Water Faerie Naomi
*Pats Horacia's head* Leave a comment. ^^
Whadda ya think? Okay. First I eats sandwich.
Imagery is exceptional.
The emotions presented look right but don’t feel real despite the fact that the scenery is perfect.
*bites sandwich* Okay, um, *swallows* I applaud the stabs at rhyme but I feel that the connects made by the use of rhyme are weak and hurt the overall piece.
I am confused by “pure petals on the trees” the image created is on more fit for winter and for some reason I think leaves or flowers would have worked and if you did mean flowers I believe the symbol itself is strong enough it doesn’t need a adjective like pure. Flowers are pretty and delicate, we get that from the mental image so the connotative meaning of the word.
*sips from milkshake, then strangles said milkshake* Triple thumbs up for the use of “thee.”
The fifth stanza is my favorite because the rhyme works, it strengthens your argument, and feels so strong with the images and emotions.
Excellent use of the night.
Ands I think that it from me. *adds mustard to sandwich*
Poetry is something I’ve dabbled in most of my life but I’m far from knowing half of what I say and being a natural critic and being surrounded by serious artist has worn down my ability to wrangle my sharp tongue so I apologize if I hurt your feelings, just let me know and I will change what needs to be altered for the next thing you post. Don’t hold back, I didn’t, so I can learn what works best for you. *eyes milkshake*
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Ooh, interesting 
