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Posted: Tue Mar 02, 2010 9:03 pm
Sailor Hermes/ Castille Brenna
Name: Castille [ka-steel] Brenna
Nicknames: She hates nicknames!
Age: 15
Birthplace: Pullman, Washington
Heritage: Scandinavian
Birthday: March 7
Gemstone: Aquamarine
Blood Type: AB-
Fav. Food: Chocolate Chip Cookie Dough Ice Cream, Thai Food (Specifically: Pineapple Chicken), and Pumpkin Pie
Hated Food: Mushrooms, Curry, Plain Milk
School: Meadowview
Hobbies:
Photography- Castille loves to take pictures, and pursues a career in photojournalism. Since she has yet to obtain this job, she occupies herself by taking discounted senior pictures for the high school, and has even taken pictures for a wedding or two. Her favorite subjects are not ones that stand and pose for the camera however. She enjoys taking candid shots, moments when a person's true feelings and happiness come through for all to see. Castille also enjoys taking pictures in black and white, using programs to add a splash of color to one object in the picture.
Castille Says: "I love adding one piece of color to an otherwise black and white object. In an otherwise dull, monotonous day ritual, there can always be that one moment, or person that adds a bit of spice to your life.
Finding New Music:- Castille has one addiction, and thats music. She loves almost any genre, and her ipod library is always filled to the brim with country, rock, metal, techno and much more. She loves to spend a little time on the computer each day, browsing through new artists and downloading songs to create various playlists out of. Her Ipod is always with her, and she typically can be seen with one earbud in, the other dangling down while she has a conversation while simultaneously checking out some new electronic pop band from Wisconsin. Everywhere she goes, that Ipod is blaring, and when she can't listen to it, she's humming or singing one of the songs she just listened to. After only a day without her music, she starts to get grumpy and fidgety.
Castille Says: "I'd rather be addicted to music than something that could really harm me!
Elementary School- Castille's favorite people are children. She spends much of her free time at the Destiny City Elementary, where she helps with gym, art and music classes, as well as being a recess monitor. She loves kids most because they have such big imaginations. She feels like she can relate to children more than kids of her own age.
Castille Says:"They find such wonder in everything around them. Simple things like Trees and birds become magical in their own way through a child's eyes. Teenagers seem to have lost the ability to see all of this magic around them..."
Volleyball:- Castille loves sports, but volleyball is by far her favorite. As a young girl she played for a youth team, and her position of choice was a libero, or digger position. She would spend hours diving to the ground to save a ball that was too low for some of the taller girls to get, and her knees were constantly bruised from hitting the ground. Now she is part of the school team, in the same position that she played as a child.
Castille Says: "Being on the volleyball team is the best! The feeling of being on a team, the whole group striving for something together. And I love when my muscles are sore! I feel like I have actually done something."
Virtues:
Open-minded: Castille doesn't like to judge, and welcomes people openly into her conversations. Because of this, she has a vast circle of friends that she keeps close to her, and she hates to leave anyone out of the loop. She believes that everyone has some good in them, it just takes the right person to bring it out. That person being her.
She also likes to try new things, especially if it involves helping someone else out. It may be as simple as trying a new recipe that one of her teachers raves about, or taking salsa dancing lessons because one of her friends was too embarrassed to do it alone. Most of the time she takes it a step farther than the person originally intended, making enough of the recipe to share with the entire class, or dancing with her friend in the school Talent Show.
Castille Says: "Those lessons were fun! And that Basil Chicken recipe turned out to be harder than I thought...."
It's all about the Balance!: Castille has a knack for multitasking. As a student, this means she can do multiple classes' homework at the same time. She can also take notes while finishing up her homework from her next class thats due in twenty minutes. At home, she is able to cook dinner while chatting with her friends online and watching her younger brother. She can also hold multiple conversations at once, which helps if four friends are talking to her at once. As a senshi, it wouldn't be hard for her to keep up with her normal life as well as saving the town from youma and the Negaverse.
Castille Says: "Who can be bored when you have volleyball practice, cooking lessons, and a sleepover with friends that night?"
