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 Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 4:39 am
People once believed that when someone dies, a crow carries their soul to the land of the dead. But sometimes, something so bad happens that a terrible sadness is carried with it and the soul can't rest. Then sometimes, just sometimes, the crow can bring that soul back to put the wrong things right. (Opening Quote Of The Crow) 
"Don't look don't look" the shadows breathe
Whispering me away from you
"Don't wake at night to watch her sleep
You know that you will always lose
This trembling
Adored
Tousled bird mad girl... "
But every night I burn
But every night I call your name
Every night I burn
Every night I fall again
"Oh don't talk of love" the shadows purr
Murmuring me away from you
"Don't talk of worlds that never were
The end is all that's ever true
There's nothing you can ever say
Nothing you can ever do... "
Still every night I burn
Every night I scream your name
Every night I burn
Every night the dream's the same
Every night I burn
Waiting for my only friend
Every night I burn
Waiting for the world to end
"Just paint your face" the shadows smile
Slipping me away from you
"Oh it doesn't matter how you hide
Find you if we're wanting to
So slide back down and close your eyes
Sleep a while
You must be tired... "
But every night I burn
Every night I call your name
Every night I burn
Every night I fall again
Every night I burn
Scream the animal scream
Every night I burn
Dream the crow black dream
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Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 4:40 am
 ♥ .A.l.e.a.s.e. .T.h.e. .S.t.u.d.e.n.t. ♥  Name - Alease Harlotton
Nicknames - Harlot, Mom, Ally, Onion Head
Age - 16
Birthday - 16th February
Sign - Aquarius
Blood Type - O
Favourite Food - Beef and Potato stew Fruit Salad - for some reason, the though of meat makes her feel sick now... o.o for reasons unknown to her.
Hated Food - Cabbage and Carrots Meat
School - Crystal Academy
Gift -
Playing The Piano - Harlot is a talented piano player, she headlines concerts and takes part in musicals, at the moment she is releasing her own CD however you would never know. She does not brag or show off her talent in front of others and if you do not look at the classical section in music stores you would never hear of her CD. She practises many hours a day and thanks to her insomnia its not common for her to sneak into the music room after hours and play almost all night.
Hobbies -
The Dark Side. - Alease is a 'not so little' gothic kid. She likes nothing more than being sat in a corner listening to her music at full blast, watching horror movies and reading books that would make other people feel sick. Her fashion is very gothic lolita. Her room is full of skulls, candles and Victorian themed furniture. She burns incense a lot and her book collection involves books on Satanism and taxidermy. Her walls are covered with posters of men with long hair covered in fake blood, her 'forefathers of metal' as she calls them. Its more of a lifestyle than a hobby.
Piercings - This might seem odd but Harlot is a huge fan of body art and when ever she has enough time to spare she goes down to the shop and gets another piercing. She has quite a few now, the school does not really like them but she hides them as much as she can, however since she does not have much hair this proves to be difficult if not impossible. She gets her piercings not really because she thinks it makes her look better, although she does think they are nice. She gets them to show she is individual, with all the pretty princess like girls at Crystal Academy with long hair and pretty faces, a little metal is needed no? Body art also refers to tattoo's I shall say she is way too young to have a tattoo. However the minuet she turns 18 she is planning to be covered, full sleeve, bottom back, shoulder/black, thigh and facial tattoo's. She might be rejected from her classical standing for it but she hears Operatic/Classical Metal is on he rise at the moment, so maybe they will accepted her for who she is a little more than her current crowd.
Sewing - Alease used to HATE textiles, however her little brother ripped so many clothes she saw it pointless buying him new ones, so she leaned hot to Sew to originally fix his clothes. When she got into it thought she discovered she liked it quite a bit and now sometimes does it for pleasure.
