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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 12:15 pm
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 12:25 pm
Name: Alessa David
Nicknames: Sheep, and any variation thereof. She doesn’t like it. But, hey. She doesn’t publicly complain.
Age: 16
Birthday: January 29
Sign: Aquarius
Blood Type: O+
Fav. Food: about any kind of pasta, even the instant kind. And sandwiches, nothing better than BLT.
Hated Food: mashed potatoes. Beans. Cakes that are very sugary, seriously, how can people even digest these?
School: Meadowview High School
Hobbies: +Jogging. Running is so very simple: it doesn’t require accessories or a lot of training, can be done anytime, anywhere, and there’s no set rules. Whenever Alessa feels upset, she runs in a park or another nice area. Can you run? Do you like talking when you’re jogging? Do you have something that plays music, a radio, a walkman, anything? Awesome, now, you’re her friend. She by no means reaches an athletic level, but all those years of practice allowed her to run faster and longer than average. Just a bit.
+Babysitting. Now, now, don’t look at me like that. Taking care of the young or the weak not only provides her decent incomes whenever she needs money, but it is also one of the few things that make her feel useful and whole. She's often considered by kids to be too boring, but no parent so far has had any complaint to file. Because when she really does focus on an activity, such as this one, she loses all clumsiness. +Cheesy movies. If it’s a reference among the geeks, chances are she’s watched. Twice. And enjoyed it. Parodies are also very much liked (did I just hear “Kill Bill”?). Sci-fi fills another fine spot in her heart, though all the techno-babble goes over her head. More recent movies just take themselves too seriously. Also, too many half-naked chicks.
Gemstone: Garnet
Virtues: +Trustworthy. Alessa will listen to you (or pretend very well she does). She will lend you an ear even when she’s busy. Chances are she will remember what has bugged you last Wednesday, and ask you if it has since been resolved. And if you tell her a secret, Alessa will never spill it in your back, ever, even under the threat of death*. Of course, it means she has to be told what you just told her is a secret, because she can be bad at guessing the obvious sometimes. * actually, she has never been threatened of anything that grave before. Of course. But she’s really serious about secrets.
+Helpful. That’s what the girl is. Sometimes (read: often) clumsy, but she will lend a hand to about anyone who needs it that isn’t her enemy. She doesn’t even need to be asked! That book you dropped on the floor? She’ll take it and hand it back to you. That huge pile of dictionaries lying on the floor? Yep, that too. Ask her to put it back into a nice pile, and she will (not without bumping once or twice the paper tower and starting over, of course, but beggars can’t be choosers). No, she won’t, however, help you rob someone. Nice try, but she’s not THAT stupid. She draws the line at anything ambiguous.
+Easygoing. Alessa is very much able to question and make fun of herself. It’s hard to actually offend her. There is no such thing as “srs bsns” to her. She can put her dignity aside temporarily for a good laugh. And because she doesn’t believe in extremism, only exceptional circumstances can possibly make her force someone to do anything. Do as you will as long as it doesn’t hurt anyone! She’s not the funniest gal in the universe, far from it, but chances you’ll enjoy her sense of humor all the same.
Flaws: -Plain. The poor girl doesn’t really exist for herself. She doesn’t have many hobbies. She’s a clumsy jack-of-all-trades and master of absolutely none at all. Her personality is not very complex. Her intelligence is average. She’s not especially funny. She has no interesting story to tell. She’s not even that pretty. And she knows that. Look, if you want to have actual fun with someone, you might want to hang out with someone else.
Real or not, that’s what she thinks, anyway. It's not that she thinks low of herself, but as soon as someone else steals the spotlight, she'll say goodbye and back away. Competing with other people? C'mon, they must be more fun or more interesting or smarter, why would she bother trying? She needs friends to claim some love. Meekly.
-Avoids conflict. Yeah, yeah, “Sheep” because of her hair, that’s very smart. Ahah. Not. It was not funny the first time, and it still isn’t. But Alessa doesn’t say anything and just lets it go. Everyone will forget that eventually, right? (She won’t, but she doesn’t like to admit she can hold grudges for a very long time.) Let it be, it’s not worth the fuss, and maybe she’s just overreacting. She does that with about everything. At best, she will minimize the problem, and pretend she will deal with it personally. She won’t. Which brings us to another problem of hers…
-Ready to explode. … after accumulating enough steam, she snaps. It can result in a lot of shouting, stuff being broken, or even kicking. The last offense can be a drop, and she will react violently, leaving everyone puzzled. Alessa will go to her normal state fairly quickly and apologize profusely. Because most of the time, she really doesn’t mean it. To prevent that, she clears her mind with her hobbies, but it’s not always enough. It’s best if nobody but her (and maybe the victim) witnesses her snapping.
