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 Posted: Tue Dec 13, 2005 9:51 pm
WISHES OF THE NIGHT
Oh, how I have missed the scent of night air.
The wind that has wafted through nature,
Stealing a hint of its beauty as it passes by,
Harboring its eternal loveliness where ever it may go,
Carrying it to me, causing memories to return -
Memories of dreams and wishes upon stars,
Wishes upon the Moon, upon the Shadows, upon Darkness -
Wishes of the Night.
It brings me back to a time,
In which I believed that anything was possible.
And blessed with this cool kiss of promise, I sleep.
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((Criticism encouraged. 3nodding ))
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Posted: Tue Jan 03, 2006 6:50 pm
Beautiful! I love the idea! Though you may want to re-word the second line, that one line seems a bit awkward in a poem that otherwise has an exellent flow.
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Posted: Thu Jan 05, 2006 5:14 pm
Thank you. I do agree though, it does seem to just run on forever. *takes out pen and contemplates how to change it* Any suggestions?
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