Gemstone - Amethyst
Virtues -
Strength - Accepting, Alease is not a person who holds onto the past, what has happened is already too late to change all you can do is look to the future. (I know that I have mentioned bullying bothers her and she does not feel like she can move on from it, however that's because that is continuous and ongoing not over as such, if it did end she would move on from it.) So she always looks forward with the best judgement she can withhold and is not one to give up on something because something terrible has happened. A example of this is when her parents disappeared, instead of being devastated, morning and letting this consume her. She looked on to the future for her brother sake. She is not one to let things she can not control bother her, just try her best at the things she can and if it doesn't work out, she will try a different angle. After all it can not rain all the time right? This does not mean that she would not suffer if say one of her friends died, inside she would grieve in her own way however she would think about the good times she had with them, even more so making sure they did not die in vain, learn something from it. Treasure the memories. Look to a bright tomorrow knowing that they would not want her life to stand still just because they where not by her side any more. This makes her strong.
No its okay, Ill do it! - Alease would never ask anyone to do anything for her, she does not feel comfortable with the thought she might be putting someone else out of the way for her sake. However if someone like Gray (or her new best friend if he is forgotten to her) came up to her and asked her to do something for him she would do it with a heartbeat with out wanting anything in return, she would not even complain about it at all! However she only does things for the few people she is close to if a stranger came up to her and asked her to do something, unless she felt for some reason she wanted to. She would tell them to go suck eggs! (no she would not, she is too timid for that, she would give a nervous chuckle and walk away as fast as she could...)
Trusts her heart. - Today it is not uncommon for people to think of things very logically, take everything into consideration before making a move. So much so that sometimes they loose the initial feeling that they had when faced with a challenge. Alease on the other hand is the kind of girl to listen to what her heart is telling her to do rather than what her mind is. Even if it seems crazy she will always go with her gut feeling on everything. This might not be the smartest thing to do however its the way she likes to live her life. So at least at the end of the day she has no regrets because she went with that she thought was right. For example say a stranger told you to follow them, how much is wrong with that, I mean most people would walk away, however if Alease's heart was telling her to follow said person she would do if she had a good feeling, if not she would walk off. If you where on a murder trail and all evidence was pointing to you. If Alease looked into your eyes and felt you where telling the truth, she would believe you. If she has a bad feeling when she wakes up in the morning, she will stay in bed and say shes sick... ect.
Motherly - She has a younger brother, he is a snot nosed little sod that seemed to be able to push all her buttons at once. However she is more like a mother (Since her parents disappeared and the relative they where given to started to suffer memory problems shortly after getting them! she pretty much raised him), she feeds him, dresses him and helps him with homework. He is more of a son than a brother and she thinks he sees her as a mother more than a sister. The few close friends she has are like family to her to say the least, if she adopts you into said family she automatically takes on the role as the mother, she will do anything for you, look out for you, take care of you when you are ill. Also worry about you everything a mom would do. Its a side few people see in her however if you do its hard not to love it. I mean who does not want a mom around the place?
Flaws -
WEAKNESS - Alease does not value her life very highly, she is grateful for he few people who have shown her kindness. If any one of these people where in danger, she would fight and for them regardless of the risk or damage done to herself. She would step in front of a bullet for a people she cares about, those special few. With out hesitation or thinking it through. She would not think about herself until the pain or hurt started, she would trade in her life for Gray, Mel or Sam any-day if she was asked, so her friends have proved to be her biggest weakness. A lot of people SAY they would do this for people however Alease actually would! (if she does forget the friends she has now, this would be passed onto the new ones that she makes at Crystal!)
Sensitive - One way to put it is Harlot is a total cry baby, she will get upset over almost everything and can go into a sulky mood for hours, some little things make her cry or storm out of a place. People tell her she is fat and ugly, which is one of the things that upsets her the most, she has had eating disorders from it in the past and she tries to hide herself as much as she can. She gets upset seeing any kind of pain and suffering and she scares really easy. It makes her feel quite pathetic really because she knows she needs to toughen up. She can not let people walk all over her forever.
Always the victim - Alease at school gets bullied a lot, she is insanely tall for a girl and it makes her clumsy and stand out in a crowd. She is not very fashionable and she does not blend in with the crowd at all. She is not into things other girls are, ontop of that she gets on with her work and keeps herself to herself. People think she is a easy target because she never fights back or defends herself against anyone. She just freezes up when people confront her with the intention to bully her. Maybe she is scared? For some reason Alease always gets targeted to be the joke. She does not tell people about this, or how miserable it makes her. Maybe she is embarrassed... or plain shamed. Not wanting to bother them with her pitiful problems, they have their own after all.