Physical description:
Hair: CURLY. Poofy. Where do you think that nickname came from? *cough* I mean, very curly brown hair resting on her shoulders. Large sideways bang over her forehead. Princess curls aren’t completely unheard of, either, when she's in the mood.
Eyes: large, dark brown eyes.
Face: slightly chubby and round. Heart-shaped lips. Small nose.
Body: slightly chubby. Muscular legs. 5’4”. Caucasian. Average everything else.
Fashion: rectangular glasses. A heavy golden bracelet with sky blue beads. Comfy and boring clothes. Jeans and shorts, but no skirt unless it's the uniform.
Bio: her grandparents were all immigrants from various parts of Europe. When asked, most of them will mumble a very weird-sounding name, leaving you to wonder if it's the accent that makes it sound like it might be from the ex-USSR. From her father's side, there are the David. And on her mother's, the Smarckssen.
Her parents, however, were born in this country. And amazingly, while the couple has never had any major crisis, her grandparents hate each other like there was no tomorrow. Montague vs. Capulet kind of hate. The conflict started so long ago nobody is really sure what it was about; depending of the party, however, it either involved a stolen car, two lost dogs, one cheating boyfriend, or a tasteless joke. Maybe all of the above. God only knows for certain. Because of that, while all her grandparents are, despite their venerable age, alive, Alessa’s parents and their daughter have been staying away from the bunch; they were fed up with it even before getting married. And anyway, the David and the Smarckssen elders try to prevent each other from seeing their granddaughter on a regular basis. The girl isn't so sure she wants to see bickering old people who spout insults whenever they have a third party available. Her father also has a sister, but unfortunately, she's pretty much a carbon copy of her parents. Last time Alessa met aunt Elsa, she called the poor girl "whiny b*****d"(did I say she was 7, and her father never spoke in public to aunt Elsa again since then?).
Thus, Alessa doesn’t know anything about her countries of origin. No community she clearly belongs to, but she more than makes up with her blending skills. One might rather say those are invisibility skills, but as long as she didn't get bullied, she never complained about that. Other than her familial conflict, her life has been amazingly average: Mr. Johan David is a plumber, Mrs. Maria David is a cashier in a grocery, they have never been rich but have never had serious money issues either, they rarely go on holiday, and no crisis whatsoever has ever hit them for the past 16 years. Their only daughter has grown up in a healthy environment, trying to find her call. Starting age 12, as her parents stayed out to work most of the day, she started raising herself and taking care of the houseworks. Maturity became a quality, which she gained faster than most other classmates did.
It only lasted until one month ago. Their neighbour’s house and their own was partially blown out by an explosion while they were going shopping. Turned out it was a gas leak that had a lethal outcome for their neighbours. They moved away from the traumatizing event and roofless house to Destiny City, not so far away, a nice place where, they thought, Alessa could make more friends and forget it all.
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 12:29 pm
Senshi: Sailor Antigone, Senshi of Jewels Fuku:Look, as long as it fits the jewel theme and is emerald green/pearly white/another bright gemstone color, I’ll be HAPPY. ARTISTIC LICENSE HERE, GUYS. I MEAN IT. But keeping the glasses would be a plusChallenge: Your (shining) grave shall be my most precious treasure! Attack #1 (for senshi) NAME: Ruby Armor! [What it does] A thick ruby layer appears anybody on Sailor Antigone's desired body part. It covers a small area, and can only stand minor damages before shattering and turning into powder. Because it’s an armor doesn’t mean you can’t hit the enemy with your covered body part! It’s not pointy but it can CRUSH. Lasts until reverting back to human form or destroyed. Can only be summoned twice per battle. Attack #1a (for senshi) NAME: Diamond Armor! [What it does] Like the Ruby Armor, only with a diamond layer instead (DUH), which covers now the whole forearm (or any equivalent area), and can withstand a couple medium hits (whether from outside or as attacks from Sailor Antigone) before it shatters blahblahblah. Attack #2: (for Eternal and beyond for senshi) NAME: Emerald Burial of Mercy! [What it does] Four thick (several inches) translucent emerald walls emerge from the ground around the target and form a closed pyramid, effectively protecting them, even from above. Each wall is however more fragile than it looks and can stand the equivalent of a couple big hits before shattering and turning to powder. While it shields against the enemy, the target can’t get out of there and counter-attack, either, until at least one wall is destroyed. All walls stay in place until destroyed or return to human form. Sailor Antigone can target herself, an enemy, an ally, or any combination of the three. While the pyramid’s size depends of the amount of people it covers as not to crush them, an individual wall’s solidity doesn’t change in any way. Of course, it's best not to stand in the walls' way while they're rising, or you might get painfully crushed. Sailor Antigone can only summon Emerald Burial of Mercy once per battle, and it drains most of her energy. More information on Antigone, the Greek heroine: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Antigone_(Sophocles) http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Antigone
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 12:38 pm
 Alessa will let that one slip just for you.  Yeah, I got my computer back! I can therefore show you Alessa's coloured portrait with princess curls, and a rough sketch of her Emerald Burial of Mercy attack.
