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PostPosted: Thu Dec 03, 2009 4:40 am


Clan Name: Garimasu
Village: Extinct in Kusa. Now been passed onto Oto.
Element Affinity: Earth, Lightning
Description of Limit: Doujutsu: Naishygan.
The ability to see the emotions and true intentions of others through emotional aura of chakra. So that means it is possible to predict what others are basically thinking and able to counter it. Naishygan is similar to mind reading, except its of the aura. So they "read" the aura's brightness, shape, speed of flow, texture, etc... Example: if the aura is like fire, or not bright, it is negative even if the color is different.
So they know when one has bloodlust or sensual lust. XD

Of course there is 2 sub types that need to be activated just by saying the name or, if skilled enough, activate by just blinking:

Jousho Naishygan (Emotional Auras):

Dark Red: Flaired up (Rage), Swirly and poofy(Passion)
Red-Pink: dull(friendly), misty and light(calm), darker and shiny-ish(love)
Yellow: thickly centered, fading outwards(happy), lumpy, clumped, lopsided but shifting(creative)
Orange: Mix results of passion with happy and creative
Blue: Light( cool/calm) Dark(cold/fierce) Lighter color are also misty, while darkers seem more solid. Grey-blue(sadness), the more grey the more depressed
Green: Dark green, cracked and glowing in some palces (envy), light green, smooth (feeling rich and powerful).
Purple: solid, shining, dark(courage/determination), dull, solid, dark(stubborness), light, misty, shiny(childish)
Brown: Mosty seen in animals. If light, dull, and misty(dull/bored)
Grey: Dull, fading fro mk inside out(dead inside/feels nothing), dark, ebs and flairs(fear)
Black: dull, cloudy, dark(ominous evil), shining, smokey, flowing, dark and light (joyous evil), solid, dark(lawfully evil)
White: misty, thick, shiny(innocence), puffy, dull(naiive), smooth, spiraling around body(good natured)

Reikiomo Naishygan (Main Aura):

There is also a "base" color aura that everyone has, but there is to many tones of colors to explain. Basically the same as the emotional aura, except because this is the "base color" then that means there whole life will mainly be that emotion.
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Can cause comas if used to frequently for long periods of time. Also, when the person died, the curse seal activates and burns the body from the inside out. If eyes are taken, eyes will cause a curse mark to appear in the exact same place as the clan members. No one can escape the doom.

User ImageCurse Mark.
User ImageActive Naishygan.

History: About 700-900 years ago, the exact time is uncertain, a man placed a cursed mark upon another. This man then disappeared and his name was never mentioned, and the one with the curse forgot his face. But this curse was also a blessing. He could see what others truly intended to do. Be it murder, to just wanting to relax. He wrote down what each color meant, But the major details were lost in a fire, so only the basic knowledge is now known to his descendants. Of course, new facts and jutsus were found over time, that the ancestors did not find.
Of course, they learned that they could also used jutsu that was unique to them. The most powerful is also the most deadly. It is a forbidden technique named Soul Bind which was founded by the first of the Garimasu clan. Because it was forbidden to be used, it was only known to elders of the clan on how to use it. It literally took the soul from the victim of this jutsu and sealed it into an object. But those that use this technique, either die or became insane and are locked away.
Now, during a recent war, the clan was almost wiped out at Kusagakure. But a few survived, and were taken to Otogakure, where they will be the future of the clan. It has only been a few years since they arrived, and they have learned a terrible truth, the curse mark was a means of control. There for one of the woman gave birth to a child without the mark on his back. Both parents were Garimasu, yet the mark was gone. So the truth had been twisted, but they had to wait to see if the Naishygan was now lost forever. They were puzzled as to how the mark got on all of them without anyone noticing. But what they didn't know, the first to receive the Mark was actually the true caster. He was an immortal, due to the Soul Bind technique and he destroyed the first and original Garimasu clan that was far more powerful then what it is now. He was secretly living in the village the whole time, making sure he cursed all the children while they were in the womb. But because he thought the clan was now destroyed, he had left Kusagakure not knowing that some survived and fled to Otogakure.

