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Darkness before the Dawn

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iamWanderlust626

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PostPosted: Mon May 03, 2010 10:37 am


Darkness before the Dawn

The golden rays of twilight sun slip slowly from my life;
shadows stretch their boney hands along the cooling height.
The light has gone,
the moon a silver jewel within the sky;
I lift my eyes to the vacant face, and cry out the questions why.

The dark offers a howling tune, the songbird's lonesome song;
the sun has left me here to weep,
absent among the throng.
So here I rest upon the grass as tears stream down my face;
What is there to greet me here,
and save me from this place?

But what is this?
A whisper, which soars upon the wind;
it tells me that the sun still lives, and it will come again.
And so I wait for Dawn's first light to wash over my skin;
to drown the shadows of my mind, and heal my every sin.

There! In the distance!
A light shows from the morn;
a golden fleece of summer clear to welcome the day home.
And so, with peace, my heart does sing a happy lullaby;
joy restored as the sun rises forth,
the moon to slowly die.



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PostPosted: Tue May 04, 2010 10:02 pm


I thought it was an all around great poem. You described things very clearly and used great descripter words. For some reason I was really drawn to this part: A whisper, which soars upon the wind;
it tells me that the sun still lives, and it will come again.
And so I wait for Dawn's first light to wash over my skin;
to drown the shadows of my wind, and heal my every sin. I found it... Actually I really don't know what I specifically liked about this part. As for the name I'm at a loss for ideas. Sorry.

DKMiller


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PostPosted: Wed May 05, 2010 10:29 am


DKMiller
I thought it was an all around great poem. You described things very clearly and used great descripter words. For some reason I was really drawn to this part: A whisper, which soars upon the wind;
it tells me that the sun still lives, and it will come again.
And so I wait for Dawn's first light to wash over my skin;
to drown the shadows of my wind, and heal my every sin. I found it... Actually I really don't know what I specifically liked about this part. As for the name I'm at a loss for ideas. Sorry.


Thank you, miss ^^..
One would probably say that the section you enjoy has a bit of insight. I've had it translated that the whisper is the "Holy Spirit of God", telling the lonely soul that the "Son" is alive after death.. and will be returning to bring joy to His people.
But this is only one versions that people have told me. 0.o
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