Oh yeah? And then what happened?: Because of her friendly and warm nature, people often come to Castille with their problems, and she is always willing to sit with them on the couch, sharing a gallon of icecream and listening to them rant about how their boyfriend doesn't appreciate them, or how a sibling is always treated better than them. She is always willing to give them her point of view, but will ask if they want it or not...she doesn't want to rile the person up and cause conflict. In her mind, if the worried person can smile, and maybe laugh a little at the end of it, then she has done her job well.
Castille Says: "I feel bad when someone is having a bad day. Even if it's not my fault! Since I am happy, why can't I share it with others and make them happy too?"
Only 100%? I can give 110%! When Castille finds something that really sparks her intrest, she devotes herself completely to it. Thats not to say that she does it with everything however. But for certain things, like volleyball and photography, she will keep working at it for hours until the results come out the way she wants.
Castille Says: "I can't just leave the gym with my sets going too far right! then I'll play like that in the game tomorrow!"
Flaws:
Enough Pride for all the Lions in the Zoo: Castille has a hard time taking advice from others, and it's even harder to get her to ask for help. Since her family divorced, she took on the idea at a young age that she can do it all by herself, and this is a hard thing for her to shake, even now. If she has trouble with a math problem, she will stress herself (sometimes to tears) about it until she either gives up completely, or gets it right. Not once does it enter her mind to ask someone else, because she believes that asking for help shows that she is unable to handle it herself, and makes her look weak. If her serve is off, she will hit the ball until she figures it out, and will sometimes even ignore what the coach says because listening to the advice would mean she needs help.
Castille Says: "The person I ask for help from isn't going to be around forever, giving me a hand when I need it. Better to just learn it on my own, then I won't need them at all! Why rely on someone else?"
This flaw could be her weakness: Castille has an issue with asking and receiving help. She would rather destroy herself mentally than get advice from someone else. As a student, this means she occasionally falls behind in class because she can't grasp the concept before being forced to move on to the next one. As an athlete, Castille will tire herself out and try a multitude of different things to fix whatever problem she is having, be it a missing serve or a crooked pass, until she finally gets it right. This is primarily a weakness as a Senshi. As a new Senshi, Castille will likely get beaten in her first one or two solo battles. She will get frustrated and stress herself out over how to be better. When asked by a comrade if she needs help, even if she is clearly losing, Castille will still say no and, if the other person helps anyway, she will thank them and be polite until she gets home, where she will likely burst into tears and stress even more. Given enough of this, she might decide to quit being a Senshi entirely.
The above story would be much fun to rp!
Jack of all trades, Master of none: She likes to have multiple things going on at once, and in a way this is good because she can multitask. Unfortunately, most of the time she is unable to give her full attention to any one thing at a time. So her homework remains half finished (sometimes not done at all), her drawings are not colored, and that book she was going to read lays by her bedside gathering dust. Sometimes she pushes herself too hard, and not everything gets done to it's fullest. But she is always ready with an excuse to explain the lack of commitment "I was doing it, but then I had to go......" Her family especially sees this side of Castille. Her father is always asking her why her grades are lower than they should be, and is treated to an excuse or silence.
Castille Says: "Sometimes I get a little stressed, so I have to skip over some things....But I always come back to them! ....most of the time...."
This flaw could be a weakness because: Castille has a problem of spreading herself too thin. On the surface, she looks like she is juggling it all very well, but her friends and family know better. She can't devote herself 100% to anything for too long before getting bored. So while being a Senshi may be exciting at first, the conflict, defeat, and time consuming patrols that come with it would eventually wear her out, causing her to want to quit being a senshi entirely. This multitasking also takes a toll on her health, as she doesn't sleep as much as she should because of all the activities she undertakes. The lack of sleep catches up to her, and her mind slows as well as her reaction time, and humor.
Tick...tick...tick...BOOM: Castille hates causing conflict, and will avoid an argument almost at any cost. This means all of her nasty thoughts and feelings build inside her, where she goes over them over and over again, analyzing and emphasizing the feelings in her mind until they are so huge to her, that she explodes. This leads to shouting, nasty comments, lots of swearing, and usually tears. She tends to hold grudges, even if she doesn't show it. Castille will continues to be pleasant and friendly to the person, but she will be cursing them in her mind. Her lack of assertiveness when it comes to being stepped on leaves her doubting herself and her abilities a lot of the time, and the whirlwind of emotions spins again.
