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 Posted: Tue Jan 12, 2010 9:44 am
here is where you post your works and get them reviewed ill start.
tears
falling
from your sparkling eyes
rolling down
your pale cheek
its whisper
in your sigh
your future
looks so bleek
hurt and
heartbreak
your pain
plain to see
to see you this way
it gets
to me
so let me
be your savior
and wipe away
your tears
my devotion shall
not waver
as i hold you
near
roses should
never cry
diamonds ever
break
but to you
i will not lie
this is sometimes the toll love takes
so wipe away
the hurt
and dry up
all the pain
those are trails
with which we flirt
and flower would never
bloom if not for the rain
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Posted: Wed Jan 13, 2010 5:03 am
gosh no responses. what do yall think?
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Posted: Wed Jan 13, 2010 6:49 am
Be patient, the guild is small.
Poetry isn't my thing really, it's all kind of too.. emotional for me.
But I'm just curious why you made this an announcement instead of a normal thread. *U* lol.
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Posted: Wed Jan 13, 2010 8:29 am
not announcement, sticky. they dont disappear and seeing as there are no poetry posts i was trying to get it to become more mainstream.
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Posted: Wed Jan 13, 2010 6:30 pm
I like it. A lot different than the way I usually write mine, but yours seems to flow better. Good job. ^___^ I'll post one of mine to add to this sticky. It's funny how
She's looking into me
And dissecting me
Bringing out the beauty
That's buried deep inside
And that I'm not afraid
to open up and let her in
Make a home for her;
deep within my heart
Where my blood pumps
And distributes her love
Thought my body;
It seems like she is
A living miracle,
A heart warmer
I'll give up my blanket
If she'll keep on,
Keep on warming me
With her love.
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Posted: Thu Jan 14, 2010 2:38 pm
nice rhyming. the lines are sticky thou. but i love the imagary.
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Posted: Thu Jan 14, 2010 5:24 pm
Thanks, Bard. I kind of have trouble with keeping the flow, but try and make it up with imagery and rhyming. Got another one for us?
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Posted: Tue Jan 19, 2010 3:58 am
heres another.
to whom it may concern
to whom it
may concern
there is but
on thing for which i yearn
a love self
possesed
it i
forget the rest
that i have
to remember to even breathe
that heaven itself
is concieved
that my
will is forfet
and that the
world can not forget
that till
my final breath
it gives my life
its depth
to fill
my soul
to make
me whole
to steal
my heart
and till
death do us part
so here
i sit
are you
it?
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Posted: Fri Jan 22, 2010 2:35 pm
possessed Quote: to remember to even breathe that heaven itself is concieved Conceived forfeit Other than the few spelling errors, I rather liked it. c:
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Posted: Mon Feb 01, 2010 8:16 am
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Posted: Sun Feb 07, 2010 11:53 am
I think their nice, little poems. Although I hate to be the one to point it out, your not using your capitols. Its killing me trying to figure out whats what like that. :l
~Avian
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Posted: Mon Feb 08, 2010 7:54 am
its better than my hand writting but ill try to remember that. btw capital.
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