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Posted: Fri Mar 05, 2010 9:35 pm
I settle down A twisted up frown Disguised as a smile well You would have never known
Ren had settled down in an almost quiet life with her uncle. She was a sweet girl and worked hard to study medical alchemy life her father before her. He had been a doctor in the war, and her mother had been a nurse. She worked hard to keep their memories alive, but she couldn't remember them no matter how hard she tried. Little Ren wore a smile and acted as if everything was okay. The truth was underneath her smile was a frown that no one knew was there. He mostly would have never known until that day...
I had it all but not what I wanted 'Cause hope for me was a place uncharted And overgrown
Teen Ren had it all. She had a family, she had a wonderful place to live I, she even ad friends. There was something out there Ren wanted more than all of this. Back then the only hope for her had been to start over with a new life. The town was unnoticed by the military that her uncle worked for, and it was filled with people. She could go by unnoticed if she wished, and most of the time she did. So when her uncle and his wife where killed in front of her. Ren was able to get away with out any traces.
You'd make your way in I'd resist you just like this You can't tell me to feel The truth never set me free So I did it myself
He had made his way into her life. It was always him. She had resisted him by going away unnoticed once again. Ren had no emotions left for this truly there was nothing. Ren had found out the past during a fight with him. None of the truth set her free from this lack of emotion she had. So this is when she had packed up and left going unnoticed for the second time. She had two legs and she had to learn to walk on them herself.
You can't be too careful anymore When all that is waiting for you won't come any closer You've got to reach out a little more More More More More
After her uncle was killed Ren went out and found someone to help finish her alchemy training. She was quiet skilled, but she didn't know why. Ren knew what was waiting for her if she reached a little more she would get her memories back. Someone warned her to be more careful about what she was looking for. Ren sadly didn't think of it like an alchemist, but like a little girl that wanted her family back. Sadly humans can't gain something out of nothing. Rin learned that more than the hard way.
Open your eyes like I open mine It's only the real world A life you will never know Shifting your weight to throw off the pain Well you can ignore it But only for so long
Ren wanted him to open his eyes like she had done. He had taught her how yet he couldn't. He didn't believe her about the past he made her remember. He would never know her life because he wouldn't open his eyes to her. Ren could make the pain go away, but like her teacher told her them numbness lasted for only so long. Ren would give anything to go back to the time where the pain wasn't there. Humans can only ignore pain of any kind for so long before it cam back. She payed the price to forget it for a while only to have it come back worse later. After all an alchemist can't gain something with out a proper price.
You look like I did You resist me just like this You can't tell me to heal And it hurts remembering how it felt to shut down
He still hadn't opened his eyes. He learned to resist her just like she had him only a few years ago. By this time Ren was the healing alchemist for the military. Sadly she couldn't heal herself, just by being told to. Ren had enough of it and just shut down. It was hist fault after all. The older Ren hated to remember that day. The day she told him about her frown. That was the day he began to resist her in the exact way she had him.
Can't be too careful anymore When all that is waiting for you won't come any closer You've got to reach out a little more More More More More
Ren looked back on all this and wished she had been more careful, but everything had just been in her grasp, and it was to late to turn back. Now that she was more careful she could carry herself on her own legs. She began to reach out a new goal one that might set her, and his life back to normal. It was a risky chance, but if she learned anything it was how to not be risky. To walk on her own to feet she had to give up being careful. You can't have it both ways was what he always told her. She just said that she was paying the price for going on her own, chasing after something that was against the rules. She had gotten to close to the sun one to many times now she was forced to live like a human. Something she hadn't done in a long time.
The truth never set me free The truth never set me free The truth never set me free So I'll do it myself
Ren was so sick of all the truths she just did things her own way. The truth of the past hadn't set her free so she got up and looked to the future on her own. The truth about him had only broken her heart so she gave up he emotions to become more careful. Only to walk on her own feet she gave up being careful. The truth inside the gate hadn't set her free. It had been the worst, it gave her the truth about everything. Ren hated the knowledge she had, because it only brought her more pain. So she took the pain and found a way to set herself free from the curse she had.
You can't be too careful anymore When all that is waiting for you won't come any closer You've got to reach out
It was in her grasp Ren was close now. She could almost taste sweet victory until he came back. He had opened his eyes some, and asked her to be careful. Ren didn't know what to think after all he of all people shouldn't be worried about her. Ren just looked at him and told him how she had gave up being careful to get things back to normal. The boy just watched as she went to get closer to her goal. He hadn't noticed how her smile wasn't a twisted frown anymore.
