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 Posted: Mon Mar 01, 2010 7:16 am
Name: Torii Balst
Age: 18
Birthday: December 5
Sign: Saggitarius
Gemstone: Turquiose
Blood Type: O
Fav. Food: Filled pastries (because of all the variety of things that can be inside and the surprise factor)
Hated Food: Potato soup and other bland foods
School: Sovereign Heights
((She likely would have been held back, because she really doesn't like school. But luckily for her she gets a thrill from cheating, so.. she's managed to slip through. College is paid by a trust fund left from her parent's))
May choose to just put her in a job instead
Hobbies:
Living life to the fullest/adrenaline junkie - Torii believes that you have to live life to the fullest NOW because you never know when it'll end. She wants to try anything and everything at least twice. Torii LOVES to feel alive. The pounding of blood in her head, adrenaline running through her veins has made her a bit of an adrenaline junkie. Speeding the wrong way down a one way street, cheating on tests, hot wiring cars, sex in a confessional booth while church is in session, the occasional drug, fights with random strangers, if it'll get her blood pumping she wants to try it.
Socializing - If she can't be doing something super exciting, Torii at the least wants to be around other people. Whether it be friends or strangers, she's the sort to try to pick up a conversation. She really hates being alone.
Collecting souviners - Torii likes to collect 'trophies' from her adventures. Matchbooks and coasters from bars, broken tail light pieces, street signs, anything that will let her look back and remember. They also make great conversation pieces
Virtues:
Brave / no fear - Adventurous and never the sort to back down Torii will toss herself into anything and everything. It's not brashness, because she does think about it and it's not spur of the moment, she's just willing to be the first and put herself on the line. If you let fear control you, you might as well be dead already.
Protective - Seeing as she has no family she is close to Torii absolutely clings to her friends. She would put her life on the line for them easily. She wants her friends safe, happy, and blossoming and will do her best to help at that.
Extroverted - Torii is a bright, loud, and outgoing personality type. She's great at making aquantinces (not necessarily friends), more than happy to voice her opinion, and is generally assertive and playful. It is fairly obvious she loves being in a group of people and she's a fairly pleasant sort of person to shoot the s**t with.
Flaws:
Self destructive - Torii can sometimes do dangerous, hurtful, and unpleasant things to herself as a side effect of her adrenaline junkie nature. She's broken bones, taken dangerous drugs, may very well have an STD or two, and has put herself into very dangerous situations more times then a couple times. Worst of all, she just can't seem to stop.
Smothering- Torii can be so protective (physically and emotionally) of her good friends that she runs the risk of smothering or alienating them. Fear of losing them makes her incredibly clingy and she worries about them constantly. Whether it be WAY too many phonecalls/check ins or actually standing in the way of them doing things she finds unacceptable for them, she has a bad habit of running off friends, which only makes her cling even harder to the next one.
Hypocrite - Plain and simple, Torii can be a real hypocritical b***h. She'll fight tooth and nail if you try to change her or criticize her in anyway. On the other hand, she's the first to jump in and try to stop/change her friends in almost identical situations. In her mind the rules for herself aren't the same as the rules for everyone else. 'Do as I say and not as I do' is her basic mantra in life.
Secretly scared - Though she puts up a great outward facade, and lacks any real care for her own wellbeing deep down Torii is a very scared and broken individual. When alone she's drowned in bouts of unhappiness and depression, and on her own she really has nothing to live for. She worries about her friends, she worries about change and losing things she has now, and in extreme situations it's liable to bubble out.
PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION
Eyes: Green
Hair: Brunette with some streaks of color (what color is up to you!)
I'm thinking this hairstyle. Just a simple long and sleek ponytail. If not that, then something uneven.
Body type: Tall (6'1) and curvacious perhaps with vague muscle defination (not like buff or anything, just not a skeleton) to match her active lifestyle.
Extra: A tattoo (or two) and some piercings likely (more likely on the ears, belly, or eyebrow then on other parts of the face)
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Posted: Mon Mar 01, 2010 7:19 am
Senshi: Sailor Zeus, Parellel Senshi of Thunder
Challenge: Boom boom baby ;D
PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION
Eyes: Green
Hair: Brunette with a few streaks of color (I would LOVE love if her hairstyle changed to something more intricate to work with the design of her fuku. So few scouts change hair!)
Fuku Colour: I'm going to say a more muted green (or even a muted pink) and gold. But I'm open to suggestions and changes. I really don't want to fall in love with a design only to have it too far from everyone else's sooo it's all up to Shazari, I definately trust her in making it sexilicious!
