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heavens master

PostPosted: Thu Dec 24, 2009 4:09 pm


Pain and it's joys

Pain, it hurts us most of all,
but without it we would fall
into a pit of endless fear,
without that which we hold so dear.

So, come now you weary fool,
who says that pain is a useless tool
and I will show you the folly of joy,
and free your mind of it's loathsome ploy.

Joy tells you everything will be alright,
but then you two get in a fight,
and they take away their wondrous bliss,
and fill your heart with emptiness.

You cry and sob with much remorse,
for you are under their evil curse.
No matter how much you beg or how much you plea,
joy will never return to thee.

And so now you see how joy traps all,
and plunges them into a desperate fall,
until they discover the pleasure of pain,
and how it never leaves you again.

Pain, oh that emotional dive,
that reminds us once again we are alive.
That reminds once again...we. are. alive.
PostPosted: Thu Dec 24, 2009 4:10 pm


the fool's love

why would i return to loves shallow embrace
after it left and turned from my face
i am no fooL who is jagged and hurt
for I do not need that hollOw flirt

i do not regret the choices i’Ve made
they mErely turned on me and became a blade
which pierced through my heart and tore it on out
so now it Is gone, but i made no hurt shout

i accepted the losS and blamed only myself
it couldn’t be love she’s an innocent elf
so i moved along, and carried the weight
for that was my purpose, my given Fate

i tried again, several mOre times
all were Rejection like the walls around mimes
it’s torn me to pieces and now I am gone
an empty man who has lost sight oF dawn

i want to return to lOves forlorn embrace
but she won’t cOme back, and look on my face
i am the fooL who is jagged and hurt
for my heart iS longing for that hollow flirt

heavens master


heavens master

PostPosted: Thu Dec 24, 2009 4:11 pm


commentary on recent extremes in weather

Captain Planet, he was a hero
He fought the bad guys and stopped pollution
But now he shows he’s more like Nero
For he has found the ultimate solution

He sees the problem plaguing his world
To save it all his fist has unfurled
And come against man that wicked creature
Who takes what she wants and subdues all to her

His anger aroused at the pain man inflicted
He summons the forces of nature to strike
At the heart of man, the deprived social call
To kill every man, woman, and child alike

He attacks the homes of all he depicted
To be the cause of natures strife
He destroys all man and causes the fall
Of humankind and snuffs out their life
PostPosted: Thu Dec 24, 2009 4:41 pm


By the way, feel free to critique my work any way you see fit. Although, I am more inclined to listen to constructive criticism, than just general bashing of my work.

heavens master


i seem fantastic

Fashionable Businesswoman

PostPosted: Thu Dec 24, 2009 5:18 pm


I'm not much of a poetry person, but quick question about your first piece:

Why would we be fearful if there was no pain? Wouldn't people be more bold if they couldn't get hurt?

And that very last line, you might wanna change the commas into periods, or just give each word its own line. Otherwise it just looks like a typo.
PostPosted: Thu Dec 24, 2009 10:46 pm


Thank you very much for reading, it makes me feel better. the fear of loss, and then after the loss, the fear of never finding joy again. Whereas pain is always there when you need it. Fear and pain are both different, and you can have fear without pain, and vise versa.

heavens master

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