Can't be too careful anymore When all that is waiting for you won't come any closer You've got to reach out more More More More More
Ren's goal was literally with in her grasp just a few more steps and she could have her whole life back. Ren had made friends on her journey, but with her past life she would have to give the up. She had learned so much, and lost just as much, but everything would be normal in the past. With each step Ren realized that she didn't want anything to change now. She had found her place in the world, she had found a home. Even better she found a family that wouldn't leave her. As Ren picked up the the legendary stone that had to use loop holes to make Ren realized she didn't need it anymore. The past she was seeking was in the past. Even if she could go back and change it. Would it be worth it to lose what she had now. Of course she could gain with out sacrifice, but did she want to. As her she looked around at all that she had gain Ren thought about the laws of alchemy. Ren's life was now equal. She had lost so much in the past, but now everything seem balanced. Taking one more step Ren looked at her friends, and smiled. This had been the first true smile she had since her first trip to the gate. Ren turned around and started walking again. Ren looked over her shoulder and the next thing she knew she was surrounded by familiar faces from her past. They all could pass on now that she had found a place in the world. When Ren blink again she was with her friends again. Ren had reached more, and she had found everything that was waiting for her.
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Posted: Fri Mar 05, 2010 9:38 pm
Like I've said these are just something to warm up with. There is a lot of grammer mistakes and spelling I'm sure. Another thing is I listened to the music while I did this so it kinda flows with it. Then again it has its own beat so good luck finding this if you read it
Careful- Paramore Brand New Eyes
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Posted: Sat Mar 06, 2010 12:09 am
It's… okay. :/ I'm not too sure of how to describe it. I like it, but at the same time I'd like to know more about how the song connects to Ren's life.
Is it okay if I post mine here too?
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Posted: Sat Mar 06, 2010 1:58 pm
I might take the song out and just put the story. I'll also fix it later. The song it just it made since to me I need to go back and fix it so it makes since. Lately I've been as mad as a hatter so yeah..
Oh and sure please I'd love to read it.
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Posted: Sat Mar 06, 2010 7:37 pm
This one's the first one, and I think I wrote it when I was REALLY depressed :/ Not related to any of my characters and not the full song. Song: Unknown Soldier by Breaking Benjamin.
Borderline, Dead inside. I don't mind falling to pieces.
The song played softly near my head, the lyrics describing me perfectly right at that moment. I was broken, dead, falling to pieces. Why? Because he was dead. He, who was my world, was my life, was the meaning of my existence, is now gone.
Show me what it's like to dream in black and white, so I can leave this world tonight.
If I were only so lucky. I can't commit suicide; I promised him long ago that I wouldn't. But…even though they say living is the stronger choice, it's also the most unbearable choice. I'm forced to keep going forward, while my mind slowly but surely forgets him. It scares me that I'm beginning to forget him. I don't want to, I don't want to!
Never mind. Turn back time. You'll be fine--I will be left behind.
If only. Turn back time, please. I can't go on like this much longer. He will be fine, and I got left behind. Why? Why was I the one who survived? Me, the worthless, hopeless cause. You had so much in your future. You used to tell me about them, your eyes sparkling as you described your hopes and dreams. Now you lay cold, in the cold ground. "Why?" I choked out, the tears running down my face. "Why did it have to be you?!" I screamed, my hands meeting my face as I sobbed into them. I could smell, feel, taste the saltiness that lingered on my skin, but that only made the feeling worse. Because I knew you'd never see these, never wipe these tears away, never comfort me. Not anymore.
Holding onto time, breathe a breath of life so I can leave this world behind.
Maybe I've already left this world…please, come back. Breathe one more breath of life, and hold onto time. Just once more. Please. I'll go as your replacement--I don't have anything to live for, not anymore. If there was anyone who I'd give my life for, it was you.
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Posted: Sat Mar 06, 2010 7:40 pm
Second take on the same song, but a different perspective. I wrote this one after the one above, but it's when I wasn't so depressed. Again, not the full song. I don't like the ending, but I don't want to change it at the moment.
Borderline, dead inside. I don't mind, falling to pieces.
I actually do mind, but it's too late for that now. She's gone and broken my heart into little pieces. I'm already dead inside, I have been since the summer. Thought I got over it, but nope, I never came back to life. I thought she would…no, could bring me back, but she hasn't. Too distracted and busy for me. Maybe she doesn't like me anymore? Maybe she just hides it behind that cute, reassuring smile of hers as I hold her in my arms. I've hardened my heart for her, to save myself from her. What more does she want from me?!
