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well i like the overall conclusion .. even tough i needed to read it twice before i got it xD. It was kinda hard to understand that last part of switch back to the start of the story. Seeing the beast eat another planet with like small text bubbles with "help", "ahh the rapture", etc might have been beter to make the link.

also its kinda annoying you stopped doing basic colors (the gray stuff) after like 2 pages. you dont use alot of diffrent line thickness so its really hard to see what is what. even tough you did try to outline the foreground objects a little thicker, it barely helps.

Also when doing tekst either sketch it out first or just type it on the computer ... because some words are really stuffed into those boxes making them hard to read.

Its also really noticable that you only use sqaure or rectangle panal boxes. next time you could experiment with the shape of the panel box to enhance the feeling of perspective or movement of an object.

other than that it was alright smile

also not sure if you ever read "Understanding comics", but it's a comic book about making comics, its really good. You might get some new insights about making comics out of there

torrent is here: http://isohunt.com/torrent_details/131499265/understanding+comics?tab=summary

anyways thats my 60 cents

I like the story. It's short, cute, and fun.

if you have a choking deadline, I don't know how much some crits is going to help you out. I agree with goshu on the line quality/word.

making comics- by the same author is a bit more comprehensive, both books are well suited to your cause. I rented a copy from the library and it's on auto renew until I die. smile

I love how your style is evolving quicker than usual! Goshujin practically covered everything I spotted!


If you go to http://www.dafont.com you can download loads of fonts all for free.

If you don't know how to install em, google is your best friend :3

All I can say is work on your linework and paneling. You had some dynamic parts which was good, but you could've made it more mint with some neat linework. The story was well executed, but somewhat of a prequel of how the two man people met and how the situation came to occur and what made everyone realize the world would cease. To make a more emotional impact in the last few panels of the first page you might want to flesh it out here and there on what caused that emotional moment.

Since you plan to start it off as a web comic, you'll only get better. Just don't bale on like I did most of my re re comics, lmao. Once you end something in a full manner you will feel alot better with your self, lmao.

i left what i thought on your deviant page 8 comment section egg