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Aristocratic Views Captain
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Posted: Sat May 15, 2010 1:57 pm
This is my FIRST FANFICTION!!! So please don't be too unnecessarily cruel. Also, it's a Shugo Chara fanfiction.
Chapter One: Prologue -OXXXXXXXXO- “This is all your fault!” the girl’s mother shouted, “If you weren’t gone all the time none of this would’ve happened!” “Mommy--” the girl started, “STAY OUT OF THIS, RIMA” her father roared and slapped her. The girl called Rima crawled away whimpering and the adults continued their fight. Rima watched in horror as her mother began receiving blows. Soon the yelling stopped and the only sounds were skin hitting skin and the 12-year-old’s muffled sobs. Her mother collapsed and Rima screamed. Her father turned on her with a strange look in his eyes. Rima screamed again and heard police sirens before everything went black.
Should I continue it?
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Posted: Sat May 15, 2010 7:58 pm
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Posted: Sat May 15, 2010 11:48 pm
It's very well done and I'd like to see where you take it
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Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 5:36 pm
I'm Mizumi-cham on fanfiction.net if you want to check out my other stuff and updates on this story.
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Aristocratic Views Captain
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Posted: Tue Feb 15, 2011 6:57 pm
I remember this ~nya! there still isn't a continuation though ~nya.
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