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Posted: Tue Oct 20, 2009 7:26 pm

Ikazuchi Kitsune

Age
19

Height
5'11"

Weight
157 lbs

Eye Color
Blue

Hair Color
Blond

Village
Formerly Konoha, Resident of Getsugakure, Currently Training in Otogakure

Clan
Ikazuchi: Founded by the namesake servant of the Hyuuga Clan of Konoha. Legend decrees that the first Ikazuchi made a bargain with the God of Lightning to obtain a doujutsu more powerful than the Byakugan. Kitsune is the 5th generation of Ikazuchis, and probably the last.

Village Rank
Chuunin

Other Titles
None

Appearance Description
Kitsune is slightly lanky, not particularly strong or agile, but fast on his feet. His hair is a particularly light sheen of blond, just dark enough to be called golden, his eyes the brilliant blue of lightning. He typically wears his hitae-ate bandanna style or as a regular headband, a mesh or black tank top under his chuunin vest, and blue or black training pants. He has recently taken to going barefoot to maximize his raijutsu potential. He is not strikingly handsome, but has a sort of boyish charm.

Personality
For the most part, Kitsune is, ironically, an optimist with low self esteem. He doesn't think too highly of himself, but he gives things his all and tries to move on with his life however he can, even if it means sacrificing things valuable to him. On the surface he's lackadaisical and goofy, but when alone he harbors a deep desire for revenge, a lust that he refuses to confront whenever possible.

History
Kitsune is the youngest son of the great Ikazuchi Warrior Sendai, the man singlehandedly responsible for the survival of the clan Ikazuchi. Kitsune's mother was not a ninja, but an arranged marriage, a princess from Gaia. His mother doted on him, favored him, and his father scorned him, for although he manifested his kekkei genkai at the age of four, it was the Blue-Eyed Raiyakugan, which could never attain the powers Sendai wished to cultivate in a son. Even when Kitsune's older brother, Hachi, failed to attain the Raiyakugan at all and abandoned what was left of their clan, Sendai refused to train Kitsune because of his blue eyes and his "overall weakness."
So Kitsune went to Konoha to train, passing the genin exam easily but failing to even pass the preliminaries in his first Chuunin exam. By this time the well-known Yukiyama landslide had destroyed his home and presumably killed the few surviving members of the clan Ikazuchi, leaving him the sole heir to a moderately large fortune.
Nouveax Riche, Kitsune decided to seek out his brother Hachi and rekindle their lost brotherhood. He found Hachi in Getsugakure, in command of an obscure Black Ops Group known as Project Untouchable. The research they performed was considered illegal by many within the 5 villages, and when the Second Tsukikage of Getsu, Harikun Roshingi, died, he ordered the facility and all of its contents destroyed in his will.
He also made Hachi the Third Tsukikage.
By now, Kitsune had failed a grand total of two Chuunin exams, and his 3rd didn't look so well. Luckily, he was given a perfect match of teammates for his first round and was victorious in his second by what could be called, a fluke. He passed on the condition that he immediately enter training with the instructor of his brother's choosing.
Unfortunately for Kitsune, that instructor happens to be Orochimaru of the Sannin.

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Primary Element
Lightning

Secondary Element
none

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Jutsu and Skills

Stats
Ninjutsu: 4/9
Genjutsu: 2/9
Taijutsu: 3/9

Total Jutsu Learned/Learnable
Genin Justu-2/5:: Chuunin Jutsu-2/2:: Jounin Jutsu-0/1:: Kage Justsu-0/0::

Ninjutsu

Name of Jutsu: Denki no Jutsu (Battery Technique)
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Rank of Jutsu: Genin
Description: User can give an electric charge to any object. Conductors hold charges of a greater magnitude for a longer period of time.

[Name of Jutsu: Denya no Jutsu (Electric Arrow Technique)
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Rank of Jutsu: Genin
Description: User can fire a small bolt of lightning at an opponent. Magnitude can vary. (Max Distance=15 feet.) (Max Voltage: .5 Kilovolts.) (Max Amperage: .75 Amps)

Name of Jutsu: Arashii no Kyouran (Storm's Fury) [Incomplete]
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Rank of Jutsu: Chuunin
Description: In perfected form, the user would launch a ball of lightning chakra that would explode upon impact. In its current, imperfect form, the ball disintegrates almost immediately upon leaving Kitsune's palm, but can still explode upon impact. (Ex: Punching an opponent causes the orb to explode lightning, harms Kitsune as well)

Name of Jutsu:Kitsune no Kuchiyose no Jutsu (Fox Spirit Summoning Technique)
Type of Jutsu: Ninjutsu
Rank of Jutsu: Chuunin
Description: Kitsune can summon three of the fox spirits:
Nauta: A small, one-tailed ghost fox. Can fly, turn invisible, and turn intangible. Used for reconnaissance.
Katrina: Two-tailed fox-girl wielding two katana. Kitsune's guardian spirit. Kitsune and Katrina can perform certain combination techniques together using her swords and his two Ninjutsu.
Ryoka: Lion-sized hunter fox. Steel sharp teeth and claws.

