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Parent(s): Angin Putih Ajali(Kebenaran) and Isimangaliso Ajali, her mother and father respectively.

Chiku's mother is 34 years old, and of Malaysian descent. Angin is a very kind, lady-like woman. She's very intelligent and has a good relationship with her daughter...even if she's often wondering how two people as generally quiet as she and Isi turned out such an...energetic child.

Chiku's father is 38 years old, and of African descent. Known as 'Isi-papa' by Chiku, he's a generally a quiet, caring man who tries to do his best for his wife and kids. He's everything Chiku adores: strong, quiet, caring, and brave. He always brings back things for the family from the places he's been.

Sibling(s): Chiku's only sibling is her older-by-a-year brother, Badai.

But Chiku doesn't really talk about him much. He doesn't live with them, instead living with his grandfather Ribut Kebenaran. Chiku says he's going to be their grandfather's business heir, since their mother said she was stepping back to be with their father.

Job: Her mother works as a secretary for a local medical office, while her father is an airline pilot. Chiku has no job.

Unlike Chiku, Badai has a job. He sometimes does intern-like work for his grandfather, as part of the learning process of taking over his grandfather's investment firm. He's...got quite a few more years, however. Including college.

Home: Chiku's family lives in a Victorian-style, blue and pale green painted two-story house about ten blocks away from Medowview High School. The master bedroom, living room, kitchen, and such are on the bottom floor. Her own room, another bathroom, and a guest room are on the second floor, along with another room that's used as the family's gaming/video game/whathaveyou room.

Family Life: Life in the Ajali house can be rather lively and frantic at times. Although Angin and Isi tend to be rather calm, adding Chiku into the mix tends to liven things up. Any time there's video games or an RP session going on, things can get fairly loud, too, since the family seems to attract people who are only slightly less lively than Chiku.

Mornings are always the most frantic, since there's breakfasts to be made/eaten, lunch to be grabbed, and a quick once-over of homework from the night before, before running out to school/work/etc.

Add in the daily 'feeding' of their pet ball python, Chata, and you have a rather entertaining house.

Precious Item: Njalo-papa
Not really family, but Chiku's had him since she was a baby. No one remembers who gifted the stuffed green lion with the black mane to Chiku, and he's a bit worn and well-loved by this point with more than a few repairs. But he has a place of honor on Chiku's bed, and she still sleeps with him. When no one else will listen, she'll talk at him, even though she knows he can't talk back. But he'll certainly listen to all her jumbled thoughts!

Expanded on a few things! <3

Thanks for the crit! I expanded on her hobbies a bit. Had to talk with a friend, since Badai is actually her character (I intend to find some way to drag her into this too, yes~). I added a possible 4th Virtue and Flaw, to see if people think they mesh well/are acceptable.

And thank you! 8] She's actually based off an SoA of mine, and I wanted to see how names would work for her and her family. Xd And I'll admit that I do love playing multi-racial/non-European-descent characters when I get the chance.

Ready for try one of getting marked!

-pokes up after FOREVER...WITH UPDATES!

Sad to say, but she comes off as a bit cliche in the sense she's named for being talkative, texts so much it's a hobby, outgoing in the sense she talks to people to the point on being annoying, has the flaw of being talkative, a cliche short attention span and can't keep secrets. It's a bit over overkill in my opinion. A great way to check for this is by removing that aspect. Once removed, if everything else still flows and is understandable, then it usually a sign you're fine. If you focus so much on one aspect of a character that you can't distinguish them from it, it's become a bit over powering. I'm not saying she can't be talkative and the like, but when small things make it to the point of repetition it seems to just be one thing that makes her..her? A bit hard to explain. <__>