Show me what it's like to dream in black and white so I can leave this world tonight.
I wish I could dream…I've become insomniac partly because of her. I wish I could leave this world…this world with her in it. If I were to dream in black and white, I think I'd be able to see just that--not this shade of gray that I'm in.
Full of fear, ever clear. I'll be here, fighting forever. Curious, Venomous, You'll find me, climbing to heaven.
Yes, I'm full of fear. I'm afraid that she doesn't love me, like how she claims to. I'll still be here, fighting for her, but is it worth it? It's probably clear though--she doesn't like me anymore. She's always ignoring me, talking to her friends. She never calls me, we hardly see each other anymore. Maybe it'll be better for me to leave her.
Never mind, turn back time. You'll be fine. I will be left behind.
If I could just figure out how to…I would. Go back to the time when everything seemed right, or was right, when we were both happy and unpretending. She will be fine, if I just left her, I will be the one left behind. I'll be left behind in the past, in the pain. If I did that, would I truly be dead inside?
Holding onto time, breathe the breath of life. So I can leave this world behind.
I'm holding onto all the time we get with each other, and yet she just throws it away, wastes it, doing her homework, hanging out with friends, playing with he friends…she's slowly killing me. Can't she see my pain? Please, give me a reason to live once again on the inside. So I can leave this world, where I love her too much.
It only hurts just once, they're only broken bones. Hide the hate inside.
Only once? She's gone and broken my heart over and over again…I hoped that she would piece it back together, mend it back to what it used to be. But no…I trusted her too much. I wish they were only broken bones. They'd be easier to deal with. I'll try and hide the hate inside…but I can't guarantee that. It leaks out sometimes…and then when I vent it on her, I feel bad later…why? Why do I feel bad? Oh right…because then it makes her beat up herself over it.
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Posted: Sat Mar 13, 2010 7:31 pm
Yours are a lot better then mine, I really like them. I hope one day to be a better write at this type thing. The only thing that is even really go works of mine are my novel and my poem.
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Posted: Sat Mar 13, 2010 11:53 pm
Noooo, I don't think so. It just comes with time and practice. See, those were actually written as a free write for creative writing. I usually don't like english, but I'd have to say that was the funnest english course I've ever taken yet.
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Posted: Sun Mar 14, 2010 11:20 am
I will pursue this dream, 'cause I know it's expected that I be serene
“I have to do this after all all my other dreams have died. We can't just wait around any more we have to go after this.” The girl said to the older girl next to her.
Upon this winding road, in the face of the crowds that bustle all around Although it seems like I am chasing after the past, what I want is place where the sky is alive and like home to me
A lot of people though we were just after something we had dreamed up. We paid no attention as we past them, because at times it was true. There was more to it then that, we just wanted to find that place. We had a promise we had to keep back then. Not because it was a promise because it was life or death. At this point we didn't know that, if we did a lot of thing would be so different.
Please to try to understand the truth That this is no choice And I wish you'd stop with that look Of despair You're giving me
“Stop feeling sorry for me, you don't understand.” The younger girl screamed. “Were you not the one who came up with that promise we made all those years ago.”
Tears are nothing but the shape of our weakness And they won't bring any absolution I do not see an end to this labyrinth
“Come on now you know crying won't get us anywhere.” The older girl said to the younger one after she broke down. “You know that we have to get though this no matter what happens.” Even with no end in sight I stood up and wiped away my tears. She had been right tears did nothing, but tell them how weak I really was. I think that day was the last time I cried.
Who am I waiting for-- And I write it down in the pages of my notebook 'Cause I'm looking for the me that is still honest I am running but I don't even know why From this reality
“Why do you always write in that book,” the older girl asked. “Because a while back it felt like I was waiting on someone. I still feel like I am. So every time I remember something about the person I'm waiting on I write it down so maybe I can find them.” “Is that all your writing about?” “Well I also write about each day.” I never told her that I wrote about each day because it helped me forget. Each brought more pain for us, and each day we changed. To this I think day I still have that notebook.
To chase my wishes I'll carry on living And I will always remember the depths of the darkness I'll face my demons and I'll no longer run away There isn't a place to go I'll lose this feeling of being so helpless 'Cause my whole life is ahead of me I'll quash the numbness 'Cause pain's better than the emptiness
There was a time bout a year later that I was really depressed. I had had came across one of the people I was looking for. Sadly I didn't get to keep him, but I didn't get to keep him though. He did ask me to keep going after my dream. He stayed long enough to help me get out of my depression, even if I didn't know a the time I help him out of his. Even though we knew better then making promises we made one more. One that day we remember we had our whole lives ahead of us. Our promise that was easier said than done.