Hatred? - Alease has been shown people can be cruel, she has been made to feel worthless by people as long as she can remember. Of cause this leaves a mark. On Alease it comes in the form of pure hate for the people who have wronged her. To the point she wishes them dead. Its like a monster bubbling inside her waiting to get out. Its made her hate herself more than anything. She has had her bad points pointed out to her so many times she can no longer see the good. She does not think she is worth anyone's time or effort. When you think about what she has achieved tough this might seem really silly.
Other -
Insomnia - Alease has a slight case of insomnia (well thats the best way she can explain it), she suffers from nightmares and because of it she seems to not want to sleep. She is so scared of her nightmares she physically can not get a good nights sleep. She does not tell people about them, not even her close friends unless she is really freaked out! this sometimes means she can not concentrate and also make silly mistakes, like re-writing something she has already done, also slip and stumble. Also mumble to herself. Which people pick up on and make fun of her for. This is only on bad days though. Most days she is fine if not a little distracted.
Hatred Of Meat - Alease has gone off of the thought of meat all together, the smell and look of it makes her feel sick. More so just being around people who are eating it makes her feel sick. She does not know why but sometimes she will actually throw up over it. This came on very suddenly and no one can explain it to her.
Violent Drunk? - Alease does not drink, however if she is forced to she becomes a totally different person, this was found out in her BP sudden death thread. However she does not drink so this info might be useless, however if you ever meet her when she is a little legless and you make her mad I suggest you run, drunk Alease has a short fuse and a bad attitude. >.>
Physical Description: ALEASE HAS A MAKE OVER.
Hair: THE ONION RULES ALL! =D
Eyes: the same as they are art barren pines, the same large black eye lashes.
Face: very round and feminine, chubby cheeks and a very curved chin and jaw. Her piercings are the same. Maybe change her expression to a surprised look or one that's quite bored and unamused.
Body: Alease is tall for a girl. I mean she is as tall as most boys with out heels. She has a DD bust, her arms are very thin as are her fingers, her rear and thighs are quite chubby however her calves, feat and waist are quite small.
Fashion: Goth, Punk, Lolita, Body Art, Victorian, Vintage, Girly!
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Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 4:41 am
? .A.l.e.a.s.e. .T.h.e. .S.e.n.s.h.i.?  Senshi: Sailor Vindemiatrix, Senshi of Crow's
Star Name Meaning: Vindemiatrix is a star that can be found in the constellation of virgo. Is commonly linked to Venus. The star represents thieves and widows. I thought this was fitting because of the things Alease has been through in her life, she could not have a star which represented good things, also crows are black the colour often used by widows. They are also little thieves I mean if you have anything shiny it is gone!
Crow's: Crows are black birds with a blue tint to them, they are quite large, they have brown eyes which can sometimes be mistaken for red. In mythology it is said that crow's carry the spirits of the dead to the after life. They are shown in grave wards and are depicted as evil in most religions and stories. Some people even go as far to kink crows to the grim reaper. They also have a strong link to witches and Satanism.
Concept: Gothic, Raven, Deep Blue, Black, Death, Graves, Reaper, Scary, Halloween, Feathers, Elegant, Feminine, Hell, Wings, Sorrow, Ghost Like, Harlot?
Challenge: Embrace my black wings! to carry your spirit to oblivion, In the name of Vindemiatrix I shall deliver justice!
Attack: Art of the scavenger
Effect: Crow's are known for there ability to scavenge for food. This means they are very good at homing in on things and also tracking down items and creatures from great distances. This attack allows Alease a certain distance as kind of a map, like a birds eye view even though her feet are firm on the ground, this is in her mind thus only viable to her. She can see characters and there positions as small white dots. I got this idea from crows being able to pick up shiny things easy especially eyes. This attack is a long lasting one and once it is activated it remains dormant until 1. She stops to look at the grid herself. 2. Another creature enters the radius of the grid.
