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sweetnessfairy

PostPosted: Fri Dec 16, 2005 9:29 pm


What would you know, I'm writing a story. ^_^ I appologize ahead of time for any grammar mistakes and SPELLING (spelling is NOT my strong point >.<). Feel free to correct me. And feel free to comment and please, tell me what I need to work on. (*Will probably make a seperate thread for this*) And well, enjoy.

Romantic Sci-Fi with a LOT of suspence (mwa-haha twisted ). About a couple Sam and Emily, who...get themselves in a sticky situation. And, yes, the first chapter is supposed to make no sense. I felt like sticking you in the middle of the action with out knowing a thing. So ha.

Okies, onward to story, and I might stop typing at one point, its around midnight right now, sorry.
PostPosted: Fri Dec 16, 2005 9:56 pm


Part One
Chapter One


Endless Tears. Deafening sobs. Useless comforts.

Lovers holding on, swearing never to let go.

Heartless cells. Padded, except for cold bar doors.

Sounds Like hell, but its not. Just barely.

Two sit in one cell. Emily and Sam. Sam has short, wavy, light brown hair with natural highlights. He also has amazing blue eyes and a light complex. He's paler than normal and his blue eyes are darting around, as if he was expecting something. Emily is also pale. She has long, layered, dark brown hair and green-blue eyes. She's shaking and breathing in segments. Her brilliant green-blue eyes are filled with tears.

"S-Sam." ,she manages to sob out. "hhhee-hhhuu-hhee-Sam." Sam moved closer and squeezed her. She sobbed into his shoulder. "Sam...don't let go...hhee-hhuu...Sahhm." ,she cried breathly, her chest jerking in and out. "E-emily,..I-it'll be o-...o-okay.", Sam stuttered, eyes darting everywhere. Footsteps were heard. Emily took a sharp intake and had trouble breathing out.

Sam's eyes were everywhere now. He was worried about Emily, not really himself. Emily, who was currently hyper-venilating, was concerned about them both. The footsteps got closer. Sam's eyes narrowed. He was determined now. Emily curled up tight and was shaking, but she noticed Sam. For a second she stopped shaking, she had faith in whatever he was planning. She started again, but mostly out of acting she had Sam.

((Sorry, 1:00 AM here and I'm exausted. And if I go any farther, you'll hate me for stopping. I'll type more later.))

sweetnessfairy


Finalfantasyfiend

PostPosted: Sun Jan 01, 2006 8:45 am


((Nice. I like this very much. well done on drawing me into the plot. That's a good sign. I WANT MORE!!))
PostPosted: Sun Apr 02, 2006 4:17 pm


I'm sure when you said later, you didn't mean for us to wait this long!

Liway
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