This is my first quest and I'm new, so let's get to it!
1. Intro 2. The Girl 3. The Solider 4. Resources, family, etc.
YAY!! Invisibility
Posted: Wed May 26, 2010 9:28 pm
y u do this no frand
Name: --
Nickname: idkjust yet
Age: 16
Birthday: WE'LL SEE
Sign: probs still Taurus
Gemstone: Emerald
Blood Type: wow idk yet
Fav. Food: Pancakes loaded with butter and syrup, apples, and grilled cheese sandwiches as her comfort foods. Have you ever had a grilled panini with granny smith apples that stuff is the bomb that's her fav for sure
Hated Food: Any kind of meat. She’s a vegetarian, so the thought of eating meat makes her sick to her stomach.
School: Sophomore at Crystal Academy
Hobbies:
Movies, Any kind of movie is up for grabs and Lottie watches them all, if the plot appeals to her. Being a teenager, she’s still often sucked into the trap of romantic comedies, thinking they’ll teach her about life, or at least love, so she tends to see those frequently. But she is sincerely trying to expand her palate. She loves going to the movies alone, but would gladly accept the company of others. When not going to a theater, Lottie often times rents movies. The people at her local Blockbuster know her by name! More than anything, she enjoys the visual and storytelling aspects of movies, and wants one day to dabble further in the study of film. Her favorite movies are quiet ones with soft piano music, where a romance unfolds in images more than words. She really doesn’t dislike any type of movie, though she tends to shy away from anything about gangs. While she isn't a part of any film clubs, she is a part of the drama department at Crystal Academy, helping out with any productions in whatever way she can. Though it would probably be better to join a film club, at this time Lottie thinks she needs to hone her skills first through stage since that is where film originally came from! Background story? Ever since Lottie was a child she has loved movies. Growing up she always had a movie in the background (her favorite being The Little Mermaid since Ariel had red hair too!) and would sometimes drop her dolls to watch her favorite scenes. As she grew older her hobby ebbed during middle school, but now that she's in Crystal Academy she's rekindled her love!
DS Games, While not a gamer of any of the larger platforms (and finding the other portable platforms not nearly as cute), Lottie absolutely loves DS games. When done for the day, Lottie will wind down with a round of whatever game she is currently playing. Or if she must travel somewhere or do some waiting, she is sure to have her DS handy. She does not differentiate between games and will try them all at least once. It all began one day on her way home from school. It was raining and having forgotten her umbrella, she rode the bus and spied an adorable young woman playing a DS. A lover of all things cute, Lottie instantly researched the object and her interest was sparked. With parents who are substantially wealthy, they quickly gave into her wishes and readily supplemented her hobby by providing her with a pink DS, various Lolita accruements and any game she wishes. Her favorite games are games that take quite a while to finish, as well as games that test one’s brain. Her all-time favorite is the Sudoku puzzles on BrainAge, because it doesn’t require any math but always makes her feel a bit more clever!
Exploring, Being a “day girl” at Crystal Academy, each day Lottie makes a little trek from the outskirts of Destiny City to her family’s home and each day she takes a different route. Lottie posses the intuitive power to properly choose a path that will either end up being a short cut or show her a side of the city she had previously not witnessed (or get her totally and completely lost!). On the weekends, before a movie or after, Lottie will wander idly through the city streets, discovering new shops and cafes and even a park or two! She views the routes she takes as shots in movies sometimes, looking at her path as an artistic expression, but she always makes her trips for the sheer enjoyment of it. In the event of her losing her way (as is bound to happen and does from time to time) she never refers to it being lost, but instead as being on an adventure. Lottie longs for the day when someone close to her will journey with her through the city so that she may share her discoveries with others.
Virtues:
Life is merely a set of stepping stones, Goal-oriented: Lottie is always setting herself short term, as well as long term goals. She keeps them all in a little journal that she carries around with her. The journal is organized in an almost obsessive fashion, each goal having a corresponding list of ways to achieve said goal. Short term goals are acquired within at least a month, with examples being “get A on upcoming history exam” or “finish costume for upcoming play by Tuesday”. Her short term goals keep her busy, but it is her long term goals that keep her motivated. Lottie is a realistic dreamer and she systematically plots these dreams so that she may achieve them. Once a goal is set, it is nearly impossible to steer her from her path. She will execute it to its fullest and be energized the entire time. She will tell people about the work she is doing, especially when her longer term goals are almost finished. Her longer term goals are things like “graduate from college with degree in film” but also pertain to her own personal development, so some goals she will not discuss with others. In the event a goal is not reached by her deadline (say, she didn't finish a book in a week like she originally thought) she will dive headfirst into making that goal a reality. She will quickly cut out what time she can (skip a movie that week or avoid playing her games) until it is accomplished. She is not so single-minded that she will forget things like eating or doing school work, but they will all take second place to her all-important goal. In the rare event she must relinquish a goal, she will mourn its passing while devising other plans to eventually reach said goal.
