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PostPosted: Sun May 16, 2010 5:58 pm


I have walked into a world that only the unforgiven may enter
I have lingered in the searchlights of judgment
I have fled the compound of sanity
I have run for my life and for my soul
I have fallen too many times to count
Always I fail to count
I have become both the pillar and the pit
Where all is lost and forgotten
Sometimes I am both
I am a lie on the outside, and inside I am strange
How many have I fooled
My name escapes me
I have stumbled a path most would not cross
I have marked my will on those that have
So sorry, tomorrow
This is your savior
Goodbye, yesterday
You are forgiven
PostPosted: Sat Nov 27, 2010 1:54 pm


Hm...I like the way this poem went. The ending really caught me. While in the middle, I was a bit lost, the meanings a bit jumbled up. Upon reading this a second, and then third time, it became clearer and clearer. The italics really ennunciate what you're trying to get through, and stand out. Good usage of them.

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