* It would be kind of neat to have influences based on one of the many thunder legends incorperated in somehow (greek - Zeus, germanic - Thor, native america - thunderbird, chinese - lei gong)
Attacks:
If I get the okay to throw in some lightening attacks, I happily will. But since she's thunder, I was thinking more sound/vibration based attacks (since thunder is loud and can like rattle windows and houses and stuff). I welcome mod suggestions for attacks. :3
One idea I had:
Thunder Clap: Sailor Zeus pulls her arms back before vigorously slapping her hands back together, the action creates a BOOM (sonic sound waves) that has the potential to knock someone over.
** Another could possibly be creating a very loud sound that pretty much forces everyone (except those that love ear bleeding heavy metal XD) to cover their ears.
Parellel personality
Virtues:
Nurturing spirit: Zeus cares very deeply for her friends both on a physical side and an emotional level. Feelings are very important to her and she's definately a shoulder to cry on and the first to offer up praise when she thinks it's needed.
Mother Bear: Intensely protective of her friends, Zeus will happily be the shield of the group. Messing with her friends really fires her up, and she's most certainly the sort to jump in front of an attack to save someone else.
Resiliant: Zeus can take a punch figuratively or literally and keep standing. She takes criticism well enough and is unlikely to blow up in stressful situations.
Flaws:
Overly romantic view: Love will always prevail, friends are the most important thing, and in the end there is a fairytale ending as long as you don't give up hope! Zeus has a romanticized view of the world that often makes it difficult to.. reason with in bad situations. Along with being annoying it blinds her to things like cheap shots, traitors, and manipulation.
Sticks up for others, not herself: Though ready to jump to the defense of her friends at the drop of a pin Zeus feels no need (or maybe it's lacks the self confidence) to do so for herself. This often times makes her a doormat and she's too worried about hurting others to do anything about it.
Defend my friends with my fists: If you offend her friends she'll punch you in the face. Simple as that. Did you deserve it? Maybe, maybe not. She relies a little less on words and more on brute strength when it comes to defending her friends. (Granted, innercircle disputes tend to put her on edge and make her uncertain of what to do)
Y chromesome kryptonite: Zeus is a flirt, and she LOVES to love. She's easily thrown off track by a wink from a cute boy and would totally stop what she's doing just to go over and chat up some hottie. Though she'd never actually go after her friends boyfriends, she does flirt with them (it's just her personality type), which can cause SERIOUS issues. Also, she'll often flirt and be charmed by bad guys until they hurt one of her friends enough to snap her out of it.
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Posted: Mon Mar 01, 2010 8:17 am
Why would they choose her?
Torii would probably be the sort that would have to be recruited in a time of need, or before she was known particularly well. From the outside she appears to be a pretty tough cookie. Tall, atheletic, outgoing, a scrapper, 'fearless', a host of many useful skills (lockpicking, hotwiring, reliable transportation) etc. I imagine they'd learn after the fact more of her emotional flaws since she's unlikely to show many of them (with an exception to hypocrite) until she's particularly close to someone.
Like.. what in the world is her problem?
When Torii was 12 her house burned down, taking with it her parents and pretty much every worldly possession she owned. She was rescued by a firefighter, and remained in the hospital for a few days, missing her parents funeral before being shipped around to various relatives to live with. With time she began to misbehave, sending her from home to home until finally she graduated.
The whole situation scared into her the realization of how fleeting life is, and how quickly and unceremoniously it can all be over. By 14 she was was beginning to do reckless things, all in the name of experiencing everything. It's spiralled to a point where she almost gets a high off of adreneline and finds it hard to simply go through life without atleast thinking about the next new exciting thing.
Extra info and stuff for shits and grins XD
Thunder
In ancient times Thunder was often seen as an act of anger or rage from the gods. Thor hitting the sky with his hammer was thought to be the cause of thunder in Germanic tribes/groups. In grecian lore thunder was sometimes said to be caused by the disputes of Zeus and Hera.
Thunderbird
The thunderbird is a native american spirit/symbol. More war happy tribes saw the thunderbird as an omen of war. The peals of thunder were said to predict victory and bolster young warriors hearts for battle. In more peaceful tribes the thunderbird was seen as creator/destroyer/controller of nature. It was said that the thunderbird wages constant battle against the river serpent, diving in and killing it to protect the people.
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Posted: Mon Mar 01, 2010 2:05 pm
Before I put too much work into a character that might need to be completely scraped, I'll go ahead and open this up for crits. Go ahead and do your worst. heart
I've totally editted the personality and stuff to something I like a little better.
