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Renalie

PostPosted: Fri Feb 19, 2010 3:14 pm


Geh, after joining this guild like...a looong time ago I finally decided to make my first ever post. I know it's pretty bad but I'd love to know what I need to improve on and whats ok. Total honesty please and thanks in advance! 3nodding

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PostPosted: Sat Feb 20, 2010 1:07 pm


Critique first!
The shoulders look hunched up like she is agitated. Unless that is how it is then perhaps next time lower the shoulders to a relaxed slump.
Her breast(s) mainly on right looks awkward as if it is sagging.
The one on the left extends to the shoulder a tad too much, you can fix this easly by just erasing the line to make its a bit shorter.

Complements second! The design of the kimono(Am I right?) is beautiful but a bit cluttered. I also love the way you drew the hair and eyes. C':

Keep up the good work ~ !

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Zantetsken

PostPosted: Sat Feb 20, 2010 1:50 pm


I pretty much agree with what hentaro14 said. Maybe the uh... ... I dunno what it's called... The part that goes around her neck and goes down to the belt/obi... Anyhow, I think those lines seem kinda stiff. I'm not really sure how it could be changed if you don't want it to appear too loose, though.
PostPosted: Mon Feb 22, 2010 7:53 pm


not bad she has a grumpy face then again i guess if you where in a kamoto it's hard to walk in. haha well over all she looks upset if that was the emotion you where trying to come across, it works.

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PostPosted: Tue Feb 23, 2010 12:45 am


Niice =)

I love the hair and how it runs of her face almost like water. I also like how you've done the eyes and the mouth (Well, the face in general is actually really good). I would say, the reason a few people think that she isn't supposed to be slouching is because you've just made the shoulders raise, rather than make the neck and collarbone look more tense. It's just my opinion and you can do with it what you want biggrin
I also really like the elaborate detail in the kimono and sash. I wish I had such an eye for detail razz


Good job!


Edit: I just also thought, well, unless you really wanted the angsty expression, I think that she would look more graceful and beautiful if you made her look relaxed
xD
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