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 Posted: Sun Apr 04, 2010 4:25 pm
I've been working on this story off and on since 2008 and here's the opening epilogue. It's not quite complete but I'm posting it for some ideas and to see if anyone likes it thanks. If you want to comment it just leave me a general comment or if u have some impute post here or PM me but I'm not always on. the scale is
1.horrid
2.iffy
3.readable
4.like it
5.love it
6.want to own it one day
thanks hope u enjoy my preview of godless.
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Posted: Sun Apr 04, 2010 4:26 pm
< it’s been 200 years since humans looked to the sky, awkward isn’t it>
< I guess so but rember religion has been denounced by the world leaders>
< you mean leader>
< yes well no big surprise with humans>
< I guess not but you would think…>
< you would think humans don’t want to control everything?>
< no it’s just…. Well>
< yeah that’s what I thought. Humans wont give up power for family ever>
< then why don’t we do it for them?>
< sure lets just say all the gods in the world become the gods of death… real fun there>
< so much irony It could be>
< ha>
< well lets try it then>
Ch 1 Godless
Young Arrow was never much of a fighter. More of a philosopher. At age twelve he used to boast about the fact time no longer was proven to exist.
“I’m telling you Lune with time gone all measurement no longer exists this is where we take a stand. you think just cause the sun is up you can say stuff like that if the masters find out they’ll suck you dry.”
“let them try we have the technology to stay alive”
“I’m just saying so time no longer exists were still the smallest minority on the planet.
Vampires are in the command here get used to it”
“ fine but when you get attacked you'll wish you listened to me.”
Later that night. The wind was bustling and the moon was out at a full glaze.
The air was crisp. There was no better time for a hunt.
“everyone in the houses now before the masters arrive,” shouted a young mother.
“Lune!” arc shouted “where are ya were gonna be killed if your still out there”
”ahhhhh”
Arrow ran toward the scream and found a dark cloaked figure draped across Lune."
“get off him blood sucker” shouted Arrow
“he wanted it” the dark figure said as Lune rose up in to the air
“Arrow you look so scared… let me fix that”
Arrow ran toward Lune knocking the figure down into the dirt.
“LUNE!"
His body dropped and Lune lay there limp in the grass
“the figure stood up tall and simply said “ where is your god now?”
< yes almost you saw exactly what I did>
< only that I saw hw no longer has one>
< oh alright I so enjoyed that plague>
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