Pro's: Can track even in the dark, it makes it very hard to hide from her, surprise attacks are easily foiled.
Con's: It causes no damage what so ever, what's the point finding trouble if you can do nothing against it.
Attack 2: Art of the scavenger, part 2!
Effect: The same as the first however:
- Her map now covers a wider radius.
- The dots are a different shape depending on if the character is human/nega/senshi/youma.
Con's: Can track even in the dark, it makes it very hard to hide from her, surprise attacks are easily foiled.
Time Limit: It causes no damage what so ever, what's the point finding trouble if you can do nothing against it.
Attack 3: Black Wings! Eternal Heart!
Effect: She takes her glowing broach and throws it as a opponent as it spins it starts to take the shape of a glowing red crow, this slashes her opponent before flying back to her and returning back to her broach as she catches it.
Pro's: This is the attack that she has which causes the most damage. It is quick, swift and effective. She can use it on its own or use it whilst she is inside the dome of black feathers.
Con's: If she used it in the dome of black feathers since it glows is shows everyone where the other are. Although the light vanishes when it is caught. If something comes it contact with it the direction it goes in changes.
Time Limit: One post, she catches it again in the second. She can use this attack twice per battle as long as there is a three post gap in between!
Fuku: (reference coming soon to make it easier!)
[Something along these lines] [ Another sample ]
Colors: A midnight pitch black to represent crow wings, also a deep blue, the bow on her back that attaches to her bracelets maybe make this a see through blue that sparkles to represent the midnight sky.
Collar: None
Bow: I am guessing this means butt bow, its dark blue and the two stands that come off of it attaches to bracelets to make her look flighty as she moves. This wraps around her waist as seen in the pictures.
Bodice: At the bottom there is a feather pattern outlined in blue, her bust line is also outlined with blue, its a bodice shape and makes a heart shape at the top, her bow in the middle of it.
Sleeves: No sleeved the bodice finishes at her bust and does not touch her arms at all.
Brooch: Instead of a bow, can there be a red jewel to match her eyes in she shape of a heart, coming off of this heart are two chibi black crow wings, then hanging down two blue stands or ribbon.
Tiara: None, however she does wear a Victorian Gothic style hat. With a bow on the side with a blue rose in the middle, from this sprouts two crow feathers, feel free to add more details onto it, as well as adding your own swing to her costume.
Choker: Just the plain ribbon choker Shoes: Black boots, blue lace, black feather at the top, thigh high, high heels. Fish net tights under her boots.
Gloves: None.
Accessories: the ones she has as a human and any more you want to add.
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Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 4:42 am
♥ .P.a.g.e.s. .O.f. .A. .S.t.o.r.y.♥ ( When I Was Just A Little Girl )
* Alease was born and grew up in a small village which was not that special, pretty old fashioned with a tight and small committing. Nothing ever seemed to happen. Her little brother Voltaire was born 4 years later and for a while everything seemed to be going well, they all lived a pretty normal life.
* One day her parents went out to town shopping, it got late and they where not back, Alease was about 7 years old. She went to bed as normal, her brother slept on his play mat where he was left by them, he started crying so she did what she had seen her mum do many times before and gave him a bottle, it went everywhere and was the wrong temp and everything, however this was the first time she ever really... took a interest in him.
* The next morning she wondered into town, she got brought back by a neighbour who tough it was odd seeing Alease wondering on her own. The neighbour went to the police and reported her parents missing. Nothing was ever found out to what happened or where they where. Alease has always wondered what happened, over the years she thought about it less and less until now it lingers in the back of her mind but it does not bother her. Her brother hardly has any memory what so ever of them.
* They where put in the care of her Nan, soon after this though her Nan started to loose her memory to the point where she could not take care of herself never mind them, so from the age of about nine Alease took on the responsibility of caring for her brother and she has done everything she can to make sure he has had the best life she could give him.
