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 Posted: Tue Sep 22, 2009 9:40 am
Posted this up at another critique forum and they seem to be a bit slow this week. If anyone here sees this and finds something that jumps out at them let me know. Any comments or critique would be appreciated. : ) 
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Posted: Tue Sep 22, 2009 1:26 pm
I'd say to keep studying up in general anatomy. c: Lookin' good so far.
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Posted: Tue Sep 22, 2009 4:33 pm
the pose is kinda flat to me .. its as if she is really trying to be stiff razz
its kinda hard to change the entire pose now, but what i always do is to make alot of thumbnails before deciding on how i want the pose.
also the lighting seems to come from all directions .. you might wanna try and decide on 1 or 2 light sources and stick with it
smile
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Posted: Tue Sep 22, 2009 4:42 pm
Thanks for the feedback guys! I'm always trying to fix stuff and you have no idea how far this piece has come..it is not to late to change the pose! In fact I am going to be redrawing her legs at some point tonight hopefully..
I'm not really one to thumbnail with every piece I do..occasionally it happens if I'm planning something big or if I'm working on actual paper but who knows, maybe I'll try some thumbnails before I try to add a background to this thing even thought I should have to start with. Really didn't have any idea I'd be putting this much work into it to be honest.
I took an anatomy class last semester and I still try to just look at photographs and books and just people walking around all the time to keep my mind fresh on how things should look. But yup, I will keep trying to improve upon this as well as the other images I'm working on.
Oh, did I mention I type too much always? :) Anyways thank you and if there's anything else you spot that's off or things you think would be helpful let me know.
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Posted: Tue Sep 22, 2009 4:51 pm
I personally never draw only the subject. Background isn't something that should be added in later or ignored, it is just as important as everything else in the picture. The next piece you work on, try planning the whole drawing (figure + background) at once. Another trick to get more dynamic compositions is to not have the subject directly in the middle.
That said, I like the hair and feathers. They are vibrant! <3
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Posted: Tue Sep 22, 2009 5:30 pm
I have always been awful about leaving backgrounds as an afterthought..I guess in a way they kinda terrify me.. ._. I will try to break that habit because they really do help define a piece when done well.
I was working from a larger pixel dimension than what I posted here, the figure is off centered to the right a bit and I have some random swirly things and notes scrawled along the left side that will be erased soon to make room for the background. But yea that's a good point I agree with, having stuff in the middle doesn't really make your eye focus much elsewhere than the middle.
Thank you for the compliments and I will start trying to get this piece sorted out a bit tonight. I'll post progress at some point. :)
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Posted: Wed Sep 23, 2009 1:31 pm
backgrounds dont have to be complicated at all .. just 2 - 3 colors and big shapes will do the trick. But backgrounds are really great to get a good flow in your pictures.
just a simple silhouette of some buildings in the distance witch some windows will be more then inuf
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Posted: Wed Sep 23, 2009 8:05 pm
Silhouettes of buildings in the background definitely sounds less scary than what I was thinking..I tend to get carried away trying to plan stuff sometimes then it doesn't quite happen. I will keep simplicity in mind, thank you! :)
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Posted: Wed Sep 23, 2009 8:45 pm
Looking pretty good so far. I like how you did her hair. One thing that jumps at me most would have to be the lighting, but that's something that can be easily solved. =) Another thing I would consider is giving it more value(I'm bad at this part as well, lol).
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Posted: Sun Sep 27, 2009 11:04 am
Build stronger shadows and highlights. That'll fix your 'flat' pose instantly.
B-but not TOO dark or light. Be sure to blend the shadows properly and to add itty bitty touches of light here and there where the light source hits hard. D:
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Posted: Sun Sep 27, 2009 11:12 am
Thank you very much Shoko and Candy, I will definitely work on the lighting/shading/values when I continue working on this picture. :) <3
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Posted: Wed Sep 30, 2009 8:34 pm
Been a bit busy and out of it lately but I took some time to work on this tonight.
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Posted: Wed Sep 30, 2009 9:27 pm
Love where this is going. The background really elevates this from 'just another character study' to a featured piece in your gallery!
In your shading, I noticed you're going from just light to dark. I think introducing some different colors and tinted greys to your highlights and shadows would really help to unite the piece and bring in another dimension.
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Posted: Thu Oct 01, 2009 3:08 pm
I want to first start off by say that I love your color choices in this piece, the red of her hair really compliments her outfit and the background is coming along well.
I do agree with the "flatness" people have been talking about but I see it mostly in her outfit. It needs a bit more definition and maybe a few extra folds. And I'm also a little uncertain with the direction of the lights in this scene...
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Posted: Thu Oct 01, 2009 5:53 pm
Thanks for all the comments and feedback people, you've brought up a lot of good points for me to consider, I will read through them again once I have gotten all my evil homework out of the way!
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