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 Posted: Wed Nov 11, 2009 1:14 pm
This is the first paragraph in a book I am writing
Sid looked out of the window. Below her tall bedroom was the statue of an ancestor. Seeing this made her wonder, why did everything change, why can’t anyone be heroic anymore? She touched her bracelet. Twirling the frayed edges she sighed. She knew the reason. Freedom was a scary thing. That’s why her parents died. That’s why no one in her family is left.
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Posted: Wed Nov 11, 2009 1:16 pm
XxPiRaTe_PaNdaZxX This is the first paragraph in a book I am writing Sid looked out of the window. Below her tall bedroom was the statue of an ancestor. Seeing this made her wonder, why did everything change, why can’t anyone be heroic anymore? She touched her bracelet. Twirling the frayed edges she sighed. She knew the reason. Freedom was a scary thing. That’s why her parents died. That’s why no one in her family is left. sounds interesting
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Posted: Wed Nov 11, 2009 1:19 pm
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Posted: Wed Nov 11, 2009 1:23 pm
XxPiRaTe_PaNdaZxX This is the first paragraph in a book I am writing Sid looked out of the window. Below her tall bedroom was the statue of an ancestor. Seeing this made her wonder, why did everything change, why can’t anyone be heroic anymore? She touched her bracelet. Twirling the frayed edges she sighed. She knew the reason. Freedom was a scary thing. That’s why her parents died. That’s why no one in her family is left. Very nice. The paragraph arouses the reader's curiosity very well.
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Posted: Wed Nov 11, 2009 1:30 pm
Thanks everyone, I am actually on the 10th page of this story, but I consider the first paragraph to be one of the most important. With a bad first paragraph, you will already be bored by the second page.
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