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 12:42 pm
I believe you can post now. *off to get additionnal information on Antigone*
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Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 12:47 pm
EDIT: I apparently can edit after all, so I'll keep this other post just in case.
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Posted: Sat Oct 17, 2009 10:05 am
Crit time!
I think the sandwich is called a BLT. (Bacon, Lettuce, Tomato)
Good Confident – I think you mean Trustworthy or Reliable. Trustworthy would be she is there for a friend and can keep secrets. Reliable is also of that nature, and would be there for you when called. Confident is more of the opposite of shy, where you could go up to the front of the class and not break into a full-body sweat.
Not to serious – Try “Easy Going”. She seems like the type of person who lets things roll off her shoulders and take things lightly.
Pressure accumulation – She sounds like an introvert, where she draws everything inward. That and she bottles everything up. I do like the long fuse, big bang part of it. Just a personal opinion, but the name (Pressure Accumulation) seems a bit too technical to me.
The story sounds good to be. Might break up that chunk into paragraphs though.
Aside from that, everything else sounds good.
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Posted: Sat Oct 17, 2009 10:10 am
Thanks, the bad part with English not being your first language, is that you tend to fall a bit short on vocabulary. wink
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Posted: Sat Oct 17, 2009 10:14 am
That's why you've got us to help you 8D We help because we love you~
REALLY.
WE DO.
So a couple of things that I wanted to ask:
-In "Plain" you say that she would back off and let people be friends with someone else, but has there ever been a friend that she's had a really hard time letting go of like that? Or are they all hard to let go of??
-How does she take people getting mad at her for her clumsiness when she's only trying to help? (re: "Helpful")
I LOVE her appearance and her story ; ~ ; *HUGGU* i will draw you a picture, just give me a few minutes/an hour, i need to finish this writeup for class. <3
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Posted: Sat Oct 17, 2009 10:28 am
AWW YEAH. crying
-Well, Alessa hasn't had extremely strong bonds with anyone in particular during high school, but on the other hand, her personality makes it easy to make friends with most people, even temporarily. Also, she's starting to be jaded on the whole subject, so she doesn't cling on old friends if she can see she's not valuable anymore. Depending on the person, it may hurt, but again, she hardly shows that on the short term.
-First, while I mention it too much a lot, I wouldn't say she's clumsy to the point of it becoming a real flaw of hers (or else no parent would leave her near their children ever), just that it happens enough to be noticed. Secondly, when people get mad, she apologizes. Repeatedly. And offers to fix the problem. And if it's still refused, she apologizes more.
Oh my god, pictures too? I'm so glad I have spent time refining her profile. T__T
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Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 12:06 pm
-bounces in to crit-
Ooh the arts is pretty! Cool sailor idea a senshi of jewlery! -very cool- Hobbies - The hobbies are good, well done -nods- Didnt expect her to love babysitting! -I hate it personally lawls!-
You seem to have her flaws and virtues all worked out -not much to crit since you did such a good job- Everything seems to mesh well, and I dont see much conflicting between them.
I love that you have a bio! -its always nice to see background info, it shows that you care enough to put work in- HURRAI!
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Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 12:11 pm
I personally hate kids as well, but part of the fun is playing something you aren't, right? And thanks for the crits (or lack thereof) whee
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Posted: Sat Oct 24, 2009 4:07 am
Well, I believe my quest is complete here. I've changed a couple things (mostly about the attacks). 3nodding READY FOOOOOR MARKING~
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Posted: Sat Oct 24, 2009 8:44 pm
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