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Not a single mention of Ikari in the history. wink Important enough to risk infiltrating a den of pure evil, not important enough to mention. XD Course I find it odd that her adversion to touch isn't mentioned anywhere either.

Super Cereal Time. /algore

Finger Torch: Considering examples that they gave that sounds almost too weak even to be a Genin Jutsu as generally talking about the worst someone's going to get from that is a first degree burn. If that. But it does have a lot of utility. Still, I swear they listed a Genin Jutsu example with someone making thier whole fist wrapped in flames. So you could go higher I imagine.

Simple Conversion: Would expect considering it's Genin Level there'd be a time limit upon it, or maybe a notation about taking a constant flow of chakra to maintain it (Thus lasting longer as you get stronger but less time at the start). Considering the nature of it I'd also have a notation that it can't be used on an unwilling target. I know in part such a thing would be used to and manipulate your own body. (Like hallowing out some of your body to make you lighter and sprout wings) But has serious applications of "I just changed the shape of your nervous system so nothing links up to the brainstem. Die in paralytic agony!"

Advanced Conversion: Pretty much copy what I said above.

Razor Whip: How would it stand up against a hardened target? For example, Jinco in his Gears, or that jackass I faced in the exams with the instantly regenerating wood armor thing? One coudl take the "lack of sturdiness" meaning that it wouldn't bite in and have no penetration power. Just saying. I'd like that sort of notation, there are a few ninja with armor like Jinco, or the usual flak jackets.

Tail hold: I'd say this almost doesn't even sound like it should be listed. That'd be like me having to list a Hip Throw as a technique for Ikari. Yeah, it's a tail and thus unusual but since it's part of her natural body and just a simple grab/lock/hold why should it take up a Jutsu spot? I'd say if you were going to have a tail move that takes up a slot it should be at least as impressive as something like a Deflect Arrows type ability, where while engaging another target you are able to keep your tail free and able to knock aside shuriken and the like as I imagine that sort of awareness, focus, and technique would be quite special.

Kekkei Genkai: I understand there's racial stuff here. Though I dislike the sixth sense. Experience as a GM and a Villainous player tells me such a power will always be used to instantly negate any cleaverly set trap or ambush. I'd like to see what "LIteral Copy" actually means. If you somehow can rip off people's learned techniques because of it... I can understand getting bloodline powers though. Though not derived techniques from that bloodline. Also wanna know how she acquires DNA. Just touches someone? Eats thier hair folicle?


Also you have mentions of the Devil Side but no clue given as to what the Devil Side actually means.

I'll put it simply: Both the Alchemic techniques and the Kekkei Genkai are entirely overpowered and unacceptable, even considering your character's specie.

In the case of the Kekkei Genkai: The mimic ability is perfectly fine, but the Sixth Sense, as well as having two Kekkei Genkai period, is overdone.

Alchemy: The large variety possible in the ability as well as the lack of any cost outside of chakra for such an intense ability (this is overpowered in comparison to Elemental Ninjutsu, moving through the earth, Summoning Jutsu, or even moderate Genjutsu. And it's Genin and/or Chuunin Rank?!)

Mind, this is the opinion of one mod and I'd like more than one opinion from another mod to either agree or disagree, and provide, if disagreeing, logic that proves that these abilities aren't overdoing it.

Yeah, I figured =/ Truth be told, I don't really know what to do with her. I think for now I'll just scrap this profile and use the old one until she changes, and then I might make the new one. Will have to talk to someone about rank, though.

Super Cereal Time again:

Just making sure this is a two step process. With your Weapon Conversions does it work like "Advanced turns her right fist into a mass of steel. Then later she uses the Simple to turn that steel into an axe head." or does that presumably happen all during the first jutsu?

Also I'd like to see on the Simple Weapon Conversion something that requires touch to the target material. Otherwise you could do something like change the shape of a shuriken in your enemies hand into something that will stab them before they throw it, have blades that bend backwards to strike thier weilders, armors that choke out those that are donning them. Not cool.

I still see no reason why Tail Hold should be a "jutsu" really. I always had the feeling it had to be something more extraordinary. Like Ikari's Blade Catch which is a step beyond what someone could normally do, or something like Neji's Chakra Network attacks, or that wierd sword move that guy tried to do on Baki during the lull between exams that just got owned (What was it, Moon something or other... I barely remember it).

I still want to know how she gets some target's DNA. I mean what are you talking about, just touching someone and bam, you can thus get all thier abilities and the ilk? Drinking thier blood? What?


Weapons: Funny based on what you said in the OOC recently. But while YOU may not know if its true. And YOU may not know the triggers to do so. WE as Mods and GMs SHOULD know it. And we should have an idea just what Ikihana might have to accomplish to actually learn this. I'd expect something at least halfway involving, probably it's own medium length plot. As such I also would like to know just how it "heals" and how it "poisons" as there's a lot of different things such vague, general terms coudl invoke.

Except it's Naruto so having someone's DNA means having thier bloodline trait. Something I wouldn't want to allow on the off chance you get to collect various character's bloodlines. Especially the ungodly powerful ones I've seen floating around including the Sharingan for one, that Lightning Eye one, etc. I'd want something to say you couldn't have bloodline traits absorbed. But since those traits are specifically mentioned as being tied into DNA having you copy DNA doesn't leave much wiggle room to explain why you can't have them. And I think you can see why it would not be kosher to have one character have multiple bloodline traits on demand. Especially the more powerful ones.

I'll also say I don't like the current trigger you have. Reason why: Because it's an ace up the sleeve. It's based off "When I remember something obscure" and experience shows such things tend to happen "Exactly when I need it to turn a guaranteed loss into an easy win". If it was based on something you had to actively seek out, or contact someone else to find it eliminates it basically becoming that ace up the sleeve.

It's one of the reasons why on Ikari's bloodline, before it got killed off, I had mentioned "Will never be discovered in the heat of combat" in every version of the profile I had to list. Didn't make sense that he'd magically learn how to use it while he's got more pressing things on him mind, like a kunai to the face. Same for remembering some obscure terms in a language you don't normally speak. Might be something you remember when reading a book, watching a movie, whatever but not likely when you've got your life on the line.

Added in the "on touch" bit to Simple Conversion, and put in the specifics of the daggers' natures. Still need to figure out the chant bit. I think with Chameleon it was a silent prayer. Anyway, I'll figure that out. :/