Taijutsu
A mix of defensive hapkido and offensive taekwondo. Could be mixed with lightning jutsu, given proper training.
Genjutsu

Chakra Control

Kekkei Genkai (Clan Specialty)

Raiyakugan: A three-release doujutsu/muscle combination.
First Release: User gains enhanced vision/reflexes, can sense electric currents, and heightens own chakra output.
Second Release: User can control own electric field and extend it to conductive objects they are touching.
Third Release: Never obtained by a Blue-Eyed Raiyakugan user. In Golden Eyed Raiyakugan users, the shinobi's electric field becomes completely malleable, able to extend, retract, and condense based on the user's willpower. (Think a Lightning-Based Green Lantern, except without the ability to create real shapes. Just basic things like whips, swords, shields, or manipulating the charge of the field for magnetic techniques)

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Equipment, Items, Other

Weapons
Generic style kunai, shuriken, and needles that are slightly more conductive than ordinary weaponry.
Armor
None
Accessories
None
Miscellaneous
None

Posted: Wed Oct 21, 2009 4:15 pm

Skills are done wrong. You have a 0. That's not allowed. A Genin must have a 1 in each stat, and a chuunin must have at least 2.

Jutsu are done wrong.

Kekkai genkai is overpowered. Controlling the electric field means a lot more than I think you think.

Things you can do with that power:
-Stop brain function.
-Stop muscle function.
-Stimulate nerves, make people hurt for no reason.
-Stop heart.

...The list goes on. Way too strong.

Good alternatives abilities are:
-Shocks anyone who touches him
-Charge objects with electricity, which releases on the next thing they touch (Suddenly, electrobaseballs)

And other such less crack powerful things.

]-Kakashi-[
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Posted: Wed Oct 21, 2009 4:49 pm

1. I edited skills.

2. What's wrong with my jutsu, please specify?

3. If you notice, I said that I can control my own personal electric field. I can't stop other people's hearts or control their muscle movements, I can only control the strength/charge of the natural electric field my body emits.

Posted: Wed Oct 21, 2009 4:57 pm

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and the electric field of objects they touch

As for your jutsu, you need to include type and rank.

It goes

Name of Jutsu
Type of Jutsu (Nin, Gen, Tai)
Rank of Jutsu (Genin, Chuunin...etc)
Description.

You've only included name and description.

As for your skills, I believe you did some math wrong. At Genin rank, you get five points, and must put at least one in each skill, doing whatever you want with the other two.

At Chuunin level, you get four more, and must have at least two in each skill. That's a total of nine.

You've used eleven points in your skills.

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Posted: Wed Oct 21, 2009 5:32 pm

Kay, sorry about all of that.

I was not operating at full capacity.

How about now?

Posted: Wed Oct 21, 2009 5:48 pm

Ok. You've adequately changed everything I asked. Just one last thing-

Quote:

a deadly electric field that can be manipulated at whim.

That irks me slightly. In truth, like I said with Arc's Kekkai Genkai, your Kekkai Genkai shouldn't be an attacking thing, it should be something that augments you, and your JUTSU should be what you use to attack with.

For example- that bone fellow, Kimimaru (Sp?) His ability allowed him to just manipulate his bones. If he wrote it down in this RP it would be

"Can harden, extend, shorten, weaken and otherwise alter the state of his bones"

Now, I'd tell him that was way overpowered, but even that ability is not an attacking one. It pretty much just allows him to have weapons anytime. His techniques, then, utilized those weapons.

Make something for your jutsu to utilize, rather than turning yourself into a Raichu.

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Posted: Wed Oct 21, 2009 5:54 pm

Alright, I think that should be better.

Even if Kitsune achieved 3rd Release (hitherto unachievable by Blue Eyed Raiyakugan users) it would be something completely different, but I would get it approved first.

His father, a member of Hakumei, DOES possess the Golden Eyes Third Release, but we'll burn that bridge when I build it, eh?

Posted: Wed Oct 21, 2009 5:57 pm

Okay. That's an improvement.

And yes, when you decide to bring him to that level, come discuss it with me, and we'll go over the specifics.

Approved.

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Posted: Wed Oct 21, 2009 6:00 pm

Yes.

Thank you very much.

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