Hobbies:
Not sure if you might want to work 'hanging out' into a virtue of being a 'people person'. Pretty much everybody 'hangs out' in a way it could be considered a hobby. It's a sort of catch all thing people just do, and not a real defining hobby since then her hobby really is 'being in the company of others'.
RPGs- This is a GREAT hobby to have since I am pretty sure a few people already have this written. To make these things easier to apply/open with in RPs, I might suggest saying she has them in a school club, or in her school/game store. Its a small thing that can help you get her into RPs down the road.
Texting- This is with the whole overkill thing but it also is like the hanging out. A lot of people do this. It's something people, (teens especially) do where it's less a hobby and more a habit? Hobbies are things that last years typically, and texting while it might be a common occurrence, to that level doesn't really last forever? IDK if that make sense.
Dancing- I like this too, and you tied it into several ways in which it can be used rather than the generic 'dance' class. Is there any type a dance style she prefers, (break dancing, music video mimicing, jumpstyle, ect)? Clubbing makes me think like...pelvic grinding and .. >_> whore dancing. Which doesn't seem what you are going for at all. It seems very much more free form.
BA-...This one I am going to say you might want to consider changing it. Hobbies are things that should open doors to other players, and this is a very inner character hobby. While it is something she can do, it's not a very public thing others could join her in. This is more something to put as an offside info.

Virtues:
Why is she outgoing? Is there anyways she is outgoing besides being talkative? Does she help people who look to need it? Is she someone who makes a cake for a friend's birthday? It a good trait, but it needs a bit more than just talking bit.

Think and thin- I tend to tell people to avoid 'absolutes; or 100% type phrases. "And for them, she would do anything" Would mean she is willing to kill someone for them. Probably never going to happen but by stating it like that, it would in theory, be true. A simple change to 'would do almost anything' makes it suddenly have the less 100% clause, and allow their to be differences made. same thing for 'no matter what, and is always-' 100%s don't exist in real life. You say her limits haven't been tested but in RP that can change very quickly. Include a few exceptions and what her limits are. RP wise it's fine if they have yet to happen, but in profile building, they should exist.

Quick learner- This is a pretty big conflict with her short attention span. She must rely on others to keep her focus to the point they have to cause her physical harm to grab her attention. 'Book-learning' thing would be a contradiction since those who learn by books need a good solid focus as books tend to be less interacting and engaging as say, a classroom activity. In terms of work what can she pick up quickly and what can't she? Quick learners don't always retain the info either. Explain how this applies to real world situations and what the limits are.

creepy- EVERYONE has a 'gut instinct'. I'm going to say this REALLY boarders on a 6th sense with how it's phrased now and traits like these very easily are meta-gamey. I would just cut this virtue out and replace it with something different sadly, because having the ability to sense if things are good or bad is just toeing the line of giving your character an ability that in this setting, can quickly, if unintentionally, be meta-gamey. She's supposed to be a people person, so maybe include a trait that would work into this as well.

Flaws-
Talkative- I covered this and the overkill already, but as a flaw to have it's not a bad one. Provide a bit more depth to just how talkative she is, (you could actually put her flaw of being unable to keep a secret into this one) and point out to how it might have/will backlash her.

Short attention span- This is a very big flaw to give your girl, especially if she's to the point where you're describing her as ADHD. you pull from the virtue that I said should probably be nixed so this flaw will need to be a bit re-worked. Having a short attention span in fine but to the extreme..not very fun to play. I might suggest to change it into being absentminded? that way it can work into not paying attention, forgetfullness, ect

No secrets- can EASILY be worked into talkative and really doesn't need it's own flaw.

Family- Not something I crit really but I can give feedback. As a thing the shop tries to lean towards 'no twins' since there are... a lot apparently <__> (at one time it was joked Destiny City had something in the water). I would say just make sibling year younger/older than her since being triplets they don't share same looks, and it's not something you're focusing on.
-Theuji is to be a business heir...to what? he mom is stepping back from what? she's a secretary and a local medical office. That's... not really a hereditary job thing. To be a business heir you usually need to have a family owned business. but it's not really stated so i'm left going wut.

...there is also no Celeste High school. >_____>


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