I'm posting the original stuff here though, just incase I want to work with/merge/mend things etc.
Hobbies:
Adrenaline junkie - Torii LOVES to feel alive. The pounding of blood in her head, adrenaline running through her veins, anything that could and should get her in trouble she seeks out and craves. Speeding down a wrong way street, cheating on tests, hot wiring cars, sex in a confessional booth while church is in session, the occassional drug, fights with random strangers, if it'll get her blood pumping she wants to do it.
Living life to the fullest (supernova) - Torii believes quite truely that you have to live life to the fullest NOW because you never know when it'll end. She wants to try anything and everything atleast twice, even if.. very likely it will cause her to burn out before she's even out of college.
Collecting souvineirs - Torii likes to collect 'trophies' from her adventures. Matchbooks and coasters from bars, broken tail light pieces, street signs, anything that will let her look back and remember. They also make great conversation pieces
Virtues:
Brave / no fear - Adventurous and never the sort to back down Torii will toss herself into anything and everything. It's not brashness, because she does think about it and it's not spur of the moment, she's just willing to be the first and put herself on the line. If you let fear control you, you might as well be dead already.
Self sufficient - Having fended mostly for herself for years Torii is pretty good at taking care of herself. She's learned to self tend wounds (that aren't too severe), she can play house well enough, and she's been managing her finance from her meager trust fund for awhile. A sliver of survival instinct it would seem.
Protective - Friends are a treasure and Torii is remarkably attached to them considering her otherwise chaotic lifestyle. Though it sometimes leads to smothering and alienating her friends, she's very protective of them. She would put her life on the line for them easily.
I want better for you - (This applies to good friends, strangers she couldn't give a crap about) Torii acknowledges that what she does is bad. It doesn't stop her, but she also refuses to see that kind of thing mirrored in her friends. SHE can almost kill herself diving from two stories into a swimming pool, YOU aren't allowed. She wants her friends safe, happy, and blossoming and will do her best to help at that (like dragging your drunk a** out of a frat house before you get violated D<).
Flaws:
Self destructive - Torii does dangerous, hurtful, and unpleasant things to herself as a side effect of her adrenaline junkie nature. She's broken bones, taken dangerous drugs, may very well have an STD or two, and has put herself into very dangerous situations more times then you can count on your fingers. Worst of all, she has no intention of stopping. Any brief worries that she needs to stop are overcome by her desires to do it again when the oppurtunity arises.
I'm too cool for school - Torii things she's pretty awesome sauce. In truth she's kinda cool.. she has lots of varied experiences and skills and she's a fairly tough cookie. But she's entirely uncool in the fact that she can be a real b***h, a hypocrit, and incredibly stupid in the way she goes about things. Her "I'm so cool" attitude has lost her more then a couple friends in the past who get tired of putting up with it.
Keep your opinion because I don't want it - Torii is unable to take criticism, which is ridiculously hypocritical. 'Do as I say but not as I do' could possibly be her mantra in life. If faced with suggestions about her lifestyle (even from close friends), she'll try to shut the conversation down. And if that doesn't work, she'll just leave. She's a stonewall in this regard.
It's a facade - Despite the face she shows to everyone, deep down Torii isn't a happy person. She's broken and hurting, and it's the backlash that's created such a self destructive and loud personality. She really has nothing to live for and if you know her well enough, this becomes pretty apparent. One day down the line she's likely to crack, if she hasn't gotten herself killed first.
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Posted: Tue Mar 02, 2010 9:22 am
Okay! Added some vague color/powers and stuff. Added flaws and my reasonings behind her.
I'm really looking for help though! I'm horrible about second guessing myself so I'd like some opinions.
Is she 'okay' as she is? Or am I spreading one trait into far too many? Should I shove most of Torii's quirks into one or two traits and add things like sociable, etc etc.
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Posted: Mon Mar 08, 2010 10:22 am
Okay!! Super huge update.
Redid/tweaked her personality a bit to tone her down a little. Made her adrenaline junkie nature more a part of her instead of being an all encompassing 'this is everything she is' thing.
Hopefully she's a little more player friendly and realistic now! I'm happier with her atleast. :3
I'd love any crits and opinions however
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Posted: Wed Mar 17, 2010 6:15 am
I know I'm a little behind on art anyway, but since I know I'll have time while I'm at my hazmat school next week:
I'm offering sketches for the first couple of good (aka thought out, not just two three sentences thrown in just for art) crits I get. Briberyyyyyy heart
Quests, official characters, whatever, just post who you'd like drawn.
