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 Posted: Fri Sep 18, 2009 11:20 pm
Oh these eyes
What these eyes are
Seek what they reap
Their destiny to sow
That my devils might keep
And never take my soul
The pain I've seen
THe blood I've cried
The eyes of a genocide
I'm dead inside
Where's the serenity
The calm we fear
The storm after
the destruction near
Oh these eyes
What are these eyes
To be never more
Never to be seen
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Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 1:06 pm
In my opinion, this poem is the most beautiful of all the ones you have posted so far. It's got a nice balance of clarity and aspects that can be interpreted in many ways. Aside from the language being very effective, and the rhyming not seeming forced, (that takes em a long time to do successfully) it evokes an intense emotional response in me. My interpretation may be scewed from my own mentally/experiences, but to me this poem is about frustration. That after undergoing so many turmoils, the goodness never came and now in the end of his life all he seeks is to avoid further pain: "That my devils might keep
And never take my soul" Simply brilliant.
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Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 1:16 pm
patience1984 In my opinion, this poem is the most beautiful of all the ones you have posted so far. It's got a nice balance of clarity and aspects that can be interpreted in many ways. Aside from the language being very effective, and the rhyming not seeming forced, (that takes em a long time to do successfully) it evokes an intense emotional response in me. My interpretation may be scewed from my own mentally/experiences, but to me this poem is about frustration. That after undergoing so many turmoils, the goodness never came and now in the end of his life all he seeks is to avoid further pain: "That my devils might keep And never take my soul" Simply brilliant.
I wrote it after my break down lmao.
I looked at my life seeing all I did wrong.
And what others have done to me.
and I just wanted it all to end.
Honestly, Im surprized Im still here lmao
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Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 5:54 pm
ExileDeath patience1984 In my opinion, this poem is the most beautiful of all the ones you have posted so far. It's got a nice balance of clarity and aspects that can be interpreted in many ways. Aside from the language being very effective, and the rhyming not seeming forced, (that takes em a long time to do successfully) it evokes an intense emotional response in me. My interpretation may be scewed from my own mentally/experiences, but to me this poem is about frustration. That after undergoing so many turmoils, the goodness never came and now in the end of his life all he seeks is to avoid further pain: "That my devils might keep And never take my soul" Simply brilliant.
I wrote it after my break down lmao.
I looked at my life seeing all I did wrong.
And what others have done to me.
and I just wanted it all to end.
Honestly, Im surprized Im still here lmaoIt's really messed up that some people get rained on over and over again. I don't know you that well yet but I'm glad you are still here and I hope/think that you have some sunshine coming your way. I'm not sure when it will come, but from my observations it seems the good always balances the bad in the end; seeing as you have had so much bad so far, it means you have a LOT of good coming
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Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 8:50 pm
patience1984 ExileDeath patience1984 In my opinion, this poem is the most beautiful of all the ones you have posted so far. It's got a nice balance of clarity and aspects that can be interpreted in many ways. Aside from the language being very effective, and the rhyming not seeming forced, (that takes em a long time to do successfully) it evokes an intense emotional response in me. My interpretation may be scewed from my own mentally/experiences, but to me this poem is about frustration. That after undergoing so many turmoils, the goodness never came and now in the end of his life all he seeks is to avoid further pain: "That my devils might keep And never take my soul" Simply brilliant.
I wrote it after my break down lmao.
I looked at my life seeing all I did wrong.
And what others have done to me.
and I just wanted it all to end.
Honestly, Im surprized Im still here lmaoIt's really messed up that some people get rained on over and over again. I don't know you that well yet but I'm glad you are still here and I hope/think that you have some sunshine coming your way. I'm not sure when it will come, but from my observations it seems the good always balances the bad in the end; seeing as you have had so much bad so far, it means you have a LOT of good coming
Im dating the most amazing girl ever right now.
She makes me so happy.
Still, I keep looking for that ray of hope and sunshine.
So I can make both of our lives better.
And I thank you.