* Alease gained a natural talent in playing the piano, something that seemed to calm down her brother, she got good, then she got amazing to the point her neighbours used to sit in the garden just to hear her play, word got around and soon she was playing on stage, it all set off from there and she got a good living from it, all her money went to her nan until she was 16 of cause, by 14 she had a well known name. Then one day she was offered a place at Barren Pines which she accepted. Even though soon after she regretted leaving her brother... ( Barren Pines ) * Alease was bullied by many people because of her height. Alease has always been the girl that everyone loved to make cry, ever since she was small she was always singled out to be abused and laughed at. She never quite understood why at all however she did not help herself. She has always been scared of confrontation with other people, especially those she sees every day so she let them do it. She was never a person to have many friends, the ones she did have she was not particularly close to besides one or two. She always found herself being lonely, she was never the kind of person to come out of her shell and talk to people, just blend into the wall. She found herself alone most of the time. To be honest she was not ever happy.
* She made some friends, the best of which was Melody, as time went on she met Melody in a music room. She shared her taste in classical music and also played a instrument, she sat and listened to Alease play, she was ever so nice to her. As time went on they got to know each other more and more. They even went into town dress shopping something Alease has never done with a friend before, she usually hates it however Mel made it fun. Mel also introduced her to Vietnamese food. Little things like this has made Alease form a strong bond with her.
* Her best friend was Grayson a boy who she had known since she was very small, his parents kept trying to persuade him to ask her out. She would not mind for so long Alease thought her was her soul mate, the one person she would always love and for some reason she thought he felt the same way about her. However one day Grayson got a boyfriend... and it broke her poor little heart. She would not tell him how much it hurt her and they remained great friends. After all as long as he is happy. So is she,.
* She had a strange dream that she ate a boy with pink hair! this might seem odd, one night Alease was in bed and she dreamt she was a zombie and she was hungry, she came across a boy she did not recognise and for whatever reason she ate him, this made her wake up in a cold sweat and run to the bathroom feeling sick. However she just shrugged and laughed it off. It was a silly dream, no point reading too much into it right?
* Alease wanted to learn how to swim so she went in the pool early so people would not laugh at her, Yvette joined her and seemed to have her own reasons for coming her when no one else was. However Alease did not question it, before long Yvette was teaching her how to swim. Then something happened, something was in the water and it attacked them, they seemed to be little silver fish, one that where like razors. They both made it out with just a few cuts, however it really freaked them both out!
* When she was in the cafe one day, she saw the boy from her dream, she was so freaked out she tried to avoid him at all costs, however her clumsy self fell straight bang in front of him. They got talking over time and she made a very strong friendship with him. After a while they both started to feel for each other in a different way however they where both too scared to tell each other. She had already had her heart broken once by a friend, she was scared it would happen again.
* Alease was kidnapped, she woke up in a room with three other people one of which was Frankie from science. They where forced to play 'I never' it was a drinking game. Alease lost the game, she did not drink as much as the others, be it out of fear of bad luck. She was the only one in the room scared the others where treating it like a joke. However it turned out the bottle was the antidote to a poison they had taken before hand. So Alease died that day. Never to return?
* Alease was then born again as a zombie, she hid until her hunger got the better of her. She went out and then got trapped. Who was to come across her but Sam? He told her how he felt about her, he had so much hope that it was still her that he even kissed her. However Alease snapped and bit into his neck. Sam then beat her body to the point it did not even resemble what she once was. Alease was dead for a second time.
* she came back? (I am not too sure but maybe all of the above is now forgotten o.o)
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Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 4:44 am
♥ .H.e.a.r.t. .S.t.r.i.n.g.s.♥
If the people we love are stolen from us, the way to have them live on is to never stop loving them. Buildings burn, people die, but real love is forever.
 Serendiputy & Benedict Harlotton - These are Alease and Voltaire's parents. They where nice people who one day disappeared, although she wishes to know what happens to them and also have them back in her life. She has moved on and knows that if she lets there disappearance control her life she would get know where fast.
Marintine Harlotton - Her mothers mother, the women who took them in after her parents disappearance. She now suffers from mental health problems and most of the time does not know what's going on, however she is a nice enough lady. Very friendly and kind.