Castille Says: "I'm fine, I really am! It's not like it hurt my feelings or anything....... *stupid b***h*"
There must be another way.... Castille doesn't like to fight. She can't stand the sight of blood, and she doesn't throw punches, even as a joke. As a regular person, this means people often try to pick on her. She would rather calmly talk out the situation than become physically involved. With the elementary children, she is able to diffuse any of their arguments with a few kind words and suggestions. With the kids of her age, she finds it a little harder to connect with them, though it's not for lack of trying. If her pacifist ways go unnoticed or are not well received, Castille will walk away from the decision depressed, or turn to her childish side. As a senshi, this means if a fight were to break out, she would let Hermes take over and take care of it, and not come back until they fight was long over.
Castille Says: "Physical violence is never an option! There's always better ways to solve a conflict!"
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Posted: Tue Mar 02, 2010 9:19 pm
Castille's Appearance: Face: She has an oval face, small ears and freckles that create a mask-like look around her eyes. She has thinner lips and white, straight teeth. Or they better be, her parents spent enough money on the braces to fix them. Sometimes she is mistaken for the kids she looks after. Eye Color: Purple Height: Short, around 5' 2" Build: Skinny little thing, with slightly toned legs and arms from years of volleyball....maybe you can see it here?? Hair: I'd like the hair to be similar to what's seen in the reference pictures (The purple haired girl) Reference , Reference 2 (On the right side of the photo, also with purple hair) Outside of School Fashion: Castille can be seen most often with Some sort of blue jeans on, and a colorful graphic t-shirt on. She wears lots of colorful accessories, from scarves to earrings. But her favorite accessories are bracelets. She loves to wear multiple ones at a time, because she likes the way they jingle! She's not exactly fashion-forward, but hey, how many artists really are?
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Posted: Tue Mar 02, 2010 9:20 pm
Sailor Hermes/ Castille Brenna
Name: Amarilla
Nicknames: None
Gender: Female
Fav. Food: Chili
Hated Food: Clam Chowder
Virtues:
Imaginative- She has the biggest imagination out of all of her friends. When it comes to Castille's Creative Writing class, she pulls an easy A. The ideas just jump from her mind and wind themselves into great stories. This imagination allows her to connect with kids more than adults, since they enjoy her stories and she is willing to play make-believe with them.
Sincere- Amarilla can't lie. She abhors the idea of not telling the truth to someone. So if she says that she doesn't like you, believe it. If you ask her for advice, she will give it to you without a bit of hesitation. This tends to irritate some of her classmates who get in trouble because she tells the teacher that they cheated on their last math test.....but teachers and parents know they can always count on her to come clean and give the facts about the situation.
Patient- Amarilla loves children, so it only natural that she would have a large amount of patience. It takes a lot to fluster this level-headed girl, and she can usually dispel tense situations quite easily. As a student, this means that, while she does get frustrated with concepts sometimes, she will remain calm and work on them until she gets them right. As a volunteer, she is able to work with the kids and teach them new things without getting irritated with their shorter attention spans.
Positive- In Amarilla's mind, not only does every cloud have a silver lining, but every star, house, tree and person. She believes that there is good in everything and everyone, and she's the person the bring it out. She give everyone the benefit of the doubt until they prove themselves to be anything but angelic.
Flaws:
Indecisive- Sometimes Amarilla's patience can turn to indecisiveness. She doesn't like to rush into things, and will often ponder every outcome possible before making a decision. This goes for everything, from multiple choice test answers to what shirt she should buy with her allowance money. As a student, this means she takes a lot longer to do tests, and sometimes her essays don't quite get done on time because she spends so much time picking a topic. Her friends don't really like going out to eat with her, or shopping because she isn't an impulse buyer. She has to look through every store before deciding to go back and buy something.
Childish- Children are her favorite people, because Amarilla feels like they are the only people she can connect to. In her mind, people her age are too complicated and dramatic, and they thrive on putting each-other down. Children on the other hand, like simplicity, positivity.. things that she herself idolizes. Glace/Castille's room is even childish, with soft pink walls and frills on the bedspread and vanity. If things are not going her way, she will keep her patience as long as she can, until it snaps, and she reverts to a child, throwing a fit and stomping away. People her age don't really understand her childish ways sometimes, which leaves them to alienate her a bit.