It's like clockwork, Dependable: If Lottie says she’ll be somewhere, you better believe she will! Having been raised in a fairly well-to-do family, Lottie learned very early on that agreeing to a responsibility was one thing, but actually doing it was another thing entirely. Her father was always making arrangements for his wife to go to the party of this socialite, or a luncheon with that wife of the boss, and while her mother didn’t always enjoy it, she realized (and subsequently taught her daughter) that the obligation was still necessary. Lottie firmly believes that one must always arrive on-time and ready to perform to whatever she has promised. She also believes that other people have things they need to accomplish and if Lottie can help, she’ll do her best. She’s there when she’s needed because she realizes that other people need help and that humans can’t be solitary beings. If someone has befriended her, she is the kind who is always saying “You can call me if you need me! Any time!” and she truly means it. For those she cares about, being there is the one thing she will always promise. Lottie is ready to help!
There's things to be done!, Energetic: Lottie is the kind of person that constantly has to be doing. It isn’t to the point that she has to be constantly moving from place to place, but she feels the need to be constantly accomplishing. She is very content to spend hours on her couch, reading or sewing a costume for the upcoming play or even finishing up a game, but she has to see her progress. Constant breaks of sitting allow her to be able to jump up when something physical comes up and accomplish it with ease (and probably a bit of bouncing on her part). When standing, she fiddles with her hands or whatever clothing she is wearing, constantly feeling the fabric. When she walks she bounces a bit and when she runs, it’s like she wants to join the wind. She isn’t a fast-pace person, just a person with boundless energy and the need to do.
Flaws:
But I want it NOW! , Impatient: With so much thought given into her goals, Lottie is the complete opposite when it comes to something that springs up suddenly. If its something she hasn't properly planned for she wants it and she wants it NOW. There is no waiting. She will do whatever it takes to get this, especially if it’s something she’s secretly wanted but never made into a goal, such as a love interest or an opportunity she thought would never come her way (say, joining the Film Club as an officiate). This also goes for certain goals. If their flow has been disrupted and the possibility of achieving a goal much sooner than anticipated presented, Lottie will leap at the opportunity, regardless of the danger. She will hurt herself (and possibly others) just so she can have whatever it is she wants so passionately, whether by hurting her social status or even ignoring a friend. In regards to her safety, if, for example, someone were to have hurt one of her friends, instead of waiting for an authoritative figure to step in, Lottie will take matters into her own hands if she is able to locate the attacker. In this case she would be so ready for revenge she would forgo the safety of herself, only thinking of what she could say or if the injury was extremely severe, how she could make them feel the same pain.
I don't want to say it's like a holiday with a little Hitler, but... , Tyrannical: Oh, did Lottie tell you it would be beneficial for your health to cut back on your meat intake? Or did she suggest you go to that museum exhibit to enhance your world view? Did she suggest anything at all and you didn’t do it? Because now she’s pissed. She won’t necessarily show it right away, but she’ll start bugging whoever until they do whatever it is she thinks they should. It isn’t that Lottie wants her way (well, maybe a little) she’s just trying to help. This is where “being there” turns into “because I’m here for you, I know best”. She isn’t trying to rule your entire life, just help improve it! Unfortunately, this can take a nasty turn if the advice isn’t taken. If she’s merely dropped the hint, one should be safe, but if she’s set you down and given you a little speech and you STILL ignore it, good luck! Lottie will systematically drop hints (flyers or pamphlets stuffed into lockers, strategically placed signs, whatever!) until you either act on it or she has to annoy the living snot out of you. Lottie is only looking out for your best interests, it’s just that she goes about it the entirely wrong way.