Voltaire Harlotton - He is her little darling! Her parents disappeared when they where young so Alease took on the role of being his mother from a young age, she voles him to pieces and will do anything for him.
(these might be forgotten however its nice to give them credit!)
Grayson Graves - Gray has been Alease's best friend since she can remember, at one point she was madly in love with him however since he has a boyfriend now, she came to terms with the fact she will never be more than a friend to him. She remains close to him however and she hopes she always will... that is if he survives what has happened.
Samuel Smith - I guess you can say him and Alease have a thing going, when she was turned into a zombie he kissed her and she tried to eat him, then he ended her life for a second time. In life they where close and would have gone out if she had lived. Now she is back, will they? or would have his life changed to much for her to be apart of it again?
Melody Klein - Alease would probably count her as her best female friend. They met in the music hall and they both have a taste for the classical. She is very nice and she feels like she can open up to her. Melody even went out with Alease to buy a show dress. She is interesting, cute and fun!
Yvette Weaver - A nice girl who tried to teach her how to swim. However when they where in the pool one of Barren Pines famous (accidents) happened and they got attacked by swimming silver fish which where Sharpe like razor blades! however they both made it out alive, she would like to meet her again!
Frankie... and the two idiots. - These where the people she got stuck in her sudden death thread with, she knew Frankie from science, she had never met the other two before and it did not really register to her, she just knows she did not like them very much...
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Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 4:45 am
♥ .M.e.m.o.r.i.e.s.♥
I love the way that your heart breaks
with every injustice and deadly fate
Praying it all be new
and living like it all depends on you
Here you are down on your knees again
trying to find air to breathe again
Only surrender will help you now
I love you please see and believe again
I love that you’re never satisfied
with face value wisdom and happy lies
you take what they say and go back and cry
you’re so close to me that you nearly died
Here you are down on your knees again
trying to find air to breathe again
Only surrender will help you now
I love you please see and believe again
they don’t have to understand you
be still
wait and know I understand you
be still
be still
Here you are down on your knees again
trying to find air to breathe again
Only surrender will help you now
The floodgates are breaking
and pouring out
Here you are down on your knees
trying to find air to breathe
right where I want you to be again
i love you please see and believe again
Here you are down on your knees again
trying to find air to breathe again
Right where I want you to be again
See and believe!
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Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 4:47 am
♥ .O.t.h.e.r. .G.i.f.t.i.e.s. ♥ (reserved for Bunni's fan-fic!
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Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 4:48 am
♥ .C.r.i.t. ♥ Kotatsu-chan I'm not sure about this, but I believe the only students who will remember Barren Pines are the zodiacs. Kalindara mentioned something about Kirin not remembering, and I think I heard something about it applying to everyone? :< You might want to ask about that, like I said, I'm not a hundred percent sure. XD; Wow, what a note to start on, basically everything, well in a matter of fact, EVERYTHING, I wrote is discarded. So yeah, I have taken out how Barren Pines changed her. However I have left in on what happened to her in her past life! =D so I hope this is better! ~ Kaori_luv Okay so well, she is extremely clashy. Sorry, but it seems as though her flaws and virtues pull her in two different directions like alter egos. When you put her together it seems as though something has to be a farse or facade.
I love how unique she is and its obvious you put a lot of thought into her.
Piercing needs more explanation, going with her self image (which i guess could be a flaw itself), does she think it makes her look better, feel better about herself. Also it says she likes body art ... um tattoos, fashion (expand). Would she ever get a tattoo.
I love the fashion thing, especially since she is rich, the concept makes me squee. Like she's not making clothes for the hell of it or to be a famous fashion designed, but because she loves it and it cheaper.
Performing is nice, but it clashes with her flaws, and her virtues make her seem more like she would be in the a stage hand running back and forth helping change customs and being jealous of the beautiful talents actress. It needs some revision.
So both generous and trust her heart conflict with abundantly with her flaws. Generous, sort the way its worded make her seems out outgoing, very friendly and seems like she would have a lot of friends. Then you have her being jealous, overly sensitive, and a goth. I don't think the problem is her virtue, but rather the wording (if that makes since).