Flighty- Amarilla has a short attention span. Maybe it's because she loves to be child-like, or maybe because she's been a floating soul for so long, unattached to a body. But she loves to explore, and nothing can hold her attention for long. She bounces from subject to subject, and bores easily with one thing after a little while. As a student, this means she can't do homework, and often leaves Castille to do such trivial things. As a senshi, Amarilla doesn't like patrolling at night.....its just so booorrrriiinnnnggg....
Stubborn- Amarilla is generally a happy-go-lucky individual. But cross her specific line, and she could teach bullheadedness to the cow itself. She doesn't give in, and will often pout or throw a fit if she doesn't get her way, another aspect of her immaturity/child like behavior. This often exasperates Castille, especially when Amarilla wants to come out, and Castille won't let her.
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Posted: Tue Mar 02, 2010 9:22 pm
Hermes' Appearance/AttacksEyes: Light Blue or Gold... Colors: Light Blue and Gold Design: I was thinking something reminiscent of the Greek depiction of Hermes, only a bit more modern? No togas and the like XD A traditional skirt fuku would look really nice, but if shorts inspire more.... >_>" But I would LOVE to see: ~ Winged Shoes~ Winged hat? Greek shows a helmet, but I think a hat would look more modern smile Like a fedora! O_O Her hair would have to be down to wear the hat in which case it is shoulder length and slightly wavy. ~ Golden staff complete with snakes wrapped around it! *see ref picture* REFERENCE PICTURES!! (Not really reference, just cool ones I found that might inspire :>) [X] [X] [X] [X] [X]Challenge Ideas A. Let me cloud your thoughts! B.The message is clear: You shall be defeated! Attack Ideas A. Description: Hermes swings her staff and the two snakes that are wrapped around it unwind themselves from the staff. They fall to the ground and go after the enemy, and as they wrap around the enemy they turn to icy mist, clouding the enemy's view and possibly slowing them from cold. Possible Upgrade: Instead of turning to a random cloud of mist, the snakes maintain their shape and wrap around the enemy, squeezing them at the same time freezing them since they are made of icy mist. Duration: 1-2 turns (rounds of posting) Positives: The mist will effectively block the enemy's view of the battlefield and Sailor Hermes, allowing her to either fight or run away. They may also have a slower reaction time due to the cold surrounding them. Negatives: What clouds the enemy's vision will do the same to the one who produced it. The mist will effectively block the view of the enemy as well, meaning that they have a chance to escape as well. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ B. Description: Sailor Hermes brings her hand up and an envelope appears in her hand (Think like Sailor Mars with her papers), she throws the envelope and as it nears the enemy, it bursts apart and an icy mist surrounds the enemy. Possible Upgrade: Multiple envelopes or a bigger shockwave, one that might actually knock them down. Duration: The throw is 1 post, the mist will last 1-2 turns (rounds of posting) Positives: What clouds the enemy's vision will do the same to the one who produced it. The mist will effectively block the view of the enemy as well, meaning that they have a chance to escape as well. The release of the mist from the envelope could also produce a minor shockwave, nothing that will knock them off their feet, but more of a distraction? Negatives: What clouds the enemy's vision will do the same to the one who produced it. The mist will effectively block the view of the enemy as well, meaning that they have a chance to escape as well. If up against an enemy with a fire based attack, the envelope could be incinerated before it reaches it's exploding point. **I chose attacks that could allow the enemy to get away from the battle because Hermes was known as the god to thieves and liars. Which means that while she is one the same side as the Senshi, she still feels a bit of empathy toward those who are doing wrong. Hence the attacks that give them a chance.**
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Posted: Tue Mar 02, 2010 9:23 pm
