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 Posted: Tue Dec 13, 2005 9:05 am
So I started writing this story in a short story class I took last summer. The story itself has evolved to a few chapters, but I really havnt finished it. I hope you enjoy.
Constructive criticism is accepted!
*points* The jello is hidden in the story.... >.>
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Posted: Tue Dec 13, 2005 9:06 am
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Posted: Tue Dec 13, 2005 10:03 am
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Posted: Tue Dec 13, 2005 10:05 am
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Posted: Tue Dec 13, 2005 10:08 am
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Posted: Fri Dec 16, 2005 7:58 pm
I haven't read it yet but this is just a suggestion but try breaking up your story into the different posts because it looks very long at the moment and might make people think they can't spend that much time on it. Where there is jump in time like when the characters go to bed is a good place to break it. But that's just a suggestion.
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Posted: Wed Jan 25, 2006 7:18 pm
Sorry for the delay, but that was what the 'reserved' posts were for wink
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