage.)
SCENE 7
(LILITH appears on stage a few moments later. She stands looking around and TAZ runs on stage behind her putting his hands on her shoulders.)
LILITH
Oh my god! W-where have you been? I’ve been walking around for half an hour.
TAZ
(He stands behind LILITH hugging her waist.)
I just got off work, let’s go.
LILITH
Why are you rushing me? You are the one who’s late.
TAZ
This…this is a bad area.
LILITH
(She wiggles out of TAZ’s arms and turns to face him.)
So you made me wait here by myself?
TAZ
It’s dark now and I don’t want you around here anymore.
(TAZ places his hands back on her waist and begins pushing her forward.)
LILITH
Don’t! I’m exhausted.
(TAZ pushes a little more insistently.)
Stop! You’re hurting me!
TAZ
(TAZ releases LILITH immediately.)
I…I’m sorry. I didn’t mean to be so rough.
LILITH
Are you trying to break off a rib?
TAZ
(He takes LILITH’s face into his hands and kisses her forehead then hugs her.)
I didn’t mean it.
LILITH
O…K. I know you didn’t, just don’t be so pushy. What’s with you?
TAZ
Nothing, I just don’t want you to be angry at me. I don’t want to lose you.
LILITH
I’m not going anywhere. Are you?
TAZ
Of course not, never, unless you tell me otherwise.
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Posted: Fri Aug 20, 2010 9:26 am
It's unfinished but here's what I have for scene 3.
SCENE 3
(The apartment is even more of a mess. Taz is sitting in the dark. He looks at the time he’s spent in the apartment. TAZ puts up his hood and exits quickly. OFFICER YOUNG and OFFICER HAYES enter the hallway a few moments later.)
OFFICER HAYES
(Talking into radio, approaching the door.)
This is Officer Hayes; Officer young and I are here in response to the 4-5-9. Over.
(To OFFICER YOUNG)
Door’s open.
(OFFICER HAYES slowly enters the apartment gun drawn. The stage is dimly lit; OFFICER HAYES looks around the apartment and walks to the back where TAZ had exited from. OFFICER YOUNG stays in the doorway.)
OFFICER YOUNG
(Inspecting the door.)
Only one lock?
(Peels off an eviction notice from the door.)
This guy has got to be an idiot or just really unlucky.
OFFICER HAYES (Off STAGE)
Clear.
(Appears back onstage.)
Now what are you going on about?
OFFICER YOUNG
(Lifting the notice up.)
It says this guy is supposed to be out in two days. Maybe he jumped ship early and left the door open; pretty much closed case.
(OFFICER YOUNG turns to head out.)
OFFICER HAYES
The window in the bedroom is open. It looks like the perp. used it to escape. You were the one to point out the single lock as well, and it’s been busted. Quick to dip from you’re duties today?
(OFFICER YOUNG turns back around.)
OFFICER YOUNG
Excuse me, let’s feel sorry for the poor unlucky b*****d then; may his s**t rest in peace at the nearest pawn shop.
(OFFICER YOUNG performs a small cross in the air over the apartment.)
HARLEY
(Coming up behind OFFICER YOUNG)
Who died?
OFFICER YOUNG
(Surprised)
s**t! I’m sorry, can you please go to your own home.
HARLEY
But this is my home.
OFFICER YOUNG
Oh…Can you please show some identification Sir?
(HARLEY hastily pulls out his ID looking over the shoulders of the two officers. OFFICER HAYES takes it.)
OFFICER HAYES
Ok, Harley Feste?
OFFICER YOUNG
That’s what the notice says.
HARLEY
Notice?
(OFFICER YOUNG hands HARLEY the eviction notice, he sighs deeply.)
Can I just see my apartment now? I just got out of class…
(Walks into the ransacked apartment.)
OFFICER YOUNG
We were called in by your neighbor. The apartment was broken into not long ago. Looks like the culprit slipped away down the fire-escape.
(HARLEY begins putting items back into place. OFFICER HAYES shoots OFFICER YOUNG a nasty look, then regain professional composure.)
OFFICER HAYES
We’d just like you to make a statement.
HARLEY
A statement? I wasn’t even here.
OFFICER YOUNG
Well, have you noticed any suspicious people around your building lately?
HARLEY
(Small chuckle)
You’re kidding right? Have you seen this building?
OFFICER HAYES
Anything you can think of would be helpful in catching the person who burglarized your home.
HARLEY
This is what? The third or fourth time there has been a robbery in this building. What more can anyone say to be helpful?
OFFICER HAYES
Sir, I understand but we are dealing with the same problem.
HARLEY
(Handling his eviction notice again.)
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