Family Mother: Lisa Pier Age: 40 Castille's biological mother, Lisa is a vibrant, loud being who owns a restaurant and works at a local hospital. Lisa has sandy brown hair, which she dyes blonde highlights into, and green eyes. She is the same height as Castille, and likes to borrow her shoes. Lisa grew up in a small town, was a cheerleader in highschool, and likes to go out and party. She has four sisters, and is very close with all of them. But she also enjoys staying at home and playing with her granddaughter Payton. She shares much of the same traits with Castille, including her love for bracelets and fuzzy socks. Lisa is married to her second husband, and lives about 20 minutes from the school. She calls Castille at least once a week to see how she's doing and likes to plan "shopping dates" with her and her sister Kaylee. Castille goes though, in truth, she hates shopping. Castille Says:"My mom is always sending me money, saying that -She doesn't want her baby to starve- She is one of the kindest people I know, and I love her so much!" Father: Bruce Brenna Age: 40 Bruce is Castille's biological father. He is 5' 10", with very short blonde hair and bright blue eyes. Bruce works as a Lieutenant Detective for the local police department. He is Casille's voice of reason, and likes to give her steady advice, as well as help with her homework. He live by old fashioned virtues, having spent most of his life living in the northern part of Montana and attending school in a one room schoolhouse with 22 other kids. He is a quiet, reserved person who, after divorcing with their mother, spent most of his time caring for his children and making sure they had a comfortable home. Once they got a little older, he returned to the dating scene and married his second wife, Marlei. He likes playing softball, reading science fiction, and going on vacation with his new, larger family. Castille Says:"My poor Daddy. He spent so much time raising Kaylee and I that he didn't have a real social life for close to 6 years. I owe him so much for taking such good care of us. He is the best father I know, and I hope I tell him enough."Sister: Kaylee Brenna Age: 14 Kaylee is to Castille as night is to day. Kaylee loves shopping, Castille finds it boring. Kaylee loves skirts, Castille wouldn't be caught dead in one. Kaylee is a cheerleader, Castille despises them. But through all their differences, the two sisters are rather close, and enjoy spending late nights watching movies and having popcorn fights. Kaylee is 5' 7", with a skinny, but muscular build that comes from hours of cheering. She has a round face with a dark smattering of freckles, deep blue eyes and bleach blonde hair. She is also the only one in her biological family that didn't need braces as a kid, and hasn't had a cavity in her entire life. Castille Says:"My little sister is so perfect. All the boys want her, she's like my mother's little clone, and she gets great grades. I feel like the -mistake- of the family sometimes when I am around her."Step-Father: Bub Pier Age: 44 Bub is the full blown redneck, and he isn't afraid to show it! He works at a lumber mill, and Lisa is his second wife. Bub is gruff, likes to drink and party. He's shorter, about 5' 9', with hair that is always flat from his ball cap, but curls on the sides and back. He has an oval face, usually with a scruffy beard covering the laugh lines around his mouth. He grew up with a house full of girls, with his father being the only other male in the house. When his parents divorced, his mother married a man that used to beat him. He left his house at 15, bouncing from house to house until he finally got his own place. As a father, he tries to help his kids out, but they have a tendency to take advantage of him. As a Step-father, he only asks respect in his home of Castille and Kaylee. Castille often goes to him for advice when she doesn't feel that she can talk to her mother or father. Castille Says: "Bub jokes around so much! And he's a country red-neck down to the core! But I know he loves me and hee hee, don't tell anyone....but he says that I'm his favorite of all the kids!"Step-Sister: Melissa Pier Age: 24 Melissa acts like a baby a lot of the time. She is the same height as Lisa, with brown eyes and a nose ring. She works as a hair stylist, and changes her hair once every couple weeks. Currently, it is short, very dark brown, and straight. She has a 4 year old daughter named Payton whom Castille loves. She spoils the girl to death, but as a first time mom, she means well. Melissa is a kind person, but isn't afraid to speak her mind. Before Payton, she often would get into fights with other girls for talking about her or arguing with her. Now that she is again a mother-to-be, she has mellowed out, though that scrappy fighter still comes out on occasion. She is expecting another baby, a little girl named Miley to be born in December. Castille Says: "Melissa is a little bit of a whiner, even though she is older than me. And she is pregnant with her second child already! Sometimes I wonder how she raises my niece when she acts like a kid herself!Step-Mother Marlei Brenna Age: 35 Marlei was born in a rural town about an hour from where Castille lives. She grew up with divorced parents, and a step-mother who abused her. She married her first husband early, and had Maranda with the man. Around the time that Maranda was 5, she divorced her first husband, and lived with her aunt until she married her second husband, who abused her. She had