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Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 8:54 pm
ExileDeath patience1984 ExileDeath patience1984 In my opinion, this poem is the most beautiful of all the ones you have posted so far. It's got a nice balance of clarity and aspects that can be interpreted in many ways. Aside from the language being very effective, and the rhyming not seeming forced, (that takes em a long time to do successfully) it evokes an intense emotional response in me. My interpretation may be scewed from my own mentally/experiences, but to me this poem is about frustration. That after undergoing so many turmoils, the goodness never came and now in the end of his life all he seeks is to avoid further pain: "That my devils might keep And never take my soul" Simply brilliant.
I wrote it after my break down lmao.
I looked at my life seeing all I did wrong.
And what others have done to me.
and I just wanted it all to end.
Honestly, Im surprized Im still here lmaoIt's really messed up that some people get rained on over and over again. I don't know you that well yet but I'm glad you are still here and I hope/think that you have some sunshine coming your way. I'm not sure when it will come, but from my observations it seems the good always balances the bad in the end; seeing as you have had so much bad so far, it means you have a LOT of good coming
Im dating the most amazing girl ever right now.
She makes me so happy.
Still, I keep looking for that ray of hope and sunshine.
So I can make both of our lives better.
And I thank you.I can definitely relate. She sounds like a great start. I mean I've been through hell (of course it could be worse but it has been awful) and my bf and I are still going through way too many stressful things...but I think that I'd go through the hell over and over again and with my bf in my life it would still be balanced for the good more. From what I can tell you really deserve her too.
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Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 9:12 pm
patience1984 ExileDeath patience1984 ExileDeath patience1984 In my opinion, this poem is the most beautiful of all the ones you have posted so far. It's got a nice balance of clarity and aspects that can be interpreted in many ways. Aside from the language being very effective, and the rhyming not seeming forced, (that takes em a long time to do successfully) it evokes an intense emotional response in me. My interpretation may be scewed from my own mentally/experiences, but to me this poem is about frustration. That after undergoing so many turmoils, the goodness never came and now in the end of his life all he seeks is to avoid further pain: "That my devils might keep And never take my soul" Simply brilliant.
I wrote it after my break down lmao.
I looked at my life seeing all I did wrong.
And what others have done to me.
and I just wanted it all to end.
Honestly, Im surprized Im still here lmaoIt's really messed up that some people get rained on over and over again. I don't know you that well yet but I'm glad you are still here and I hope/think that you have some sunshine coming your way. I'm not sure when it will come, but from my observations it seems the good always balances the bad in the end; seeing as you have had so much bad so far, it means you have a LOT of good coming
Im dating the most amazing girl ever right now.
She makes me so happy.
Still, I keep looking for that ray of hope and sunshine.
So I can make both of our lives better.
And I thank you.I can definitely relate. She sounds like a great start. I mean I've been through hell (of course it could be worse but it has been awful) and my bf and I are still going through way too many stressful things...but I think that I'd go through the hell over and over again and with my bf in my life it would still be balanced for the good more. From what I can tell you really deserve her too.
I really want to make a home for me and her.
I know it sounds dumb and sappy. . .
But with her, I have gotten a different feeling.
I mean, Ive gone in my head and looked for this emotion.
But its different, its hard to explain, but its a happy one I think lol
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Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 10:36 pm
ExileDeath Thank you ^_^.
I really want to make a home for me and her.
I know it sounds dumb and sappy. . .
But with her, I have gotten a different feeling.
I mean, Ive gone in my head and looked for this emotion.
But its different, its hard to explain, but its a happy one I think lol I's really nice, not sappy. To me, the happiest thing is sharing your life with the right person. My bf and I, I think I mentioned we have been together for ten years, and we have had our own apartment for two years. I hate apartments...your paying for something you can't keep or resell and the landlord has scary power over you. It was insanely stressful before we had this place though, so I am very grateful for it. Sounds to me like love but since I'm not u, who knows. Either way, I'm glad your so happy with her. I just want to spend as much time with my bf as I can without stresses.
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