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Kytara - High Reaches [Approved]

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DarkHikari

Shadowy Seeker

PostPosted: Wed Sep 30, 2009 4:01 pm


Name: Kytara [pronounced ‘ky-tara’]
Age: 17
Gender: Female
Sexual Orientation: Heterosexual
Craft: Harper
Rank: Apprentice/Candidate

History: Kytara was born the middle child of a large family. As such she had little to no attention from her parents. An uncle, on her mother’s side, took her under his wing and taught her all he knew. At a very young age Kytara became fascinated with dragons and fire lizards, especially Greens. Every day she would slip away to watch the dragon riders as they cared for their partners.
When Kytara was 8 her family packed up and left because of the undercrowding, leaving her behind with her Uncle. After that she slowly stopped talking, feeling that she had done something wrong to make them not want her anymore. Her Uncle did his best to raise her right, but she never opened up to other like she did around him. Instead she started to filter her observations into very detailed accounts of day to day life in the Weyr.
She eventually attracted the attention of the Harpers, brought to their attention by her very detailed observations and keen memory during classes. She often argues with the younger Harpers about small details they forget. During the most recent Search, many were surprised when she was Searched, and many were surprised to find that she still existed within the Weyr.

Appearance: Kytara is a small girl, standing only 5’1” at her fullest height. She has a small to medium build, with little or no muscles to show. Her skin is lightly tanned from years of living in the Weyr, with small soft freckles brushed like a raccoons mask around her eyes and across her nose. Her hair, once a vibrant gold, has lightened into a pale straw color with almost no pigment. It brushes her shoulders and is usually held back in a small clip at the base of her neck if not left loose. Her eyes are a lively pale blue framed by long black lashes. Here

Personality: Her personality, like her physical stature, is small and soft. She is very quiet, often to the point of being withdrawn. She very seldom speaks, preferring to observe instead.
Once she opens up to someone she has shown to have an excellent sense of humor and an attractive smile. She is very opinionated and loves to share those opinions with those she holds closely. Even then she is not very talkative, only speaking when she feels it is worth the breath it takes to say something. She has a keen interest in writing, something that –combined with her preference to observe rather than speak- drew the Harper’s attentions to her.
Occasionally there come times when she is upset. It is then that she reveals her very hot-headed temper. Very rarely does she strike out in anger or violence.

Other: Kytara has an amazing talent for remembering the small details that most others miss. She is also very argumentative over these details.
PostPosted: Wed Sep 30, 2009 4:20 pm


Couple of things:

If she stopped talking and was so quiet, how would she attract the attention of the harpers? It doesn't really make sense a group of people who are so busy would be attracted to a quiet girl more than the other children. Harpers in the Weyr are teachers and performers; outgoing people.

You mention overcrowding, but the Weyr is severely undercrowded because of the losses from the plague still behind them. There's more than enough room for a family, even if that family has many children.

You also say she's lived at Ista. High Reaches is desperate for riders; they're not so desperate for candidates. At least not enough to have to go grabbing them from other Weyrs. And Ista would have it's own clutches for her to try and Impress.

Her personality reads like it contradicts itself through the whole thing. You say she's very quiet then go on to say she "lives to voice her opinions". You say she's got a temper and "often rambles on", but earlier say even when she voices her opinions to people she's close to she's "not very talkative". It's a bit confusing how she's portrayed as both loud and quiet at the same time.

If you can clear up these issues we'll be glad to approve you. :3

Hopefolly
Crew

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DarkHikari

Shadowy Seeker

PostPosted: Wed Sep 30, 2009 4:37 pm


Sorry. Its an edited copy of an older profile. I haven't touched it in a little while and tried to clean it up. xd
If there are still problems, I don't mind going back and trying to smooth them out!
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