In game Stats:
+ 2 Chakra every 3 levels
+ 5 Intelligence every 5 levels
- 3 Charisma every 5 levels

When Naishygan is activated, add +2 to all Reflex Rolls

Jutsu List:

Jutsu Name: Forbidden Technique: Soul Bind.
Description of Jutsu: To take the soul of a person and bind it into themselves, giving them life force. From beginning to the end of this technique, the souls are as if they were one in the same. But, it does not kill the victim's body, it just makes them into a vegetable. Soul can be given back. Of course, there is some side effects, the user of this technique also absorbs the life time of that person. Meaning this move can cause immortality. Hence why it is forbidden to use it.
Rank: S
Cp Cost: 1050
Damage: Immediate incap to user if done wrong/interrupted, -600 to the victim if successful.
Requirements: 190 Ninjutsu, 150 Fuuinjutsu, 200 Chakra Control, Member of Garimasu Clan, Naishygan activated.
Skill - 190
Training: 30 days.
Special: Must roll 1d20. If an Even number is rolled, the jutsu is successfull, if it's an Odd number, the jutsu fails.
Owner: Garimasu Clan

Jutsu Name: Shuyaden
Description of Jutsu: A bow and arrow made of electricity, when fired, it is inaccurate, but no matter where it hits, it can cause great damage. Sends a electric current through the body and depending where it hits, causing paralysis.
Rank: A
Cp Cost: 80
Damage: 90-180. 13% Chance of Paralysis.
Requirements: Ninjutsu 50, Chakra Control 60, Lightning Affinity
Skill - 75
Training: 9 days.
Special: 1d20. Higher the dice roll, the more damage it does.
Owner: Garimasu Clan

Clan Owner: Qyp

[EDIT: Er, I think its right now? If theres anything else... state so please? Also my msn is crazyfrog_vs_bones@hotmail.com]
PostPosted: Thu Dec 03, 2009 9:34 am


I, personally, have no issues with Dojutsu, but if you want this to even have a smidgeon of a chance at success; remove:

But, it has similar effects to Mangekyō Sharingan, except for the sealing/blindness.

If not, it will be denied. I'd also like how you are able to see intentions. I get the emotions, some being quite strange such as the wanting to be friends... but my point is this:

Let's say I'm EXTREMELY Calm, as in periwinkle blue. My intention, is to murder your Kage. How will you be able to decipher my intention through extreme calm?

History: Make one. It may be unknown to the clan, which is fine, but that doesn't mean there isn't one to be had.

When we have a good history, I'll be able to help with the stats, especially since you are seeing Aura... something Wahotts is already capable of doing. However, since he is an Arctic Ice Wolf, it won't count towards the clan. whee

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PostPosted: Thu Dec 03, 2009 3:28 pm


Rachel Genova
I, personally, have no issues with Dojutsu, but if you want this to even have a smidgeon of a chance at success; remove:

But, it has similar effects to Mangekyō Sharingan, except for the sealing/blindness.

If not, it will be denied. I'd also like how you are able to see intentions. I get the emotions, some being quite strange such as the wanting to be friends... but my point is this:

Let's say I'm EXTREMELY Calm, as in periwinkle blue. My intention, is to murder your Kage. How will you be able to decipher my intention through extreme calm?

History: Make one. It may be unknown to the clan, which is fine, but that doesn't mean there isn't one to be had.

When we have a good history, I'll be able to help with the stats, especially since you are seeing Aura... something Wahotts is already capable of doing. However, since he is an Arctic Ice Wolf, it won't count towards the clan. whee

I meant the fatigue side of... M. Sharingan.

