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 Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 3:40 pm
So, I got bored in World History(surprise, surprise)and I reember this vizulization we did during a workshop at band camp. Well, I was in a poetry mood(either when I am bored, sad, lonely, or angry. This was a bit of lonely and bored) and so I wrote a poem kind of based off of that visual and how I feel when we enter the stadium(thought truthfully, this isn't how it really is. But it would be awesome if it was how it was)
We are the Band
Silence,
But a tiny
click, click, click
Silhouettes against the horizon
We are the band
Not a breath,
Not a whisper
Just a click, click, click
Louder, closer
We are the band
Approaching,
Moving with ease,
With grace
click, click, click
As a wave
We are the band
Pause
Everybody watches
Nobody moves
Silence
Nobody breathes
We are the band
"Band, parade Rest!"
"Gold!"
The words echo
We are the band
And we are here
Tada! Personally, I am quite proud of it. More then my "proud to be a band geek" song that I didn't post on here because I lost in in the abyss of my backpack. If you want, you can replace Gold with whatever your band says when going to parade rest. We do green for attention, gold for parade rest. Obviously, those are our school colors. It sounds cooler if you say it slower and then faster, and quietly too. It makes it sound all ominous if you dso it right. i think that is why I like it so much. Mysterious, yet awesome.
One of my better works, if I do say so myself. Usually, my best are whn I am depressed about something, like when my best friend moved two states away. Those were some of the best poems I have written, though none of my other friends wanted to read them because they were depressing. All my poems seem to be depressing. Weird, because normally I'm a pretty happy person.
Anyway, give me your feedback, if you please
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Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 4:32 pm
it's great. I think that you should keep writing poetry, you're really good.
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Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 7:58 pm
Thanks. I like good comments. They make me smile biggrin
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Posted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 11:34 pm
i like it! you should make another
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Posted: Tue Sep 08, 2009 12:11 pm
Oh wow. That's so cool.
You should write more. biggrin
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Posted: Tue Sep 08, 2009 3:36 pm
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Posted: Tue Sep 08, 2009 10:13 pm
I'm trying to put together another one, but it keeps coming out weird, more like a comercial trying to get people to join the armyXD
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Posted: Wed Sep 09, 2009 5:52 pm
Well keep on trying! I'm sure you'll get it right. biggrin
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Posted: Wed Sep 16, 2009 12:28 am
IL FRIGGIN LOVE YOOOHHH!!!!!!
lol best poem EVERZ
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Posted: Sun Sep 20, 2009 2:11 pm
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Posted: Sun Sep 20, 2009 3:12 pm
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Posted: Sun Sep 20, 2009 5:19 pm
heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart
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Posted: Sun Sep 20, 2009 6:39 pm
Thanks for the positive feedback guys! I like it when others enjoy my work.
it isn't very good, and really random, but I figured I might as well post this. Last year I wrote a song when a bug flew in my ear. It is to the tune of the song "Bingo"
I went to marching band one day and made a buggy friend
P A U L L, P A U L L, P A U L L and Paul-l was his name-o
XD Paul-l, enfasis on the last lXD
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Posted: Sun Sep 20, 2009 7:04 pm
wow ur good and i love ur bug song XD
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