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Frezir

Kawaii Wolf

PostPosted: Mon Dec 07, 2009 8:33 pm


u/c
PostPosted: Mon Dec 07, 2009 9:26 pm


Fel Essence
Quote:

Silent Thunder:

adding...


Quote:
Web of lies:

adding...

Frezir

Kawaii Wolf


Frezir

Kawaii Wolf

PostPosted: Mon Dec 07, 2009 10:02 pm


soul
Quote:


White Wolf:




Quote:
Black fox:


PostPosted: Tue Dec 08, 2009 10:42 am


Raevan

Fel Essence:
soul:
Name:
Gender:
alignment:
Personality:

Abilities:
Food source:


Frezir

Kawaii Wolf


Frezir

Kawaii Wolf

PostPosted: Tue Dec 08, 2009 10:45 am


NAME : Lilith Bloodfire
GENDER : Female
AGE : 21
OCCUPATION : Part time DJ at the Hot Spot
RACE : demon
LIKES : Dark colors, sushi, raves, loud music, and hot guys
DISLIKES : Most bright colors, squid, country music, and girly-girls
LOOKS : Lilith is 5'2" with pure snow white hair, cut to the scene look, that shown brightly against her tan completion. Her crimson red eyes stand out behind her black framed glasses and purple eye shadow. Large DJ headphones hung around her neck, connected to a raver pink Zune. She sports a black tux shirt with red, green, and yellow plaid pants with a black studded belt around the waist. Her footwear is the standard black and white converse.
PERSONALITY : Lilith can have her moments of being a blond or kind. But mostly she is a flirt or devious. She don't really warm up to strangers unless they catch her gaze.

HISTORY : Lilith was an orphan since she could remember. She lived in a foster family for close to 8 years. She was different from her foster siblings. They all thought of her as a freak of nature. She was adopted at the age of 8. She had a loving mother and father who cared for her. She grew up in a fine young demon and began to take an interest in the nightlife at the age of 15. She loved to go to parties and stay out late. She thought of this as a future career. She explain what she wanted to do after she graduated high school. Her parents thought of it odd, but still supported her. She graduated with straight B's her senior year. Her parents were proud of her. She was able to start her own life after becoming a DJ at the Hot Spot.
PostPosted: Tue Dec 08, 2009 10:47 am


Past ideas
Fel essence 01:
Quote:


Reversed Dream Catcher:

"Bad dreams pass through the center hole to the sleeping person. The good dreams are trapped in the web, where they perish in the light of dawn." It seems that this traditional dream catcher had a total opposite purpose than what is was made to be. Instead of ensnaring bad dreams, good dreams find itself stuck on the web. Bad dreams pass through the catcher, causing it's owner to toss and turn all night. Instead of being made with Sinew, it's creator made it out of willow and spider silk. Silk would last longer than sinew, but would stay in it's wed-like form forever. Some believe that a shaman from long ago had curse it to ensnare people dreams instead of their nightmares.

Frezir

Kawaii Wolf


Frezir

Kawaii Wolf

PostPosted: Tue Dec 08, 2009 10:48 am


Funds
PostPosted: Tue Dec 08, 2009 10:50 am


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Frezir

Kawaii Wolf


Frezir

Kawaii Wolf

PostPosted: Tue Dec 08, 2009 6:49 pm


Critics please? heart
PostPosted: Wed Dec 09, 2009 6:55 pm


You definitely need a new name for the essence. Perhaps something more along the lines of Reversed Dream Catcher? It'll help people get what your essence is about right off the bat while in your description you can go into more detail, obviously explaining the fact that it is made naturally from a spider's web.

And I would highly recommend going for a different soul since a spider would be a bit cliche what with the whole web thing already. It really makes the whole concept sort of bland which is the opposite effect you are going for. Don't think so much about what would go well together, but what would look totally awesome together instead. The most interesting combinations are the ones that clash. Like Prajna or Vyn.