her second child Tyler with him, and then divorced him as well. Now she is married to Castille's father. Marlei is 5' 7", with light blonde streaks, as well as chocolate brown streaks in her chin length hair. She has dark green eyes, and a pointed nose that betrays her French heritage. She is a loud person who likes to socialize, sometimes leaving Castilla's father behind while she goes out. She works at the Department of Health. Castille Says: "I have mixed feelings about this woman. When she first moved in, she tried to buy me and my sister off with stuff to make us like her. But she is an abrasive person a lot of the time...I think she is brainwashing my Dad."Step-Brother: Tyler Bashon Age: 10 Tyler's biological father lives about an hour away from him. He is only ten, but already he almost reaches Castille's shoulder. He has messy brown hair that he likes to spike when he goes to school, and big, baby blue eyes. He just got braces, so his smile is a little metallic, but he has a laugh that is loud and genuine. He can be a bit of a baby when he doesn't get his way, and likes to fight with Maranda and Kaylee, but he listens and respects Castille. He loves dragons, and is a very thoughtful person for being so young. He wants to be a professional baseball player when he grows up. Castille Says: "Tyler is such a spaz! But for all his Pokemon, Bakugon, and Yu-Gi-Oh obsessions, the kid is really smart and such a nice kid. I remember once, I was in my room, and he knocked on the door and came in, looking real excited. When I asked him what was up, she showed me this picture he drew of a pack of wolves and said -I made this for you at school today!- He looked so excited! That picture still hangs on my wall to this day."
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Posted: Tue Mar 02, 2010 9:24 pm
Why Castille for Hermes?
My Image of Hermes:
In Greek Mythology, Hermes was known as the "prankster and inventive genius" of the Greek Gods. The second youngest of the gods, He was the messenger between Heaven, Earth and the Underworld, and one of the few gods that could pass to the Mortal World with no issue, a practice that he loved doing. But he could also act maturely and help those in need. It was Hermes responsibility to guide dead souls to Hades in the Underworld. He also assisted Odysseus and Perseus in their travels. When Odysseus's men were being turned to pigs by Circe, is was Hermes that guided Odysseus to the place where the herb that would resist the spell was. And when Perseus went to fight Medusa, Hermes gave up his winged sandals to Perseus so that he could dodge her more effectively and defeat her.
When I think of Hermes, I imagine a younger girl that loves to laugh and have fun. Someone who has a hard time being serious and is bouncy and silly.
Castille in a Nutshell:
Castille is a determined, outgoing, multitasking firecracker that can be both mature or childish, depending on the situation at hand. With children, she is imaginative and lively and fun. Around her peers or adults, she is quieter, more mature and reserved. Castille is also a helpful person who is willing to sacrifice her time, power and money to help others in need. She loves guiding people toward the right answer.
I see her as someone who can have fun with the right group, but prefers to be the quiet background of the friendship ring, observing.
My Image of Hermes/Castille Together:
I imagine something similar to the beginning relationship of Amu/Ran in Shugo Chara. I see Hermes deciding to take control of Castille at inopportune moments, just because she really has something she wants to say or is bored with being the supporting voice in her head. I can definitely see them arguing, sometimes Castille physically yelling instead of mentally, resulting in hilarity...
But I also see them bonding on certain things, like their love for children and sports.
Random stuff
Hermes is also known to watch over athletes, and he is credited for inventing sports like boxing. Castille loves playing sports of all kinds, though volleyball is her favorite. The athletic side of her would mesh well with Hermes.
I also considered age for the choice as well. Hermes is the second youngest of the Gods, so it would be natural for that soul to want to connect with someone younger as well. Hence Castille's young age.
I chose Hermes name (Amarilla) because it means "Sparkling"/ I see Hermes as a character who is full of life to the point of almost being obnoxious, so in a way it is like her personality is sparkling.
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Posted: Tue Mar 02, 2010 9:26 pm
Possible Name List:
Admeta, which means untamed. Aingeal, which means messenger Amarilla, sparkling. Leni, shining one
Lykainion, little she-wolf *not for this quest, but I want to remember it*
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Posted: Thu Mar 18, 2010 1:44 am
Heyo!
