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 Posted: Wed May 12, 2010 4:10 pm
Hello this is where I will post my short storys and posibly chapters from my book [not pubilshed]. So please enjoy and feel free to comment and give advice because in some cases i need it. Anyway enjoy my storys. biggrin
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Posted: Wed May 12, 2010 5:00 pm
WARNING THIS A FANTASY STORY THAT I WROTE WHEN I WAS BOARD. IT'S BASED OF OF MY ACTOAL DOLL GARETH AND THE HARRY POTTER BOOKS IN SOME CASES. IF YOU DON'T LIKE THIS THAN DON'T READ IT exclaim exclaim
My name is Gareth. in your world I’m just a doll but, in this world I’m daughter of the chief of the plains people. I live in a small tepee, always on the move. never staying in the same spot long. We follow the buffalo herd. Were ever they go we go. A starge thing happened a year ago. I was taken into a whole new world, I was in modern time. I will tell you of this adventure.
I was riding my horse then, suddenly I went thouth time and space I was in a dark room .there was a boy no older then I holding a stick pointed starint at me. I asked who are you ? He just stared at me like he couldn’t here or understand me. he than said many words I couldn’t understand. then he raised his stick and said what sounded likeseeunstanuo. Than, a bright light came from the end of his stick. Than he said, hello my name is Amos Marten and your name is Gareth. Am I correct ?
Yes I said. You are the dather of the famous tribe leader tetetan. Amos said. How do you know all this ? He didn’t answer . Than a starge man walked into the dark room. Good job Amos. she is here and can understand everything we say. Than he turned to me and said. Hello you are now my prisoner and you can not escape. No one knows you are here. You will not escape so don’t even try. This room is now yours you will stay here until I call for you. Do you understand?
Yes sir I said. Come Amos leave our prisoner be the man said. Amos looked back at me with a look that said I am sorry he made me do it.
With that they left and I was alone…..to be continued
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Posted: Thu Jun 03, 2010 2:33 pm
these are some poems....
Life
Some people go though life with out a second glance,
Most people try to do something with their life.
Some people give up,
Some don’t.
I will not give up on my dream
My dream will become a reality.
I won’t waste my life.
We really only live once
you know….
Dated
May 21 2010
Perfection
I am not perfect.
No one is really.
Not even the girls who strive for perfection
Or even the models on magazine covers
Perfect is what you believe it is
You are perfect the way you are
And you do not have to starve yourself
Or go on diets
Just be happy the way you are now.
Remember that.
Dear brother,
Who would you be dear brother,
If your life wasn’t cut short.
I wish I could remember your face But your face was a face I never saw,
No one ever saw.
For you were dead before you were born.
You never lived
Though everyone was upset when you died
Mum misses you but doesn’t talk about it,
Dad does too but doesn’t show it.
I know I miss you
Even though I never met you.
Now you say hello to grandma now
And I will say good bye to you
dearest brother
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Posted: Thu Jun 03, 2010 3:16 pm
Heartfelt poetry. I don't know much about styles of poetry, so I can't really advise you there but good basis. biggrin
In terms of your stories, I'd recommend posting them in original stories subforum in the guild too, as there tends to be more people willing to give critiques there (and they're quite thorough ones).
Please post in standard font size though (12), you might also want to do a spell check as I spotted a few errors in your opening.
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