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 Posted: Wed Sep 16, 2009 4:19 pm
OK so I just joined this guide and I would like to start rping,but I have not idea what my level is could someone please tell me if I'm 1 2 or 3?
here is a post of mine to judge:
Fiona took a step forward and walked into the hideout.It was a little cold but it was better then freezing outside.the halls where almost empty,people heading of to rooms to take a rest after a long days work. She knew she couldn't ,She didn't want to walk up in the middle of a nap for a announcement.After seeing the commotion at the fireworks she knew something was going to be different tonight. her palms began to sweat nervous of what it was. she was tired of all the running and training shed been doing In-between the fireworks and here. so she set herself down on a chair exhausted,hoping someone would just come out and tell the news so she could go to sleep. She leaned her head back and began to think about how pretty the fireworks had been the sky,She felt slight regret she hadn't seen theme all.
edit: sorry if this is the wrong forum,like I said I just joined.
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Posted: Wed Sep 16, 2009 4:28 pm
Id say you might be a 2 at highest if you need to get a start out go with the easier ones then go on from there.
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Posted: Wed Sep 16, 2009 5:11 pm
thanks I think ill start with the level one and see how that runs out biggrin
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Posted: Wed Sep 16, 2009 5:33 pm
np thats what im doing but im sure i can do the second level but i chose to do easy for starters.
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Posted: Sat Oct 10, 2009 7:44 pm
I agree with the last person to post. You're a two at best. I think grammar corresctions are your biggest fault, though. Put a space after a comma, and check to make sure you don't say a word when you mean another. Like at the end, you said "theme" instead of your intended "them".
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Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2010 3:09 am
Kyle was outside of the building waiting for Fiona to meet him, he was a bit excited to finally be alone with her, it wasn't everyday that they got to spend time together. Kyle was in his white button up t-shirt and wearing navy blue jeans as well as black shoes. Kyle saw that fireworks were going on and smiled thinking that he should take Fiona to watch some fireworks after they had a nice dinner. He looked at his watch that he had and saw that she was tad bit late, he began to debate if he should go up and get her or if he should wait more. Kyle looked up at the window where her room was located and decided to wait a couple more minutes. After awhile of waiting, he decided that it was time to go and see what was the hold up, even though he is a very patient person, he was anxious to see her and her beauty. Kyle went into the building and started ascending the stairs towards where her room was at. Once he arrived, he cleared his throat and knocked on it lightly "Fiona?" Kyle says in a calm and peaceful tone of voice, hoping that she didn't forget about their little date.
So yea..sorry to have post this but I wanted to know what you guys think if i'm like a 1, 2 or 3..critic me as hard as you like guys..hehe please and thank you!! ^^
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