Here's a crit! I may add more to this later since I owe a few and want to get them done. Anything added will be marked so you know. C:
Castille:
First note: I really love how you have the "Castille Says". It's fun to see her little remarks on herself.
Her hobbies are a good mix of solo/group activities. Looking at "Elementary School" makes me wonder if she has goals for becoming a teacher?
One thing I notice right away with the flaws and virtues is that you have four flaws and three virtues. Adding in another virtue could help even her out and make her seem not so flawed.
For the virtues I can't see anything contradicting. Though the "multitasking" is something to be wary of, as it can be seen as a skill rather than a virtue. I like open-minded and the empathetic ear.
For flaws, I really enjoy the "Jack of all trades..." one and the pride and emotion bottling, but I think the hypocritical one is also one to be a bit wary on. Putting that a character is hypocritical makes a good flaw, that's true. It's just something to think about with the wording, since I think you mean it that she doesn't follow what she says to others for herself? It confused me a little.
Hermes:
The virtues work, but like above having the full four would help round the personality even more. In the case of the other three, you may want to expand further and give more description to set Hermes apart from other characters who share the same virtues.
On flaws, I can see how patience can move into indecisiveness so there's no problem there.
On pacifist... I'm not really sure on this one. By saying she would rather not fight and then saying she will if she needs to makes it contradict. She is either pacifistic or not, I'm not sure if there's really a gray area on that.
Childish seems to work with your direction, I can see that being a good flaw later down the road.
I agree in the love for something on her look resembling the greek depiction of Hermes. <3
Overall:
The direction you're going in is very easy to see, which is great. <3 There's still a little fleshing out to do, but with some additions I know she'll be great.
I like your added info section, it's always good to be able to read further into the thoughts behind a character and how you plan to merge them later.
Great job, I can't wait to see what you add next! C:
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Posted: Thu Mar 18, 2010 2:48 pm
Updated: 3/18/2010
Reworded the "Why Castille for Hermes" section.
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Posted: Thu Mar 18, 2010 2:52 pm
I may have missed something (in that case, please kick me), but I don't think I have seen Hermes' attacks?
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Posted: Thu Mar 18, 2010 2:54 pm
......seriously? Thats what I forget! LOL!
Lemme just C&P that from my word document...
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Posted: Thu Mar 18, 2010 3:13 pm
Quote: B Hermes is known as the god of thieves. So maybe she can "steal" they opponants attack for a period of time? This could be better worded as "her enemy's" How is being a pacifist a flaw? She doesn't like to fight, but she will when someone's really in danger. Just curious. I think being a pacifist is a good thing, personally. Quote: I see her as someone who can have fun with the right group, but prefers to be the quiet background the friendship ring, observing. This should be "to be in the quiet background of the friendship ring, observing." or "to be an observer in friendships, in the quiet background." Quote: I amagine something similar to the beginning relationship of Amu/Ran in Shugo Chara. This should be "imagine" Remove the at the end of Castille's appearance post. Other than those little things, I love how she gives her opinions on her own things, helping explain it better. This character to me seems well rounded, but easily stressed out easily. Considering she's a multitask-er, this is bound to happen, though! Her flaw of bottling things up and overworking herself could cause emotional problems and relationship problems with other people. Hopefully she has understanding friends or perhaps she could use her hobbies like volleyball and photography as an outlet for all her stress? I dunno really, I'm rambling. I like this character a lot, nice work!
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Posted: Fri Mar 19, 2010 11:37 am
Awwww, grammar fail! *brick'd* Will change that soon! But first, to work!
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Posted: Sun Mar 21, 2010 3:11 am
Just wanted to let you know I updated the crit I started for you before. C:
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Posted: Sun Mar 21, 2010 7:53 am
With the hypocritical one, I was thinking that she can give advice and will give advice to others....but when it comes to following that advice herself, she doesnt.
Lets say she tells someone that they shouldnt get upset over a situation. Well then that same situation happens to her. She wont follow her own advice and remain calm. She gets upset.
I am still trying to word the pacifist one...I know that I want Castille to dislike anything to do with fighting. I might just take it out of Hermes entirely...
I was hoping that the greek look was a good choice smile That was the first thing I thought of when I read about the Parallel Court!
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