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Posted: Fri Mar 19, 2010 8:50 am
You've obviously spent a lot of thought on this, so I've got one question in particular. In her hobbies and flaws you mention that she's an adrenaline junkie, and you cite highly illegal drugs with lingering side effects, hot-wiring, cheating, and STDs. You assembled all these pretty convincingly, including the potential for an STD is a nice touch, since in an RP world it can be easy to pretend that "Sex Drugs and Rock and Roll" have no consequence, when they do, however... any single one of these could get her caught, especially if she has a substance abuse problem that would without question, ding her judgment weather she wants to accept that it does or not. Hell some STDs, like Syphilis, can even have a effect on sanity in the long run, so if she had it and didn't know it, she could get into a lot of trouble. In fact she has SO many behavior problems it seems almost impossible that she's never been caught, and never had a record. This makes your entire quest hinge on the idea that the Parallel court pick her in snap judgment. ((this seems risky.)) How will becoming Zeus affect her self destructive and illegal tendency's? How will they affect her ability to act as an good Senshi, or is she intended to be a marginal one? Also HAS She ever been caught? She seems bound to eventually. How has her behavior affected her heath and future? Does she have plans for the future? Also: Why were they unable to postpone an funeral ceremony ((refrigeration and chemicals do a lot these days)) for her parents? Was her behavior key to being shipped between relatives instead of one of them providing her a steady home? Has she ever been sent to an psychiatrist because of these issues, which, for family members, would probably clearly stem from the loss of her parents? ((if you decide to do art, I'd love art for my quest character Falco. He's got two alternate quests atm: Cav and Nega But it's up to you if you want to draw him at all.))
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Posted: Fri Mar 19, 2010 1:09 pm
Thanks so much dear! heart I just got back from errands from doom sooo I'm a little brain dead. Soo vague answer now, will respond to the rest tonight when I get home from work and have had time to mull over things.
When I first put together Torii she was a bit more.. extreme. I realized it was a bit much and tried to tone her down a bit, so you're right I should probably explain that better. XD
While before the junkie thing was like her everything, I consider it more a hobby now, if that makes sense. Sort of like.. I could see her doing 1, 2 (MAYBE 3 in extreme cases) big things a week more littered with small stuff like cheating/stealing nail polish etc littered into the mix to tide her over.
I very much agree she likely would have and should have gotten caught for some stuff. In fact, I think she'd actually be amused by a night in lockup/feed her adreneline. I haven't put any thought into actual experiences/events yet, but I will definately think and add info reguarding that. I imagine she got away with more than she should have, having been a minor and having been tossed off by relatives that didn't want to deal with/discipline her but considering she turned 18 recently the consequences are only going to get worse.
On the point of drugs, I don't really see her becoming a drug addict. Because her kick is trying new things I don't see her hitting up the same drug enough times to become truely addicted. I mean logically, it's probably possible, but that was my personal reasoning why she didn't get necessarily addicted to one drug. The high of doing something exciting/new/bad is just more powerful to her then the highs or lows of particular drugs.
@ Zues + teammates affect - I'm hoping that she'll mellow out some. That having friends, and having the thrills of battle will help compensate and replace some of her naughty behavior. Certainly not a bandaid or perfect fix, but I'm hoping it'd mellow her a little. Also, because of her ties to friends, when she comes to know the other members I see her as being loyal and 'mostly' reliable. Other than the occassional slip up.
@ Parents - I didn't come up with a reasoning, but I'll mull over that too. Probably something to do with them not knowing when she'd be out of the hospital, or..??? Will think on this XD The reasoning behind doing it was because 'having everything she knew and owned gone without the chance to say goodbye' was the turning event in her life that shaped her clinginess, obsession with collecting soueviners, and live life to the fullest urge.
@ Risky - I know ^_^; It's been one of my biggest worries when going over this again and again. I like the character enough at the moment, that I'm going to risk and stay with it, but in the future I may very well go for a much more user friendly character.
Thanks so much for the help! I'll add all that extra info when I get a chance. And I'll absolutely draw him! If I don't get it to you this weekend I'll most definately ping it to you next weekend when I get back from the work training thingy.
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Posted: Fri Mar 19, 2010 5:39 pm
No problem, I hope it helps!
I'm sure there's also some information on the Web if you know which drugs she's sampled, that can tell you the long term effects of even a quick sampling. ((Like LSD giving flashbacks years down the road.))
I wish you luck! And thanks for the sketch offer. smile
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