Also, don't get stuck on one idea for the time being. Be open to developing new ideas and working them until they're just right. You'll find the perfect combination for yourself in due time. Promise.

Ebony Shade

Romantic Seeker


Frezir

Kawaii Wolf

PostPosted: Wed Dec 09, 2009 8:16 pm


*nods* I see. A different would be better and some options would help. I'll keep on thinking of some fel essences.
PostPosted: Wed Dec 09, 2009 9:00 pm


changed fel essence idea
will add probably 1 or 2 more soon

Frezir

Kawaii Wolf


Snoofington

Merry Krampus

PostPosted: Thu Dec 10, 2009 8:56 am


Frezir
Reversed Dream Catcher:


A dream catcher, by definition, is a man made object and so it already loses it's ability to be a Fel Essence.

Quote:
"Bad dreams pass through the center hole to the sleeping person. The good dreams are trapped in the web, where they perish in the light of dawn." It seems that this traditional dream catcher had a total opposite purpose than what is was made to be.


You're on the right track here as far as half of what makes an Essence, it being something that it shouldn't be, whether it be opposite or an ability it has never shown in nature or reality, but that is only half of what comprises an Essence.

Quote:
Instead of ensnaring bad dreams, good dreams find itself stuck on the web. Bad dreams pass through the catcher, causing it's owner to toss and turn all night. Instead of being made with Sinew, it's creator made it out of willow and spider silk.


Again, it's lost it's place as an Essence because it was made, created. If you've taken a look at the existing Essences, then you can see that ALL of them are things in nature; fire, blood, shadows, etc. Not one thing is man made in the Essence department.

Quote:
Silk would last longer than sinew, but would stay in it's wed-like form forever. Some believe that a shaman from long ago had curse it to ensnare people dreams instead of their nightmares.


By having the shaman curse the dream catcher, it also renders the dream catcher useless, so now it is twice dysfunctional as an Essence. An Essence is not just something in nature that is reversed or acting backwards, it is something that is doing that because it was tainted by The Storm.

It's very apparent that the front page hasn't been read and none of the current Raevans have even remotely been looked at before you've under taken this quest, so please do that before doing anything else. Be sure not to tread on anyone else's Essence and also their souls, repeating isn't allowed and this is twice now you've done something dream related when dreams AND nightmares are both involved with the Raevan Nue--they're taken.

I also agree with Ebony about the spider soul being cliche.
PostPosted: Thu Dec 10, 2009 7:20 pm


Okay first off, the catcher was just a name for it. It qualified for an essence because it was not man made but created naturally. Given it was created by a spider, but that's nature. I don't see webbing magically coming of its own without something spinning it first.

Second, there are so many Raevans and questers now that overlapping is going to occur. We already see it with the current Raevans, just look at all the bird souls and all the fire or ice related essences. The trick for newcomers is for them to make theirs different from what already is.

You obviously can't take the soul of an already existing Raevan, but you can have a soul that is similar. Honestly for how I see it with questing, after current taken Raevan souls, anything is fair game now. Let the best quester get to the coveted soul first. Reminder this is only my opinion and Kyou might have her own, so it's always best to ask her or another staff member if you have any major questions.

Fel Essences are harder, but there are similar ones already. A very good example is the Eternal Flames and Inverted Flame. Both are flames/fire essences, but do completely different things. You can't say she can't have a concept for a dream or nightmare essence merely because one Raevan once upon a time had one. The only person who can truly say that is Kyou.

Last I saw, there wasn't a rule about it, simply that others have wanted to respect the ideas of others by not treading on souls/essence ideas that were being used in already active quests. So frankly, I think she has the right to at least try and put her ideas down without them being shot down point blank like that hon. It isn't fair. Give her constructive crit and allow her the time to develop her ideas more.

Ebony Shade

Romantic Seeker


Frezir

Kawaii Wolf

PostPosted: Thu Dec 10, 2009 7:31 pm


Thanks Ebony <3
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