The world is so full of woe!, Over-emotional: Though this may even out more as she grows up, Lottie is a very emotional person. Things affect her deeply, as though she were experiencing every hurt for the first time. Betrayal of a friend will leave her indisposed for a week, too harsh words will bring tears to her eyes and general fun-making of her person will incite a rage akin to a rampaging bull. There seems to be almost no real reason for this, it is just simply who she is. It can be a crippling burden not only upon herself, but others as well, since she functions half-heartedly in these states. When she is being emotional, almost nothing can snap her out of it. Instead she must work through it on her own, or until something bigger comes along.
PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION
Eyes: Pale blue, round but gentle looking.
Hair: A vibrant red that is fairly long and curls into almost ringlets. Her bangs are straight and in the hime style (straight bangs with face framing pieces on either side). Often times she wears ribbons in her hair.
Face: Oval shaped and fairly normal. Pale complexion. Long eyelashes, small nose and full lips. Her face gives one the idea that she is naïve and unaware.
Body: Petite, but with soft curves. A shorty, coming in at only 5’2”. Pale skin, as if she were an “English Rose”.
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Posted: Wed May 26, 2010 9:30 pm
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Senshi: Sailor Faye, Senshi of the Invisible
Challenge: “You won't see your defeat coming!!" (Thank you so much Lucifer Force!!)
Fuku Colour: White Main Color: Pale blue Secondary Color: Silver
Fuku: Collar -- Silver collar with white stripe Bow -- Both front and back, with lace on the very ends. Bodice -- Sweetheart style top, but besides that regulation! Sleeves -- Off the shoulder, poofy-see-through sleeves! Brooch -- Clear bubble incasing a silver, spikey-star. Bottoms -- Classic blue skirt with petticoat underneath. Tiara -- Normal Sailor tiara, only silver with blue stone. Choker -- Classic, but with some lace! Shoes -- Go crazy!! biggrin Gloves -- Whatever looks good! Accessories --Any shooting star accessories (since Faye is a comet) would be great. Extra lace is always a plus.
Attacks:
Sailor Scout Attack: Faint Appearance Apparition! A body-forming force-field is constructed around the Senshi's body (from head to foot) that renders her semi-invisible for 40 seconds. ("Semi-invisible" means a faint blue outline of her person is visible.) Takes 2 minutes to recharge and can be used twice per battle. Pros: Said Senshi is able to move freely while semi-invisible. If the enemy has poor vision, or is just not paying attention, the senshi is mostly invisible and has a greater chance of sneaking up on an enemy. Cons: Senshi is still partially visible, so quick footwork to keep her figure blurry is needed. Rain or snow will show more of their figure and any dispersant substance (water, mud, glitter. etc.) will stick to their force-field and be carried around, therefore showing their position.
Super Sailor Scout Attack: Lost Aphelion Sight! (or Sigh? It was a typo but it sounds cool!) A body-forming force-field is constructed around the Senshi or a single teammate that renders her/him fully invisible for 1 minute. (This means that from the senshi's head to their feet and every part of their physical being in between there is fully invisible.) Takes 3 minutes to charge and can be used twice for the duration of the entire battle. Pros: Easy maneuverability that allows the senshi (if they are quiet!) to sneak up on their opponent and attack. Invisibility can be used to hide an injured ally (unless they're leaking blood everywhere! That'll be seen!) or themselves from the enemy. Cons: If some sort of dispersant object (water, mud, glitter, etc.) is thrown onto Senshi, she/he will retain the substance until the invisibility has worn off, making them semi-visible to an attacker. Also, invisibility only covers the physical being and not their area. (Dirt, leaves, etc. can be kicked up, revealing their position.) If it is raining or snowing, the senshi's outline will be revealed easier.
Eternal Sailor Attack: Invisible Perihelion Encounter! A shield is summoned that renders the holder invisible for 1 minute. The shield can be used defensively for 1 attack, blocking one attack of the senshi in possession and dissolving on contact. If no attacks have been made upon the shield, it will render the senshi fully invisible for 1 minute and then ending. Can be used twice during the entire battle and takes four minutes to recharge. Pros: Senshi is invisible to attacks and able to move freely, though only one hand is free. (The other must hold the shield.) Great for defensive (hiding her spot) and since it is a shield and not a force field, it can effectively hide one other senshi behind it. Cons: If it happens to be raining or snowing, the shield is basically useless in regards to invisibility because the rain/snow will show the outline. Must be held in one hand, so sneaking up on the enemy to attack is made more difficult. Any sort of dispersant substance (water, mud, glitter, etc.) can be thrown on the shield and show the holder's position.