Oh and I see the TRUE intentions. It doesn't matter how calm you will reveal yourself somehow. Like I said, colors can mix up, so there could be flickers of blood red, which if course is blood lust, which is a type of "rage" as I have decided to call it. Think if it as mind reading, of the chakra. Of course, if the person with Naishygan isn't actually concentrating, it could be missed. But once they see that flicker, they see it all come out.

And okay, history.
PostPosted: Thu Dec 03, 2009 3:40 pm


Honestly, it seems like a perfectly plausible doujutsu. Some people try to make doujutsu that just isn't.... Needed.

Cool eyes are not a requirement for a good clan.

I like this idea. I might want to start a character with it.. Depending on your acceptance requirements that is.

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PostPosted: Thu Dec 03, 2009 3:47 pm


^^ Coolz. There is only like, 5 survivers of Kusa.

I didn't want it to be to common right now.
PostPosted: Thu Dec 03, 2009 5:47 pm


Added history and SOME jutsu.

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Hiro Knight Kansei

PostPosted: Thu Dec 03, 2009 6:03 pm


Qyp
^^ Coolz. There is only like, 5 survivers of Kusa.

I didn't want it to be to common right now.


No problem. I guess I can always go with my original plan for the character. xD

And you might want to add more to your jutsu. Like damage and cost and what not. You do know where to find the template, right?
PostPosted: Thu Dec 03, 2009 7:03 pm


Hiro Knight-Ieviathan
Qyp
^^ Coolz. There is only like, 5 survivers of Kusa.

I didn't want it to be to common right now.


No problem. I guess I can always go with my original plan for the character. xD

And you might want to add more to your jutsu. Like damage and cost and what not. You do know where to find the template, right?

Er... no? sweatdrop Still learning...

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Hiro Knight Kansei

PostPosted: Thu Dec 03, 2009 9:06 pm


Qyp
Hiro Knight-Ieviathan
Qyp
^^ Coolz. There is only like, 5 survivers of Kusa.

I didn't want it to be to common right now.


No problem. I guess I can always go with my original plan for the character. xD

And you might want to add more to your jutsu. Like damage and cost and what not. You do know where to find the template, right?

Er... no? sweatdrop Still learning...

Totally cool. It takes a bit to learn the system, but once you do, you'll find it makes RP much more fun.
PostPosted: Thu Dec 03, 2009 9:11 pm


My comments in bold. I chose this jutsu as an example. I wanted to show you some things you should change. My comments apply to your other jutsu, also.

Quote:
Jutsu Name: Earth Release: Iron Maiden
Description of Jutsu: A iron maiden literally comes out of the ground behind the victim, chains launch out and wrap around them and take them inside. the doors shut and hundreds of spikes go into them. The maiden then goes back into the ground taking the dead body. No jutsu can automatically kill someone, but it can do a lot of damage.
Rank: High ranked Chuunin, Jounin or Kage. The rank refers to the power of the jutsu. An E rank jutsu is something you are taught in the academy, while an S rank jutsu is something that takes a long time to learn and does powerful things.
Cp Cost: (Chakra?) Yes. How much chakra does this jutsu cost?
Damage: If done wrong, causes instant death to both caster and victim. Other than that, no damage. You might want to be more specific.. Like I said, no insta-death (Although there are some jutsu in this guild that do ridiculous amounts of damage, and are pretty much 1-shot KOs.)
Requirements: Garimasu Clan's Curse Seal and large amount of Chakra. This is where you can list the technical and RP requirements. This seems okay, but requirements usually list the stat you need to use the jutsu.
Training: 5 years. Tee hee! 10 posts= 1 day of training. An E rank jutsu will usually take about 2 days to learn, while and S rank jutsu will take 10.
Special:
Owner: Garimasu Clan


Also, I will probably send you a couple links in a PM that you should read.

You have read the entirety of the game system forum, correct?