I must apologize, I've really messed up and I am so ashamed I may not say it much, But I know that I make you worry all the time
“I can believe I've messed up this badly,” I had never been more ashamed of myself in my whole life then I was now. I had ran off in attempt to chase after my promise. I had made them all worry about me. This wasn't the first time I had did this either I wanted to cry, but it wouldn't do any help.
Back then you always could accept the things I'd done And you're still the same today so I'll try not to burden you But try to realize that I have closed my eyes Just because the world is too harsh And I'm willing to blind myself
“No matter what you do I'll always forgive you.” He came back just to tell me that. “I'm still sorry, I knew better then to make another promise to someone. I know I can't keep it.” He walked up and held me, I don't remember how long, but he did. “Don't think that way or you won't be able to keep our promise. Don't close your eyes, because I will protect you from now on even if I'm not with you.”
Rumors that they have spread about us I do not know which was the first one "We were friends from the second that we met," Just stop with the lies already And my heart turned red with this passion And it almost consumed my very being 'Cause in truth I'd held onto hope From this reality
The boy held the younger girl close as they tried to ignore the people around them. The older girl had rejoined them along with the boy's older brother. None of them knew what to do at this point. I did though so I stepped forward and looked around. So many things had been said about us, and I just wanted the lies to stop. I saw some on I once called my friend in the crowed that consumed us. All I know was I began to run toward them. I threw a punch and didn't stop. He had ran after me and held me back from killing my old friend. I don't remember anything after that.
To chase my wishes I'll carry on living And I really want to scream out, but can you even hear me? I'll face my demons, and I'll no longer run away There isn't a place to go I still am grateful for the care you've shown me So I'll find the strength to make it count I'll always move onward Facing my friends and foes alike
A few months later is where my memories are more clear him and me went back to try and fix our first promise. We face everything together, and I never once closed my eyes. He did protect me though, just enough though. We kept searching and never gave up no matter what got in our way.
How do you unlock this door that has no key? Can you think of a way?
“So what do you think of this,” the boy ask the younger girl pointing to the book. “It sounds about right, but I still think there is something that's missing.”
We can't go back to the beginning The story is set, and our destinies too
“Do you think we can ever go back to the last place we all called home.” The boy asked the girl. “I would like to,” the girl said as they sat on a hill looking up at the stars. The girl lifted her arm as if to grab a star before looking at the boy. “It would seem foolish to just gave up now, after all we've come so far. I even think at times I know where home is, but its just strange to think that's what it really is.”
Open up your eyes Open up your eyes
“Well tell me what you think it is.” The boy said as he looked back at the girl. “I think its where your happy, maybe it might not be one certain place, it might even be the people your with.” The girl was still stretch out for the stars. “I think for us, home is when we are with each other.”
I'll lose this feeling of being so helpless 'Cause my whole life is ahead of me And the things I once abandoned I want to try and find again
The boy and the girl finally came to the end of their searching. After 5 years of searching they had went so far. They look at each other with smiles, the began to run full speed.
Come on, just one more time
Opening the door to the house they looked around. Their older counter parts where their waiting on them.
To chase my wishes I'll carry on living And I really want to scream out, but can you even hear me? I'll face my demons, and I'll no longer run away There isn't a place to go I still am grateful for the care you've shown me So I'll find the strength to make it count I'll quash the numbness 'Cause pain's better than the emptiness
I learned to chase after what I believed in during those 5 years. Not only did we keep our promise, but we had found a place to call home to. Me and the younger brother kept or promises to. We had gotten a lot stronger during out travels, and now I was no longer sad, even if the pain was better then nothing. Thankfully we had happy endings, I would have never had mine if he hadn't pushed me a little. Even if our eyes where open to everything in the world that no longer scared us. I no longer had people feeling sorry for me, our voices had been heard and now we cloud live peacefully forever.
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Posted: Sun Mar 14, 2010 11:28 am
I was bored last night so I did another one. This once was less made up as I went there is only two parts that don't really fit. Once again I use a special code type thing to tell the story. this is the older version of the younger girl tell the story. the older girl girl talk in the story. lyrics Where the song is more of the story than the story. .
I did not write this English lyrics of the song I found them and they fit the best.
Again-Yui is the song it is based off of. Edit/Note: The younger girl is screaming at the oldest brother, and the reason why its life or death is because the younger girl died from the fight she was in from blood loss. The younger boy manage to bring her back. I need to turn this idea into a story, Maybe...
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