The attacks are taken from the comet's orbit. (Without all the mumbo-jumbo, yeah, it's an orbit.) Aphelion and Perihelion refer to the comet's orbits around the sun, therefore making them more powerful. The first attack makes an allusion to the fact that when the comet was first discovered it was not easily seen and that its next two viewings were rendered unseen due to bad weather conditions. This history seemed perfect to make the sphere dealing with invisibility.
Family Hattie Miller: A calm woman who does quite a bit of socializing. Lottie was named after her mother, as it was really Hattie's father's idea. Hattie is a Taurus also, though a much more "Earth angel" version, than her daughter. She taught Lottie to always keep a schedule book on hand as her husband is very social and Hattie (and Lottie!) are always brought along, as well as bestowing her daughter with the same red, curly hair. Hattie enjoys gardening and has a rather large green house in their home that spends all her free time in. She tries to teach Lottie to garden, but Lottie seems more inclined to tend to virtual plants on her DS. Robert Miller: A wealthy businessman who can provide for his wife and daughter. Though largely absent from the household due to his dedication to work, he cares for both wife and daughter. He is a Pisces, so though he is always busy, he always remains calm. He tends to climb the social ladder through a combination of hard work and socializing, as he is friendly and quickly makes friends. While most of his day is spent at the office, the time he has at home he spends with his family. Always working on something, he passed along Lottie's need to accomplish, along with a pair of nice blue eyes.
Fashion Being a lover of cute things, Lottie reflects this in the outfits she chooses for herself. She is insatiably drawn to the Lolita fashion and while she doesn't quite think she can pull of a huge petticoat, she emulates the more Classic Lolita look with vintage looking dresses, stockings, shoes and a splash of frill and lace. Examples! XXXXXXX
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Posted: Wed May 26, 2010 9:55 pm
OK! Ready and open for critiques! Let's see what you can throw my way!!
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Posted: Wed May 26, 2010 10:08 pm
Minnor note on attacks, you can't have one attack be both defensive and offensive at the same time. You can hit them with an invisible force or hide yourself. You can't do both in one attack, unfortunately.
-nods- Heh, for a second I thought I confused you trying to explain myself. ^^;
heart I'll look at the rest and give you a better crit later on, I have someone else I need to throw crit at too so... hopefully I can knock out them both tomorrow. heart
Let see… a few pointers on attacks while I’m awake enough to do so. These are mainly things to think on, but also most of the time included in an attack. It makes it easier for people to know your character isn't O/P.
Mention how long they last. How you dispel it, can you throw flower on it and see it? Can you poor water on it? If it rains can you see it? Etc Mention pros Mention cons - while being shielded can they not use their attacks How wide of an area does the attack cover? Is it only a few feet radius? Can you leave it?
For the final attack, if you wanted to use an offensive attack I’m pretty sure this is okay. Like I said Halley!concept has offensive attacks and a defensive attack for her final. So depending on how you managed this, perhaps the attack is invisible unless close attention is paid to air displacement, or dirt having been kicked up, etc.
*edit*
OHH and how many times it can be used. This highly depends on the amount of power used. I think normally it's suggested only one or two times.
Updated attacks. Please let me know if the Eternal attack is too powerful. I'm trying to be creative and powerful, but not TOO much. Added details about attacks.
Here's my attempt at critting, which tends to be in the 'post things that come to mind' format
Hobbies:
For Lottie's movie hobby is she a member of a film club, maybe the school film club?
For DS Games - I'm curious why 'DS games' as opposed to other portable game players. Also what got her into it?
Under Exploring the sentence 'Lottie posses the intuitive power to properly choose a path that will end up being a short cut' didn't work too well for me. It kind of made me think that every time she goes down some path or another it turns out to be a short cut.
Love the idea of this hobby though
Virtues:
Under 'Goal-oriented' what happens if Lottie is not able to achieve a goal in the time scale allocated to it
Flaws:
Under 'Over-emotional' - general fun-making of her persons will incite a rage. Do you mean general fun-making of her person will incite a rage?
Hope some of this helps, I get a really nice sense of her character
Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2010 9:37 pm
Thank you so much for the crit! biggrin I updated all areas you suggested, along with her attacks as well as her fashion. Lottie is now open for potential stamping! Yay!
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Posted: Thu Jun 10, 2010 10:43 pm
Big update to attacks, as well as added a bit to hobbies and Over-Emotional flaw. Also added art by Guine! More art to come. Crits and stamps greatly appreciated! Please and thank you!
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