And lastly, do you happen to have an MSN account? AIM? Any IM? I could help you out with everything, but PMing is awfully slow. biggrin

Hiro Knight Kansei


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PostPosted: Fri Dec 04, 2009 4:19 am


Okay, done what I THINK is right XD


Anyways, if you want to be the clan leader, which is a 30-something year old who rescued the 5-8 clan members from the destruction, go ahead. Hes actually one of the few younger ones with the Soul Bind technique too. Oh, I should tell you, hes an accomplice in the killing of his clan. Yeah Itachi moment. BUT, he regrets it about halfway through and rescues just some close by young clan members and runs to Oto. Yeah, but my character is a kid wondering on the outskirts that he picked up.


Anyways, any suggestions that could make it any more original? Oh and another jutsu maybe?
PostPosted: Sat Dec 05, 2009 5:35 am


Oh and, Garimasu and Naishygan are composed of actual Japenese words. Just that, I forgot which ones I actually used now...

Star, Eye, Eagle, Illusion, and I do not know what else... But you get the idea...

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PostPosted: Mon Dec 07, 2009 4:08 am


Er... an idea bubble just popped...

So, Earth and Lightning... um, anyone want a Metal (or magnet) Release? I mean, Iron Maiden would make more sense then...
PostPosted: Tue Dec 08, 2009 1:55 pm


stare For future reference... the Edit button, is so you don't post 3 times in a row.

From the bottom up: No Magnet OR Metal releases. We've decided to ban the Iron Sand clan and relations to it... OR... I need to check the Master Bloodline list to make sure I'm not shoving my foot in my mouth. XP

You still haven't explained to me how you see our true intention.
So let's say again, that I'm Periwinkle blue, and there's a hint of red in there. How will you know I'm there to kill your Kage?

I know I'm not the only one that hates Curse Seals... especially since there are always counter-jutsu to seals. ALWAYS. The Exception to this rule is the Reaper Death Seal jutsu in which he kills your opponent AND yourself. So in a way, it's a counter to itself.

How can "Weak Minded people be controlled if the user is of a high level Jounin"? Define "Weak Minded". If this is supposed to be a jutsu, make it so. razz

Please, give us a better history. Take a look at some of the other clans if you need help with a history. I just want to know exactly how you've come about. You only explain that you had a Soul Bind technique on a single person. Curses don't pass on through blood as Inuyasha would have you believe. If Naruto had a child, the child wouldn't ALSO have the Nine-Tails sealed within him. I want to know about this Color/Aura/Intention thing.

Soul Bind
Cp Cost- Make it about 800 higher. You state it's a Forbidden Jutsu, so make it so. razz
Damage: Immediate incap to user if done wrong/interrupted, -600 to the victim if successfull
Requirements: 190 Ninjutsu, 150 Fuuinjutsu, 200 Chakra Control Member of Garimasu Clan, Naishygan active
Training: 30 Days
Special: Must roll 1d20. If an Even number is rolled, the jutsu is successfull, if it's an Odd number, the jutsu fails.

Earth Release: Iron Maiden
I'm thinking No... just on the principal that if you were locked in an Iron Maiden, the moment the doors open, the blood would rush from your body and you would be dead.

Shuyaden: It can't penetrate Flesh and Bone if it's made of electricity. The electrical currents wouldn't allow it to penetrate bone. At best, it would be as if you got a nasty static shock, only with alot more volts.
Rank: A
Cp Cost: 80
Damage = Fine
Requirements: Loose the Hand Seals. wink Ninjutsu 50, Chakra Control 60, Lightning Affinity

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PostPosted: Tue Dec 08, 2009 5:17 pm


I remember a clan like this comming up in here a while ago. A while, meaning over a year or so ago. It was auto-denied for this little thing and the person wasn't able to try it again or edit or anything. (I think this was probably over two years ago, actually.... this was when Ivory, Lulu, and all of them were still around)

I personally like the doujutsu. ^_^ Though listen to Rachel
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