So next if she trust her heart, then why does she have a bad body image, overly sensitive and jealous. I'm having a hard time wrapping my brain around it. Again its probably the wording more the the virtue itself.
Sensitive come off as over emotional and dramatic, but it one virtue that makes me really believe she hasnt go to many friends. I mean if she cries at every little thing, yes she would be teased and avoided. Lol, no one wants to deal with that.
The victim flaw and generous, go well with her not having very many friends and her over personality. I think they will be great once generous is reworded.
Other:
Insomnia -- i like this and it doesnt help that she stays late in the music room
Meat thing -- weird, i like.
Side note: I want to know more about her little brother and her family life before her parents disappeared.Hope this helps and is what you were looking for. Syusaki I agree, I feel that her flaws and virtues really clash. To me it seems like her virtues are a facade and what she really feels are her flaws.
You also say Alease is pretty much a mother to her son, but Alease is only 16. Where're her parents? Do they not come often? Off working in another country and Alease is now the guardian of her brother (which I don't think is possible, considering her age)?
For her "trusts her heart" virtue, I think you should give some examples of this. What you have right now doesn't give me a very clear picture.
I also thought that when you said "body art" you were referring to tattoos, yet you elaborate on piercings? Just a connotation, I suppose. For her gift I think Alease should stick to just playing piano. To potentially have a great voice is pushing it, but that's a personal preference of mine.
Another thing: You have quite a bit of minor grammar errors/typos. I suggest either proofreading your writing or c/p it all into Word, or even both.
Overall I like her concept, very unique! Personally, I think characters with piercings are really cool. >3
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Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 4:49 am
♥ .N.o.t.e.s.♥ * Whilst Writting Alease's profile originally, I was listening to the song Beast in the Harlot, by Avenged Sevenfold. Which is how she got the name!
*When RPing her and Sam in Barren Pines, I had the song Burn by Cure on repeat. It is a song from The Crow Soundtrack, that is what inspired me to make Alease the Senshi of Crow's.
* Harlot is another word for prostitute, women in hell which pleasure the devil. To explain this is the shop, I decided to make it so Alease's ancestors where Satanists =D another odd fact, she has read the Satanic bible and it is the closest to religion she is ever going to get.
* Once Gray was doing his fire tricks, Alease tried and almost burnt her room down!
* Alease has a amazing amount of piercings. Each ear is done 7 times, her tongue is done and so is her belly button (soon her lip). She also claims she has a tattoo... you will have to find it yourself though! haha!
* If you see a crow flapping its wings, beware: A big accident is about to happen.
* You never want to see a crow facing your door, because that signals danger. And if a crow is sitting on top of a house with a red thread in its beak, call the fire department posthaste, because the flames aren't far behind.
* A romantic soul couldn't hope for anything better than seeing a crow, because it means the heart's wishes will be fulfilled. The only tricky part is that the bird has to be flying from the southwest at sunset. The same bird coming from the same direction at noon means your enemy is coming, not your lover. Other directions and different hours change the message, but the ebony messenger remains the same.
* Crows have long been associated with death in many cultures, because they often could be found feeding on animal and human remains at battlefields or cemeteries.
* And while such birds as swallows and storks are welcomed as signs of spring or childbirth, a gathering of crows is sometimes called a "murder," stemming from yet another myth that says crows will sit in judgment of their own and then kill them.
* Apollo was a Greek god known for venting his anger on any number of mortals. According to Greek mythology, the raven was originally a beautiful, silver-white bird, until it had the misfortune to tell Apollo that his human lover, Coronis, had rejected him for a mere man. Apollo turned the bird's feathers black.
* Many American Indian tribes saw the crow as a wise adviser and the spirit of wisdom and the law.
* "If men had wings and bore black feathers, few of them would be clever enough to be crows."
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Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 4:58 am
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Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 5:00 am
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Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 5:01 am
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Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 5:02 am
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Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 5:03 am
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Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 5:04 am
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